Wrapping up winter after an unusual month long blizzard is nothing less than a time consuming and laborious affair. But with a certain unicorn organizing, things are going well. That is, until a discovery shocks the entire town. A pale white cybernetic pegasus with golden wings frozen solid in the snow.
Neighbors are unsure, Twilight can't find any trace of her in the archives, not even Celestia has any clue as to the mysterious mare's identity. At least, no concrete evidence. But to the solar princess, she seems oddly familiar...
Chapters (4)
Looks good, can't read right now so I will give feedback later
same as padwanTGL. will read later. right now its 30 to midnight and im fucking knackered so imma sleep. read this in the morn.
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Well read it whenever, but thanks anyways!
1714962 Just finished reading it and now I'm intrigued, can't wait to read more on this.
my theory is that the mysterious mare was a time traveling robot, sent from the future to the past to learn about the present.
looking good, I noticed a few spelling mistakes near the end them being "Excpecially"(first word on the 8th line from the bottom) and you said "The" instead of "he"(5th word on the 9th line). There was another one but i forgot what/where it was
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Changed.
Reminds me of Terminator...
This is what happens when one is sufficiently motivated.
I really don't like the Auther's note thing at the end.
I really liked the perspective we got from the cyborg(who I'm now assuming is called Radiance) right at the start. And I'm assuming a millennia turned into 6 months deliberately.
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What do you mean by that?
1783582 From what i read, after contacting the moon base, they said it had been 6 months even though before that it said the base hadn't been contacted in a millennia
I might of misread though so I'm going back through it
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Don't worry, you read it right.
1783642 Now all I'm thinking about is wibbly wobbly timey wimey stuff, and its making me want to read the next chapter even more
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Mission accomplished.
Political correctness is a pain in the ass.
I've been working on this story, and I actually like it.
Going on chocolate binge.
Now I can't tell if the ponies above ground are dead or not, because it was stated that nopony died, but they are also described as unmoving. I'm just assuming that nopony died because the guards below ground were just unconscious and in the last few paragraphs, everything could be described as Pinkie was seeing it, not as what was actually happening
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Well I used "unmoving" as a replacement for "unconscious" a lot. So yeah, they're not dead.
1845879 Glad that's cleared up
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Darn it, this sounded interesting!