Ughh ... So lack of detailing.

I disliked how short it is but its still a good start!

Keep on growing your skills

After a few moments of blinking his eyes and just staring, the first words out of his mouth were, “Where’s the pink one?” The statement got all the ponies to look at each other then back at the dragon with very confused expressions.

How did he know pinkie was there?

There is a distinct lack of detailing of surroundings. I'm not sure I like his reaction so far and that he is aware of the show, feels like you just took the easy way out to move the story forward and rush it. Unless he reveals that he thought he was dreaming in the next chapter or that he was halucinating because of grief, but at this point it would just sound more like an excuse.