What if the chosen Pinkie Pie in the newest MLP episode was the WRONG one?
This story answers your question, children.
This takes place in an alternate universe where the chosen Pinkie Pie to stay is actually Pinkamena Diane Pie. (To me, I would consider this maybe a Cupcakes beforemath.)
I guess you can kind of assume the real Pinkie goes a bit coo-coo and so forth. I'm really not sure where this fanfic will go since I'm kind of just coming up with ideas off the top of my head. Anyways, enjoy.
(Rated Teen for insanity and detailed choking scenes between two characters. )
Mmm I like, reminds me a lot of my story I feel this could shape into a very interesting fic!
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Thank you! I'm glad someone actually enjoys insane Pinkie just as much as I do
"We need an idea for a story."
"Pinkie chokes Gummy until he passes out and/or dies."
".... Go on."
I enjoyed this, even though I shouldn't have.
There's some legitimate potential here.
Pinkamena?
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Yes.
1638463 Yes indeed! My fic was completely about insane Pinkie and your introduction intrigues my interest greatly! I await impatiently for the next chapter.
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I plan on making the next chapter soon, or just depending on if this gets popular and people actually enjoy it. So you won't have to wait too long, dear.
Uh, not sure how to react to the sadistic Pinkie clone... Either way it seems to be a pretty neat story. I say keep writing it and I'll be sure to watch it!
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I'm not really sure about the crazy Pinkie either..
But you know, I didn't just want a really depressing story about how the real Pinkie looses her sanity, I wanted the readers to be interested on seeing more of the 'evil' Pie and seeing how she 'blooms' in the story.
It would just seem too boring without it but thanks for the comment
I can imagine insane Pinkie singing that. It gives me the shivers.
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Thank you! I got inspired on how creepy that song was from American Horror House
Hey, no problem. I like the window into the conscience of the 'FUN' seeking Pinkie. Though it does make me a little scared. As the first comment I've ever posted I think that the immediate response is perfect!
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Oh you're welcome, I'm going to try and respond to most of the comments I get. ^^''
And exactly, the 'FUN' seeking Pinkie is Pinkamena. I really just thought of that once I remembered how they were all about 'FUN'.
Also, I promise Gummy isn't dead. Pinkie has plans for him
DON'T WORRY, REGIDAR IS HERE!
I must say, not a huge fan of Pinkamena, but this story's got some potential.
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Don't worry, I'm not really going to ..'over do it' like Cupcakes did with Pinkamena.
But anyways, thank you for reading and commenting
Pies, not Pie's. Apostrophes are used to show possession. Ponyville is misspelled, and the F should not be capitalized in Everfree. Also, this entire paragraph is two sentences, both of which run on and include too many thoughts. Suggest breaking them up.
Out of place periods in the middle of the first sentence. Undercurrent would also be the wrong word to use here, as such a pond has no current.
Ear lobes is... a very odd choice of words there. Plus, "happen to" is out of place.
is not a scary song. If you are trying to capture the creepy sing-song voice trope that horror movies take advantage of, literature is really the wrong medium for it. And the fact that it is used twice really gives the impression it's just there to pad out the story.
Not enough happens in this chapter to judge it for its story content; so far it only uses a couple of recycled tropes and does not have an identity of its own. It asks the question that everybody has already asked, but does not begin to answer it.
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Mmmhmm.
I should have really gotten better proof readers ^^''
And as the chapter states, its an introduction. I didn't want for the chapter to suddenly jump into something truly sad or terrifying. I wanted it to be simple and just give a slight thought on how the rest of the story would go. Anyways, thanks for pointing out the mistakes. I'll be fixing them in a minute.
This fic has been done before, dude, and I really hate repetitive ideas. It was good, but you could have thought up a better plot than "Pinkie was sent to the lake and pinkanema goes around all crazy like forever"
not ready to like this yet, but ill definitely watch it.
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Really? I didn't notice.
And I didn't have much of a better plot, I was trying to base it off what happened in the show to the other Pinkie's.
And I'm hoping to improve myself on the next chapter I'm writing now.
Thanks for the comment and read
I wasnt expectiong this so soon but let's give it a checkup
God oh gawd I HATE THIS
WAAAAAH
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Actually there have been over a hundred recorded comics and two hundred fanfictions based off this episode and/or concept.
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GUMMY IS ALIVE.
shh...
No tears..Only dreams now..
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How often will this be updated?
Poor Gummy, I can't stand seeing animals get hurt. I hope this story will be scary but I also hope the poor animals won't get hurt.
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I'm working on the next chapter right now. (:
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Don't worry, I was hesitant to write that up ^^'
This is a really good story and I'm anxiously awaiting the next chapter! I have just one question though; what is the deal with the clones? Are they retarded versions of Pinkie with limited memories and knowledge, or is the mirror pool spitting out brain-dead versions of Pinkie Pies, or is it that the world in the mirror pool is an allusion that all the clones share, and they only get limited chances to get out, or maybe the clones are singular entities that can change into any pony that goes to the mirror pool? You did explain alot more with this chapter, and I like that the mirror pool world is still very vague and hard to describe/imagine, and I think the next chapter is going to be even better! Keep on going!
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To me, I like to think clones were just little bits of Pinkie's personality..
Like..One of the clones would be the sadness side of the real Pinkie Pie if you catch my drift.
For the one who took place, she is..Pinkamena, the anger that lies within Pinkie but doesn't really show up a lot..But, no, I don't think all of the clones are brain dead. I think they're all actual ponies in their own way but their main focus is 'fun'.
And the place the real Pinkie Pie is trapped inside of is pretty much what you would see if you go underwater in the an ocean, but she can breath under water and move around like she would on land and in the next chapter, the book will explain how to get out, how to make clones etc and basic stuff like that.
And for the last one..There are spirits in the Reflection Pool that will take the form of any pony who goes there and wishes to make clones. They are not actual solid beings but..they're like ghosts I guess you could say ^^
And thank you ^_^
Great addition to the story! I can't believe someone can build an entire story just from one episode. Though this story is great, I do warn you, without a larger base, the building that is your story may fall. (whoa philosophical moment). Anyway... do you post these as you write them or write them all then post one by one? Either way, keep it coming!
This shows why Twilight's "Test" was flawed, the real Pinkie Pie would find it just as hard to watch paint dry as the clones, they should have thought of a better idea.
You hear me Twilight ya darn goofed!
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Yeah. I'm trying to get a few more people to check it out and make it more popular..
I am actually just making these up as I go along, a crack story people would call it I guess.
1639978 Cool! I wish I could write fast like that. I get writer's block so easily.
I really do hope Twilight will discover before it's too late that she sent the wrong Pinkie Pie back, and she'd better be ready to apologize.
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Haha. I get writers block too, even though it may not seem like it, using different choices of words is so hard for me. >_<
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TWILIGHT IS AT FAULT FOR THIS.
THIS.
IS.
MADNESS.
Yes! This is wondrously delicious! I like how you see Pinkie's clones as her different personalities split apart The atmosphere for this is most definitely getting intense! I look forward to more
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Thank you~ I'll be working on the next chapter to tomorrow, hopefully.
i saw this one comeing a MILLION MILES AWAY! please continue
22 upvotes and 7 downvotes for pinkie pie. 22/7 is a pi approximation. Spontaneous mathematical humor -- definitely pie.
A new one! YES!
After reading: On second thought, maybe a less enthusiastic "YES". Maybe a sad one? Either way great and engaging story!
Great chapter, only one problem, which isn't even that much of a problem. Applejack's name is one word. The spaces in her name kept breaking me out of the story.
-Minty
Twilight when this is over you will be sent back to magic kindergarten!
YAY!!! Another chapter :)
This chapter is amazing, and I don't mind the cussing. Also it's nice to see a female writer on this site.
ONCE I GET 30 LIKES.
NEXT CHAPTER WILL COME ALONG :D Come on guys!
As 'Pie' moved his eyes his his his HIS HIS HIS!!!!!!!!!!! lol
also "I suggest turning back now if you are under the age of 16." ya thats like asking somone if there not 18 to not go on pron ya ya im 18 for sure
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Oh my god. I'm sorry about that, I'm so used to writing in male persona I messed up. Sorry ^^'