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The Void of the Abyss

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Artich

Artich #1 · 2 weeks ago · · · Chapter 1: The Void ·

I really like this story.
No grammatical mistakes from what I've read.

Only problem I have is that the MC's name is being repeated too many times. Maybe give him some nickname or use his human name when you are doing his inner monologue or telling the story in the 3rd person.

Besides that minor problem, the story is great

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