Yeah there's no world where a human wins this, wings or not without magic he's losing

Rainbow Dash gains an almost immediate frustration as she exclaims, "That wasn't my fault! Applejack-!" She abruptly stops herself when she realizes that curious onlookers have taken an interest in their conversation. With a nervous chuckle, she continues in a lower tone, "...Anyway, if a pony breaks the rules in the run, it's seen as an automatic forfeit. Usually. Just makes sure ponies don't go around 'ruining the fun for everyone,'" she adds, gesturing with a hoof to emphasize the eccentricity of the race officials.

everypony

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I think she said that intentionally because Anon is NOT a pony

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You would think so, but that was indeed a mistake on my part. Thank you for the pointer.
I'll only use 'everyone' whenever a human themselves are talking (usually, anyway), and 'everypony' otherwise.

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As long as you dont have the ponies constantly correcting the human like so many HIEs do I dont have that much of an issue with it.

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Usually I'd actually have it the opposite, being that the human(s) in question will use 'everyone' and develop into using 'everypony' to fit in, occasionally forgetting to do so as part of the story. Ironically enough it would appear I have the same problem myself.

tbh, i could definitely see this representation of dashie as similar to the one early in the show. y'know, the compulsive, competitive prankster?

101%, with a 1% margin of error

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That's exactly what I was going for!

Okay, you've got me hooked lol. I have to know what happens next. There's no world in which he beats Dashie in a race unless she somehow trips over herself or he has some plot armor haha.

Only thing that has me a little confused is how you set up Twilight to be very clearly into him and into the idea of pursuing more and now he's just going to try to get Rainbow. Is this a world where herds are a thing and theyll all be totally into the idea of a herd with Anon, or is he kinda just a bit of a manwhore lmao

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The story is generally designed around the chapters being separate from one another, and so the idea of it being some kind of multi-pony scenario isn't really what I aimed for. That said, I tried to write it around the possibility of such, should one desire it. That also kind of explains the situation with Twilight; I was mostly just playing with the concept in the title, but there's the implied idea of previous interactions between the two that could have led up to it, although not necessarily. It's effectively just an idea I thought of where there's likely a lot of logic problems, just for the fun of it.

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Ah, I see. Well I eagerly await the next chapter then!

I thought this was gonna be a story where Anon asks each of the mane six what a French kiss is, and the final chapter would be them presenting their best guesses, but this is good too.

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Even if he had magic he would still lose the fastest human on record is slower than a warthog we outlast animals in stamina. Which could be a way to win but in the end its a fictional story not real doesn't matter either way