This is a very fun story so far, and yeah it's a lot less bad as that other story, inspired by. I will be looking forward to seeing more of this one.

I like how you turned that story on his head. I found casual fun and happy accidents more digestible than r***e and blackmail

> Maybe I’ll fill your womb up again and again with his seed until you’re carrying a little foal of your own

You didn't body-swap, Angel. Each of you transformed into the other. It's very, very far from certain that she'd absorb your delicate condition. I mean, the author probably made it work that way, but you can't tell that.

> The site of it

sight

Lovely and sexy~ my only question is… when you get to the CMC, will they be adults or still fillies. Either way is fine to me but still curious <3

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Evening is an upstanding citizen and would never engage in such acts with a minor. So no foalcon here.

So in order for the CMC to be included something rather ABSURD would need to happen.

(But to clarify, there will be no foalcon in this story.)

“Hmm why?” She asked fluttering over. Her eyes widened into saucers when she saw the displayed time. “A-Almost noon!? But it’s pitch black outside!”

Does Fluttershy have a 24 hour clock? Because most clocks don't exactly distinguish between noon and midnight.

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Uh, it's a digital clock she got from Manehatten, and certainly NOT a plot hole I didn't think about!

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lol

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Fixed the spelling mistake BTW.

Please PLEASE everyone don't feel hesitant to point those out. I want to fix them!

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it's a lot less bad as that other story

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Don't get me wrong it was a good read, with it's darker tone on the theme which makes it great and stand out with stories of the similar premise showing the truth on how it would most likely work.

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Just have the clock be a fancy one that has sunrise and set dials.

Think the next chapter can have both fluttershys having sex with him?

This was really good. While I very much look forward to the other mares, I do hope we can get repeats. Angelshy seems like she has quite a bit of potential. Also threesome with the new Shy sisters.