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You'll just have to keep reading and find out whether Alex eventually learns the answer!
For a weird story, this is amazing!
The way she describes Harmony make me think of chakra and chi energy. I got it in my head that all we need are a few chi masters and boom she's home hehe. anyways nice chapter :D
You have no idea how long I've been wanting this new chapter. Okay, maybe you do, because you're the author. Oh well, will read now.
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Excellent chapter as always. The ending didn't really feel all that off to me. I thought it actually let us see a... slightly different side of him. Not much, but how he carries himself.
Also, I understand Alex's way of thinking, but it pisses me off.
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Wow, almost to 100k words, and they're still very tentative, and he's just now thinking of having an attraction to her. Oh my.
The interactions, as always, were wonderful. Obviously, this is meant to be a much slower paced romance, regardless of personal preference in this case, and it is indeed serving its purpose in that regard so far. There are thoughts now popping up in his head on ocassion during 'normal' things with her, and he's hit the moral dilemma of realizing there's not much difference from 'standard' Earth horses, as far as body shape goes anyways.
And oh man, some sort of crisis going down. We'll just have to wait for the next chapter, I suppose.
Is this suppose to be "most could not survive"? The context seems to be saying that most unicorns would have problems with what Etherea did, and then this comes along and says the opposite.
"Appologize" should be spelled "apologize". Same with "appologizing".
Is "roof rose again" supposed to be "hoof rose again"? That would make more sense.
"Ettiquette" is spelled "etiquette".
"Haromic" should probably be "Harmonic".
Um. Didn't he leave his phone with Etherea so she could call the store? How does he have his phone at work now?
Yay; new chapter
Wonder what she is thinking about all of this. Anyway, nice chapter.
Hmm... Your previous chapter on physics got me thinking.
Couldn't Alternia conjure up a spell designed to hardwire the auditory language that she hears into her brain so that it is translated?
Like using creating a formula for it so that it remains semi permanent. Even an earth pony could theoretically create a spell from scratch if given the theoretical context. I mean, Issac Newton did it. Albert Einstein did it, so why not her or the protagonists?
And just when is little Alternia going to learn some of the more murky subjects that surround the human race?
Seems to me that her world is somewhat similar in terms of context, and this subtle context of what may be racism tells me that she could learn
a thing or two about what the more unfortunate of her subjects may have to toil through.
Like war, famine, betrayal, what have you.
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Weird? How so?
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What way is that?
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Well, only because I'm also doing a first contact thing at the same time. Most stories either don't use or gloss over the first awkward moments, so I suppose that my story would seem slower than most.
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I thought I'd gotten that one... I seem to remember it. Maybe it was one of the times I was using my phone and forgot to save in a timely manner, thereby causing my phone to crash.
And I really need to work on putting only one "p" in apologize.
Thanks again for the exacting look-over!
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*Dances* Wheeeee!
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"I'm a Princess. Are you a Princess too?"
"My wings are so pretty!"
"Let's fly to the castle."
"I am Princess Etherea."
"Oh, my hair looks beautiful."
*random musical jingle*
Oh Alex, you insufferable little pansy! But seriously, that guy can't go thirty seconds without feeling guilty about the most miniscule things. Of course, he should be wary of her and the position she holds, along with the ramifications, but I hope eventually he realizes enough is enough and stops taking so much crap from her, kowtowing to her every needs and stop acting less like her bitch in general.
I was so happy when I read this, then immediately after, he felt...... GUILTY!
One question, will he ever go to Equestria or is the setting for this story strictly on Earth?
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How he views his attraction to Etherea. It's a logical way of thinking, I suppose. However, it majorly conflicts with my views on relationships. I'm Pansexual you see, and I base attractiveness on personality, and not body. So it just rubs me the wrong way.
nice chapter will he git over his fear/anger for falling for a pony
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You mean Etherea. (Where's a winky-face when you need one?) I would love to be the author of Princess Celestia: Changeling Queen, but alas someone got the idea first!
There could be a number of possible reasons why she either can't or won't.
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I know, I know. He's too nice for his own good. I'm thrilled that you're apparently enjoying the story despite having some problems with the characters! Though I hate to say it, but I think you'll stay somewhat frustrated with Alex.
If Etherea can make it to Earth then there must be a way back. A way back means that we can all go to Equestria! Yay! I don't think I'm really spoiling anything by saying my story isn't strictly PoE or HiE.
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I thought it might be something like that. There's a hidden little something going on with Alex in this chapter that might be hard to pick out, but (to me) it makes sense. I think you'll like the next chapter.
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Maybe.
2797367 Well I've never had reason to like a person named Alex, and this is just another black mark against the name!
YAY! It's been so long...
Actual lol.
But hey mang, considering "animals" also includes shit like squid, centipedes, starfish, and star-nosed moles, she's practically human anyway!
Put me down as enjoying this story's pace. You've got a really good eye for detail, and it's pleasant to just climb inside this story and sorta wrap yourself up in it. It's the proverbial "blanket, cup of tea, and book" story.
As Alex was leaving the phone with her, I was wondering if, being a machine, Etheria's voice would even carry over it in English, but Craig having to relay for her would probably be even more entertaining.
Hope the next chapter comes soon!
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I know! It's one of those things that I keep coming back to and laughing at. It's such a ludicrous thing. What could possibly happen to make it hard for him to avoid fucking her? Seriously!
Ugh... I fell in to another plot hole! Etherea is actually speaking English when she uses her spell so that would come through just fine, but she wouldn't be able to understand anything Alex said back. And both of them are smart enough to realize that. Damnit!
It's just like the other plot hole that's bugging me. It's one of those little details that I need to remember, but it's minor enough to fall within people's suspension of disbelief so they don't notice. But it's going to bother the hell out of me.
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Yeah, usually you only think that when you're trying to subtly dump someone. This situation makes all kinds of things backwards!
Well, the guy did say it was Alex's roommate, so it's not too late to have Craig act as an intermediary.
I used to work in one of those "relay for the deaf" call centers (it's awful, don't ever do it), so I can speak from experience that having one participant who can talk but not hear, and has to have someone transcribe things for them, both works and has a lot of potential for humorous embarrassment.
Incidentally, is Etheria supposed to have some kind of (non-US) accent? The way you write her lines, I hear it in this kind of vaguely Continental pronunciation.
Wait, which roommate? Because Etherea's translation spell shouldn't work over the phone...
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Yes, he did.
He doesn't. Hence the reason he is doing something different from his usually routine.
That cliffhanger...
Glorious update. The interactions were amazing as always.
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Not specifically, but I won't stop you from imagining that. Funny thing about the translation spell she's using: it's copying off of Alex.
I have a sudden desire to introduce a character with a thick Cockney accent.
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Yup. Plot hole ahoy! Thanks to my mistake with this chapter I'll definitely be doing some story editing before starting the next.
I wonder who has greater trouble reading the other.
For humans, the ear-twitching is foreign, but fairly noticeable. But let's take a look from the pony side of things: Humans have almost flat faces, with no muzzle to speak of, and tiny eyes. I wouldn't be surprised if one of Etheria's greatest problems was/is her alien host's near-expressionless face (by pony standards, at least).
i love it :D
2798397 When they were arranging it I figured it would just be her saying his name and babbling in Equestrian until they gave the phone to him and he would just assume something huge was up since she called and rush home with no actual communication taking place. At least that's what I expected until they said it was his roommate.
Change,
to something like,
and the 'giving her the phone for emergencies' would still work. Might want to up Reggie's "Tha Fuck?" meter to compensate for the foreign language though...
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*huffs* Well it's good to know that he isn't going to remain in denial for such a vexing reason anymore. At least, I hope that's what your saying.
But enough of my blathering, let me say that I really do enjoy your work and can't wait for the next update.
Great story and I cannot wait for your next chapter. Also, totally caught the Silver Script reference.
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He has to be able to get over it at some point or else this story wouldn't go anywhere. But if you've spent your whole life thinking a certain way then it would probably take some time to fully change.
Think of it this way. Alex isn't a pansexual but that facet of who he is has just been challenged. It doesn't help that the challenge is coming from someone who looks eerily like livestock.
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HUZZAH!
I shouldn't be surprised since you're apparently a good friend(?) of Seven's.
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True enough. I understand where he's coming from, and that it's a story (a damn well-written one as well) but I just... ugh. I try not to judge people (or ponies) based on appearance not only because of my sexuality, but just because I believe that it's the right thing to do. When I see someone doing that (especially to a pony - dude, that's just no) even in a story, I get really annoyed.
I know that it's just a plot device, and a way to allow character development, but it just really irritates me. I CAN see it from their point of view (I like to think I'm not that narrow-minded) but like I said, it simply irritates me. I usually don't even point it out in comments that I make, but this one... slipped I guess. Perhaps because you're doing such a damn good job at creating characters.
Yeah. Let's go with that. It's your fault I'm pissed. No, not really. But gah. Why language hard? Either way, I've said my piece, and I'm happily awaiting next chapter. Keep writing! Besides, your just wasting valuable writing time by replying to my stupid comments anyway.
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I guess that would be the best way to put that. This fic interests me greatly because it does address one thing that seems to be conflicting in my mind when reading other fics or writing mine. That would be, is it wrong to love a pony even if said pony was completely sentient? For both to know exactly what is happening and what they're getting into, should love still be banned because of the gap that separates them? I am pro love any which two ways about it but still, that question continues to creep into my mind.
YES! Seeing a update to this fic Always brightens my day!
2797367 ... Are they not able to use log-...
Oh wait, this is fiction.
Logic need no place here.
Duh.
Pfff... Some ingenuity and initiative on their parts would be nice.
I would like to see the reaction of our Etheria's face after she finds out the less glamorous parts of our world, as well as our more benevolent ones, such as our extreme generosity at the price of our lives. Being a literal Everfree with no magic should be thought of as hell for them, yet we have not only tamed most of the world's most dangerous creatures, we dominate it as Gods. In a way at least. Atomic power is not to be trifled with in the least.
The fool who goes to war with humanity will be vanquished in but a forenight. Beware the beastly one that totes his thunder stick, for they shall bring utter ruin to those that are their enemies, and feast upon their benevolence with technology far beyond one's reckoning.
Poetic, no?
And if Etheria here couldn't do that, couldn't she form some mind link that temporarily swapped their languages?
2798710 2798668 2798707 I'm of and has always been of the mind that people can do whatever they want as long as it doesn't inversely affect me or other people in a negative way. What right do i have of trying to tell you how to live your life based on how i want to live mine? We're both adults and have the right to make our own decisions about what we believe is right for us. If you want advise or a direction i will gladly help you out with that but you can do as you like as long as you don't try to involve me with anything i'd rather not be involved in or have to much information about. That's as long as you're an adult mind. Children still require direction about whats right and what isn't.
That being said i have no qualms about the relationships between a human and pony. You both like/love each other and want to be in a relationship/get married? Great go knock yourselves out. I'm use there's some magic/technology/thingamajig floating out there in the multiverse that will let you have children or something.
Great chapter btw! Always glad to see this update but don't cut chapters on our account. To me the more words a chapters has the happier i will be.
Also glad to see him standing up for himself more. I'm guessing that comes with being more comfortable around each other but i always get slightly annoyed whenever he bends backwards to cater to her or takes the i'm always wrong and sorry about that approach. I'm over exaggerating here so don't take offense since i actually do like his character even if he annoys me at times.
Also might be annoyed that you left the damned chapter off at that call and it will be bugging me from now til whenever you choose to upload the next chapter.
Will Etherea get an introduction to the Standard Model?
Will this story result in official relations between Earth and Equestria?
Are the universes similar enough that Earth and Equestrian science can come together to make something greater?
Yes, I'm a nerd. What do you mean by "but this is a romance story"?
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Yep, that's the comment of the day. It made me laugh uncontrollably for several minutes. I needed that, thank you.
Ah Alex, she isn't a horse, she is a sentient being who happens to look like a horse. Just remember the Jack Harkness Test.
Not exactly safe for work but not too bad... 24.media.tumblr.com/b300e0f2ae5f7a3ca42a6826537a1247/tumblr_mixq2pTgjA1r72vrdo1_1280.png?.jpg
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Well, the whole point of this fic is to explore the problems that would come up, and personally I feel that far too many fics just ignore or gloss over this portion of relationship building. I even tried to convince my readers to answer the main question in a blog post: Welcome! I've realized that my blog doesn't really explain very well, but the line from Harmless Shenanigans(?) with Princess Luna is literally the entire thought process for the person upon waking up in bed with a Pony. It includes what I feel would be the main hurdle, then flippantly discards it.
And keep in mind that I also have to build up a reason for Etherea to choose Alex. 'You're cute' only goes so far with an audience.
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I am using logic. Just because you know how to replace the video card/memory sticks of a computer doesn't mean you then also know how to assemble a computer from its component parts and wires. It takes some time and effort to learn to do it right. And what happens if you have a mix of ATX and non-ATX parts? Should you try and jam them all in there anyway? No! (I've been through all of this.)
Etherea's in the same boat. She's an alicorn, which does give her a leg up, but I'm not handing her everything.
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Sorry...
I was a good place to end it before I did like with chapter 5 and spent four months working on near 40k words.
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I don't know.
Something's going to happen.
Maybe?
I know how you feel! I'm making up a language, defining societal differences, rewriting history, and defining a world's quantum makeup... for a Romance.
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You're welcome!
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There's a couple of things going on with his reaction. And wonderful... Now you've got me imagining Alex giving Etherea a Valentine's Day card with that image printed inside.
A this point Alex to Etherea is a very interesting person, but she is not looking for a relationship. She's just trying to get home and things are a little crazy at the moment.
Okay, so. All caught up. Before I get into my assessment of the story, lemme get it out of the way by pointing out that I couldn't help but grin upon seeing the reference to Silver Script's existence. I kind of feel inclined to make a reference to this story in the Alchemist's Heart now. Maybe the child of Shining Armor and Cadance will be Etherea instead of the planned Skyla.
I absolutely love this story. It has wonderful characterationaliation... um... what? I'm sorry, but I had to leave that typo in just because of how odd that was.
The story has wonderful characterization. Alex, Etherea, and Craig all feel like real characters. It makes sense given that this story is clearly heavily character oriented. While Alex is awesome with his 'I want to bang this pony, and therefore should feel bad' attitude, I think the real star of this story is Etherea. Even if she is a spoiled Princess, it's hard not to feel for her.
Despite the points where it feels like nothing is happening, the story is still plenty riveting. You have yourself a favorite and upvote. Keep up the great work, friend.
*Looks at tags. ROMANCE, MATURE, SEX*
Well yup. You are fucked, sir. Not alone if your lucky!
But there is some truth in saying "if you love someone you love everything about them" or something like it. So, he's naturally is going to be attracted even to more horse bits of Etherea. Don't mean it that actual horse can make him horny like a hamster during mating season, nah.
Time to sleep.
zzzzzzzzz
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Exactly.
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Woohoo! I've now successfully entertained 3 authors who I'm devotedly following! (Maybe more?) This story should be a horrible mess since I'm doing a number of things that people tell new authors like me not to do, so I'm thrilled that it's going so well.
And you don't have to do that. (Although if our stories shared a universe that would be a very interesting explanation for the Equestrian translator. Thank you Lyra!)
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I love all the reactions to that! Alex definitely has some thinking to do.
2802607 Well, it wouldn't be too odd to have Silver pulled into a universe similar to yours, albeit the one Silver is in is 'remarkably similar to the show, almost disturbingly so'. Even if they were one in the same, there'd be a matter of whether or not Silver and Etherea ever met. Then again, taking the multiverse theory into account, there's probably a universe where Silver DID end up in the same universe as the one you've laid out. For all we know, her daughter [oops, spoiler!] and Etherea know each other.
Things and stuff...also, ponies FTW!
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YES! an update I've been waiting so long for! I enjoyed this chapter despite catching a few grammar issues.
For the blog question you asked earlier I would love to see this continued!
2800808 Hmm. So the problem is creating conflict that stands as an obstacle that needs to be overcome in order to get to the solution.
Such as with the problems of the capacitive touch screen there. Considering that these types of touch screens use a combination of the body's bio-electric currents to generate motion, I am thinking perhaps somewhere along the line they could fashion a bracelet for Ethernia here to wear, with a stylus attacked for added function.
Of course, the problem there would be finding a guy who could fashion such a device.
That would be certainly awkward to explain.
Conflict leads to interest on the reader's part.
Challenge for the writer to become innovative and creative.
Is the chapter title a reference to the song, "Opposites Attract" by Paula Abdul?
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Why do I want to put Aqua Regia in Etherea's circle of friends now...? I know I'd planned on fleshing it out to have more than three and needed some ideas, but I also don't want to just be stealing others' characters!
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We're clearly dealing with a Dork Lord of the Sith.
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What grammar issues?
And I guess I should have expected that people would prefer for me to work on TLaP rather than dip in to an unassociated one-shot. Because those who read this so far are in it for the story and apparently Etherea is amazing.
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Nope. I just felt it appropriate since Alex seems to be making good progress and then backtracks some.
2812549 eh there isn't that many, around four i believe and the chapter is so long i can't read the whole thing again just to find grammar problems x.x I'm a proofreader but damn! xD
And ya I'm very eager to see the continuation.
Of course you can always do that one shot on your off time of doing this story. :P