Saving A Sunset (An Anon-a-Miss Story)

by WriterStorm PenKey

Friendship Through the ages

After three days straight and waiting patiently hoping, praying, but finally Sunset Shimmer has finally woken from being in her coma, the Rainbooms were in tears, happy to see their friend who for two weeks had been through hell a pang of guilt ran through Applejack’s heart she took her hat off her head and placed it on her chest “Su-Sunset im mighty sorry how i treated you even after the fact i say you was family.” Applejack said while holding her tears “as well as i darling i never should have turned my back on you.” Rarity exclaimed standing up walking over towards Sunset’s hospital bed tears coming slowly down her face. “Please will you ever forgive us.” Sunset looked at them with calm but saddened look she had tears in her eyes, she was contemplating if she wanted to forgive them, she got hurt by them even felt like she was being lied to, she then looked up at Rarity and said her answer “i don't know if i can forgive you but i’m willing to try.” Sunset said Rarity looked like she was relieved and sad at the same time.

Princess Twilight stood up walked over to Sunset’s bed placed her hand on sunset’s and said “i know it wasn’t easy for you sunset but please forgive me as well i should have been there for you, as a princess of friendship i felt like i failed my duty, to help with a friendship problem i almost lost you sunset please don’t do that again.” Princess Twilight said almost in tears.

Sunset looked at Princess Twilight and nodded “it’s alright twilight in the end i’m not dead or gone and because of you i can go further in life and help others and someday find love.” Sunset smiled “thank you Twilight…..” then Sunset slumped back into her bed getting some rest.the doctor came in and said “she needs rest.” everyone slowly left the small hospital room, knowing now Sunset will be just fine “so..what now?” Rainbow Dash finally spoke after leaving the room. “Well applebloom will have to make up for what she did, thankfully ah have to get back to the farm i’m calling it a night, you need a ride twi back to the statue?” Princess Twilight shook her head “no i rather stay here until she feels better.” Princess Twilight responded.

Applejack nodded and left soon one by one everyone left except Princess Twilight and Fluttershy “thank you for writing to me if you hadn't we would neer see sunset again.” Twilight said Fluttershy nodded and then after that she left leaving princess twilight by herself, Princess Twilight walked back into the room sat down in the chair next to Sunset Shimmer, she took sunset’s hand and held it she fell asleep right there hold sunset’s hand “i’ll make sure nothing will happen to you.”

Comments

[MatTheBook]

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The big problem is lack of puncuations (Full stops and coma's) and spaces of parragrafs

[Pete100]

Sunset looked at them with calm but saddened look she had tears in her eyes, she was contemplating if she wanted to forgive them, she got hurt by them even felt like she was being lied to, she then looked up at Rarity and said her answer “i don't know if i can forgive you but i’m willing to try.” Sunset said Rarity looked like she was relieved and sad at the same time.

This is an interesting route.

[KittyrinnAiko]

I hate to say it but this really feels rushed.

[WriterStorm PenKey]

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I had to because of how many routes of sunset not forgiving the rainbooms a lot and we haven’t seen many fics with this route

[WriterStorm PenKey]

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Yeah sorry about that I was just tired writing this was taking a toll on me because I kind of almost lost my spark because of a certain person that I was inspired by broke me and I felt like I lost it all, and I got writers block so I’m trying to pull ideas just to make it interesting but I did rush it because I was worried about the people who read the fic thought this fic was dead, sorry about that but all in all what did you think of it?

[WriterStorm PenKey]

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Ummm sorry isn’t that what I’m supposed to do? Commas, end of sentences, paragraphs are punctuation my friend it’s the first thing you learn in 1st grade 😂 but anyway how did you like the fic besides the “lack” of “punctuation” when it was written correctly in a way a published author would do.

[Pete100]

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That’s good. Especially since her not forgiving them doesn’t make a lot of sense.

[KittyrinnAiko]

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Take your time, both in writing and in healing.
We can wait.
I'm literally waiting for updates from stories that haven't been updated in years.

[zachary12]

nice work

[sonicbeta4]

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So in other words,-media3.giphy.com/media/R53a4hAFV6QH6/giphy.gif

[Pete100]

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Not really when we take into account canon.

[PonyofEntropy]

Looking forward to seeing more.