The Lesson

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Voidwalker #1 · Dec 29th, 2021 · 1 · ·

Awww. No comments so far? That's a shame, really. Then I'll be the first, I guess.
Before I start with anything else, there's a weird recurring typo. Somehow, you managed to put an 'i' in orgasm... several times.
Now as for the story. I'm not entirely sure who the 'target audience' is, if there is such a thing. It's obviously not purely educational, I - personally, at least - don't deem it 'kink territory' and I don't think it counts as 'mere clop' either. But whatever it is or was supposed to be, I actually quite enjoyed it. The characters were spot-on and I liked the call-back to Twilights and Lyras early friendship. (And the implication of Lyras prior crush on her as well as Bon Bon's knowledge of this resulting in her initial jealousy was just... chef's kiss.)
For me, at least, Lyra was the star of the show here. Goodness gracious, she got me laughing an several occasions. She is, indeed, very open-minded and a little unorthodox. But hey, it got the job done, I guess.
I wouldn't mind seeing this expanded upon. On one side, I'm really, really curious about that talk Fluttershy and Bon Bon had. On the other side... it's usually very, very hard to just waltz back changes like this and avoid any future awkwardness. Like... they've been guests in this house on several occasions, that much was established, so... the next visit will be quite interesting, won't it? To be honest, I myself couldn't sit opposite a friend of mine without thinking 'I know what you look like', without letting that knowledge distract me and probably influence how I interact with said friend. These four obviously have better chances to navigate that, because they have a Lyra and she isn't afraid to be used... or something like that.
And if you want to go down further the other road, Twilight surely could 'work out some tension' between herself and Bon Bon, regarding Lyra.
Anyway, I had fun reading this, so...