This story is a sequel to Life as a dragoness [temp title]
One day twilight is exploring the crystal caverns when she accidentally awakens an ancient creature she has never heard of before. What will happen with the return of this creature.
I had this story in my had for years but lacked confidents.
This will be my first ever story so please be kind. Genres will be added as needed.
Cover art isn’t mine i just grabbed an image.
Editor: Creative Delight ch1-???
I like this already! Can’t wait to see more of it soon!
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Thanks, I was really nervous people wouldn't like it.
This is an interesting concept. I don’t mind helping you with editing before post. If you want the help, that is, free of charge, of course, that is when I also have time.
is that languish think on purpose ???????????
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I don’t completely understand your question. But if you mean the way i write i just try my best to make it good even when english isn’t my mother tongue.
Ok first for the "sed" it's spelt "said". Second You have it a bit weird on the introducing of why there's two in one. Third you have a Spanish E and your missing the Y in hey. Fourth in where you have *later* I would suggest that you give a more exact time on how long it took to get to point A to point B.
I would suggest you say "why thank you" was the fist thing the dragon replied back to my comment.
I think you meant "while" also that's not almost that is demanded.
On this one I'm just being nit picky but I think you meant "though"
Instead of "then".
And that's all with this chapter
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You used the wrong witch the one you needed which
scares" is spelt "scars"
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Thank you for telling me that I will also keep this in mind for the next chapters. Also we are going Through editing to improve the chapters that have been published.
I didn't really see any mistakes other then the ones that I pointed out on the other chapters. All and all it's a good story you need to work on the world building a bit but other then that good concept and I like the fact of you mentioning Spike diet.
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Thank you for reminding me of world building, i completely forgot that that was an important part to write for a story to succeed. In my free time I will go back to the older chapters and add a few things here and there to make a little world building.
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No problem happy to help.
When I use these " " it's me saying the quote in the ways that I think it should be, mind you it doesn't mean it should be changed. But anyway I think you meant to have it like this "I had this dream longer" I believe you should have said this instead "I had this dream more often".
I like how you gave it more description with the three hour ride so we can relate more.
This one is just nit picking hasn't Rainbow dash already met Daring doo?
Your just missing a s on beasts.
I'm just going to say you need to fix the first sentence what you have there makes it seem like she was going to go too but then you said I will prepare a exploration team for you.
That is all.
Quick question what does watching mean?
This getting really interesting.
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Thanks. I had the concept of the mc’s in my mind for a few years but never had the feeling I could write it without giving it the deserved quality I would like. It is only recently that I got the confidence to write my first story. Also sorry for if the quality isn’t to good, english isn’t my first language and I’m better at coming up with a rove idea and then letting someone else make the details.
Anyway, I hope you will enjoy this.
"sed" “Hé"
Are you not a native english speaker?
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Yes i’m not. Just don’t ask were exact I come from
hi..just found this story and...for an episode of mlp to probably add to this...what about the one where tiereck started gathering magic??
also sorry..i cant spell his name properly today for some reason