This story is a sequel to A Father's Concern
Two years after Terramar joined the Navy, conflict came over. A terrorism country called the Black Sun attacked a Hippogriffia Destroyer, after some warnings, Hippogrffia officially declared war on the Black Sun. Terramar goy on his first combat mission, but after gaining his first splashes on some enemy fighters, he began to doubt himself about whether those kills are necessary. Can he figure out the reason to kill? Or will his first blood haunts him?
Chapters (2)
WTH?! He got punished for SAVING himself and his Sister from the Criminal Gang, and Save his Sister from the Nasty Raping???!!!
What the HELL LADY!!!!!
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awesome story
Yeah, some judges are unfair. Trust me when I said that, my mom got into a car accident one time and we have a bitch judge, she's a bit racist towards us. And ugh... I don't wanna rethink that.
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Thx
stories from ww2 veterans talking to new generation of soldiers
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Sure. Or... How about like veterans in service and ww2 veterans talking to teenagers that's in the Navy Academy?
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yeah all two can work
10558785
Well... His mother is furious because he killed two guys in a row, I doubt any parents won't get mad at that.
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One. Their a Criminal Gang. Two. They TRIED to hurt and rape his Sister, and beat him up. It was Self Defense, and the RIGHT thing to protect his sister and himself.
Yess....you made a sequel, I havenât read it yet cuz itâs like midnight here again (time flies fast now for me), but I will read it sometime tomorrow and tell you what I think here. I am unsure, only based on the few comments, what this story is like, but then again I havenât read the description or story yet so, I cant judge a book by its cover. Hope the sequels good!
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Yeah I know, I wanted to make Trident's past more interesting.
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Alright I guess. I just don't like Trident getting punished for DEFENDING himself and his sister. And got rid of some Bad Ponies.
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I agree with you my friend, yes, sometimes life isn't fair.
10558785
Yea, I just read chapter one and it feels like that part maybe wasnât so necessary to put in, but I think that if that punishment was still included, the duration would be less. Like a month or a couple months. But then again, this punishment is, like you said that he SAVED him and his sister by killing, so that sounds wrong at the very least.
10558838
Hmmm, but the killing was to save his own kin and family. Idk, I donât often read stories about this so I donât know the choices people make in these stories. I like the story so far. There are some spelling mistakes like some âleastâ should be less and I think in the beginning you use âimmediatelyâ a little too much, but this is better than last story. I donât really think there are drastic tense changes which is good. Iâll critique more later, I gotta go. Good story overall!
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10558785
Alright, I deleted that part and added a new one.
10559738
Ok Iâll check it out in a sec
Still some spelling mistakes
Like hesitated instead of hesitate
And you wrote like
It Tok then
It should be âIt took themâ
I like youâre change of it, it feels more natural now.
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Alrighty, thanks for the check.
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Youâre welcome!
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Welp, that's what a soldier's job is during real life combat situation