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DarksideEquestria


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Two exceedingly strange ponies arrive in Ponyville, each seeking answers and acceptance. Although their histories are separate, their futures are twisted together in ways they cannot understand.

Tor Ironclad was the adopted son of Princess Celestia, and lived a life in Canterlot protecting the weaker masses and serving his kingdom. Accused and found guilty of horrendous crimes he did not commit, he has been "Decorated" and exiled. Battling madness and regret, as well as a heart broken by one nearest to him, he works in Ponyville as a bounty hunter of sorts, controlling crime while attempting to win over the hearts of the citizens of Ponyville. However, a mysterious stranger has stumbled into town that may shatter Tor's delicate new life.

That stranger is one who calls himself Seething Mass. Fractious and unstable, Seething Mass is an outsider in every way possible. After awaking buried in a casket, Seething Mass stumbled into Ponyville pursuing a fevered desire for knowledge of his origins and life. His mind is wild and chaotic, and he suffers from a severe amnesia that has left him with half-remembered thoughts of a life before Ponyville, when he was apparently somepony else.

These two characters will end up shaping the face of Equestria forever, but will they find redemption and self-realization? Read our continuing story about a tiny venture into
Darkside Equestria.


*Author's Note*
Although our story has Dark in the title, this is not a work of Grimdark fiction. It is a mature work, but it is largely light-hearted. The story deals with how our two unlikely protagonists deal with the life around them, and in turn how they affect the world they find themselves in. Please try a chapter and see what you think! Thanks!
-AnnLies and TheNiceOne-
^The authors, in case you didn't know^

Chapters (14)
Comments ( 127 )

God, This is why I FUCKING HATE CELESTIA, SHES SUCH A FUCKING BITCH!!!!!!! FIRST THE UNESARY BANISHMENT TO THE MOON, THEN THE CONVERSION SHIT ON EARTH, NOW THIS. IM SORRY CELESTIA, YOU MAY SEEM ATTRACTIVE, BUT YOU ARE A BITCH!!!! A FUCKING JERK!. :flutterrage:



Celestia deserves to have the same treatment as the pony in the story, and then be brutality abused by Humans that were part of the conversion bueau. then left for dead.

Nice......the writing style put me off a bit....and it's Filly not Philly....also saw some missing letters here and there but interesting so far.

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Thanks for that. I was likely very hungry when writing this. Is it spelled "philly cheese steak"? With my luck, probably not.
-The Nice One

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Thanks for the comment, I hope it continues to hold up to your expectations!

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Well that certainly is a harsh estimation of Celestia, she only had her adopted son strapped in iron restraints and muzzled. Compared to a life in the dungeon or a death sentence that's quite an improvement. I think.... :rainbowhuh: Needless to say, the relationship between Tor and Celestia becomes very interesting later on.

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Thanks for your comment! We will be sure to fix that mistake, what in particular put you off about the writing style? We will take any constructive criticism, this is our first time working on something like this so every bit of advice helps! :twilightsmile:

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Uh oh, you brought out the crazy Pinkamina! I'm not sure whether I should be worried or not! :rainbowlaugh: Are you talking about the whole,"Decoration," process?

In short, thank you all for commenting. The Nice One and I posted this on Deviantart and din't get nearly as much attention, I've read a lot of fictions on this site and I'm really excited to be able to contribute! Hold on to your horses everyone, we have more coming your way!

-Ann Lies.

1585740 i'm just used to paragraphs instead of line after line.:twilightsheepish:

if you ever need ideas for chaps i can help.need characters heroes/villains anything really.:pinkiehappy::moustache:

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I apologize for that, I was unfamiliar with how FiMFiction uploads stories, so I didn't realize it would butcher the formatting like that. Rest assured it shall be fixed! Thanks majorly for the offer, do you by chance have a Deviantart account?

1586027 yes i do but i am not that good an artist and i've only submitted one thing but the link is in my profile.

I'm actually surprised we have comments right now! As Ann Lies has stated, we got zip on Deviantart! I'm glad he had the idea to post here.
Regards
The Nice One:moustache:

So here is the introduction for our second protagonist, Seething Mass. Seething Mass is a really fun character to write because his thoughts are so disjointed and random, and his speech tends to follow odd paths that give him an odd vocal manner. He is my invention, although definitely not myself in pony form. I'm not that crazy. Most of the time. :pinkiecrazy:

While you are reading this story, try to keep in mind that you'll end up in a lot less trouble if you remember that
Ann lies.

:trixieshiftleft:
:trixieshiftright:

....i like.....he reminds me of me when i'm bored.....i'd like to see where this is going.

p.s have emoticons!:pinkiehappy::pinkiegasp::pinkiecrazy::rainbowkiss::rainbowwild::trixieshiftright::twilightblush::moustache::trollestia::yay::scootangel::rainbowhuh::derpytongue2:

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Ah, it is so awesome to get comments. You would not believe how boring it was on Deviantart with no one to offer advice or at least show they were watching. I have never written a character as crazy as Seething before, so he's quite a lot of fun. Next to Tor's steadfast awesomeness I think they make for interesting interaction between characters. It's been very interesting to work on this fic because Tor is The Nice One's character and Seething is mine, so we get to mesh our two writing styles in a really awesome way that celebrates our contrasts! Yeah, I'm pretty much crazy over this whole thing anyways!

If you're looking forward to new story content you might want to know that
Ann lies.

1591164 it is very good to get comments so i agree...i also just realized that you are the one who drew the art for the two ponies....the style reminds me of the anime gurren lagann ...very nice btw:pinkiehappy:

This is great keep going.:rainbowdetermined2:
1584209 Vivat Et Nocte! Omni Laude Luna!

This is going to be good.:rainbowdetermined2:

One's the exild adopted son of Princess Celestia, framed for horrendous crimes he did not commit, looking to clear his name. The other is an outsider in every way possible, suffering from a severe amnesia, desiring knowledge of his origins and life. Together, They Fight Crime!

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You hit the nail on the head there, amigo!:moustache:
-The Nice One

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HMMMMMMMMmmmmmmm.......
Is this a good 'hmm' or a bad 'hmm'? :twilightoops:

Just remember that
Ann lies.

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Thanks my friend! I really love sketching like this, feel free to check more stuff out at our Deviantart Page!

http://darksideequestria.deviantart.com/

Just don't forget that
Ann lies.

This shouldn't have been all cheery...
The guy is not meant to be cheery, or have a good time, not with what he's went through.
This needs some rethinking, not the story but definitely this chapter.
And the fact that he doesn't hold anything against Celestia is incredibly stupid to me.

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We appreciate your feedback, but the chapter has already been written and we have no intention of rewriting. We apologize for your dissatisfaction.
-The Nice One:moustache:

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That's all well and good, but he had better harbor at least some resentment towards Celestia.
If he doesn't, I'll stop reading this fic.

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Also, he has been in a forest in isolation for a month. You might think he has gained the ability to control his feelings on this wilderness sabbatical.
-The Nice One:moustache:

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Thanks for your comment Opindenfep. TheNiceOne is right, Tor has been in a forest for a month in isolation and he is not the same cheerful pony he was in Canterlot. Do keep in mind, however, that Tor's Cutie Mark symbolizes his,

trust and kindness towards others

. Tor is much more optimistic than most, but that doesn't mean that he doesn't hold resentment for Celestia for what she did to him. This will be illustrated in future chapter updates, and we sincerely hope you continue to follow this story to be there when that happens. Things may seem pretty positive right now, but this saga isn't called Darkside Equestria for no reason. I hope you'll be along for the ride. :twilightsmile:

:trixieshiftleft: -Ann Lies- :trixieshiftright:

When does the story update?

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We cannot promise a specific deadline for when we release chapters, but you can expect at least three chapters relatively soon! Thank you for your interest. We hope you'll be able to continue reading!
-TheNiceOne:moustache:

1624440 yay then i shall wait patiently

1619483 its an i don't know where this will go but this is interesting hmm...

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Alright, so due to various scheduling issues the release date for new Darkside Equestria updates is now Thursday! In reality they will be released Wednesday evenings, but unless you are up late (around midnight or 1am Mountain Time) you won't see the update until the next day.

We WILL be updatin every week from now on early Thursday mornings unless things change, which at this point I highly doubt. Come along with us and enjoy the ride! Just don't forget that while TheNiceOne is very honest, sometimes
Ann lies.

Hello everypony! Well here is our new update, I sincerely hope you enjoy it! By the way, the label A.B. means After Banishment, referring to the whole Nightmare Moon incident. Not the most original basis for time in the Equestrian world, I've seen it around before, but I still think it is the most suitable. Thanks in advance for your comments or critiques!

Just remember that
:trixieshiftleft: Ann Lies :trixieshiftright:

....i love reading seething's parts....reminds me of acting and i can really get into them...

Can't wait for more!

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Thanks a ton, I'm glad to see you are still following us! I hope you continue to enjoy the story.

:trixieshiftleft: Ann lies :trixieshiftright:

1728026 yea i forgot to read chapter 3 and the new chap reminded me to read it...and your welcome :twilightsmile:

also i can't wait to see some villains :pinkiecrazy:

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Good! We've got a great villain line-up for all of you. Hope you enjoy them as much as we enjoyed making them!
-The Nice One:moustache:

1729592 hopefully.....i love making them i even have a ballad for one of mine:pinkiecrazy:

1729852 okdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png

Lyric's Lullaby

Come little foals, come with me
Safe and happy, you will be
Away from home, now let us run
With Lyric, you'll have so much fun

Oh, little foals, please don't cry
Lyric wouldn't hurt a fly
Be free to frolic, be free to play
Come with me to my cave to stay

Oh, little foals, please don't squirm
These ropes, I know, will hold you firm
Now look to me, the voices call
Back and forth, your eyelids fall

Oh, little foals, you cannot leave
For you, your families will grieve
Minds unraveling at the seams
Allowing me to haunt their dreams

Do not wail and do not weep
It's time for you to go to sleep
Little foals, you were not clever
Now you'll stay with me forever

his name is Lulling Lyric (mine and original) he is an earth pony that is obsessed with being an alicorn and resents celestia and luna....he has delved into extremely dark magic to become one....he kidnaps foals and children to steal away their innocence to use and control them all....

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did ya get cold chills...if not read in a very creepy voice

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Awesome! I can just imagine this voice crawling through little foals' dreams and calling them to Lyric, really cool stuff! Have you written a story with him yet? If not then you should!

:trixieshiftleft: Ann lies :trixieshiftright:

1730567 i actually have something going right now but its a one-shot about one of the foals that he let go to make him a myth...i just need to get around to finishing it....or an image of him....hey ann lies....could you take a request and draw lyric?...because your style of art has that creepy effect.

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Sure, I'd love to! Send me a description! He sounds like a really creepy character.

:trixieshiftleft: Ann lies :trixieshiftright:

1735156 shweet....um can you send me a link to your deviant art?
i'll send you a note from mine.

Hello every pony! We sincerely hope you enjoy this fifth chapter. Things are really getting exciting for us now. We had published the original versions of these five chapters on Deviantart sometime before now and received almost zer0 attention, quite a difference from what we've seen on FimFiction. Anyways up to this chapter we have been editing old chapters already written and published, smoothing our narrative and ironing out details to make a better story. From this point onward all of our content will be fresh and never-before released into the wild world-wide web. I hope you continue to enjoy the journey as much as we have.

Thanks.

:trixieshiftleft: Ann lies :trixieshiftright: and The Nice One :moustache:

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