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This story is a sequel to In Need of A Hand
Fluttershy can't decide whether to use Rarity or Rainbow Dash as her art model and she is only losing time by not starting to work on her art project. Meanwhile, Flaming Star is having trouble communicating with Steely Armor to come to a conclusion about what has happened.
Edited and pre-read by ChudoJogurt and Stinium Ruide
Artwork by Short-tale
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If I'm going to be honest, the story doesn't draw me in, nor does it keep me here. It's just...there.
Characterization seems decent, but in some areas, it's quite bland.
Example -
Note the misspelling of Fluttershy, too.
I shall endeavour to read the next few chapters, but I don't really have high hopes.
Coming to the end of the story, I felt as if I've been cheated a little. Don't get me wrong, your writing was decent and flowed okay, I just felt as if it was rocky here and there and the flow could use some work too.
Characterization was flawed, but that's what I like about some writers. Letting their characters shine through characterization that haven't been used before is a thing I want to see more, but this story did not deliver well on that.
All in all, I was able to read the story well enough, but I was not able to enjoy it. But it's not up to me to dictate what you should write! If you enjoy writing such stories, by all means, keep going! I see potential in you, and you might go to great heights if you tried something new.
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Perhaps the next one will be an improvement on my end.
Thanks for taking your time to read this rocky story. And a special thanks, for commenting and sharing your thoughts. I really appreciate it.