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JesterOfDestiny


I ignore (almost) everything that happened after season 6.

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There is a reason some magic is deemed dangerous and not to be messed with. You have to be careful around spells that can alter the flow of reality, or you end up watching your loved ones die over and over again. But sometimes, you just happen to be a target of an ancient inevitable evil, that will make sure you commit the same mistakes as your poor forgotten ancestors.


[Updated on every Friday.] Now finished!

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 8 )

Seems interesting so far, I think I'll keep an Eye on it.

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I will be updating it on every Friday.

Well, it's dead now. Very dead. That's good.

In which snails and time make a weird amount of sense.

It's a pretty great short story! Characterizing Minuette went pretty well (especially with the emotional/subjective descriptions/narration you've used very well throughout), and Doctor Hooves being characterized pretty well too as somepony in the middle of fighting the thing. The supporting characters (in the form of Minuette's friends) were very effective both story-wise and in comedy too which was enough to contrast the horror/mystery and light things up from time to time (my favorite funny moments were Lemon's river ecosystem comment and Lyra throwing her salty snacks at the Mogolon). You set the dark tone pretty well and, in My Little Pony fashion, somehow gave it a happy ending in the end and made it work.

Kudos to you for this. Thank you for this good story!

This seems to be interesting.

The start strongly reminds of a time lopp episode of Stargate SG-1 where O'Neill and Tealc have a similar reaction.

At least they managed to kill it. Now they just need to reverse time for Minuette.

This was a nice story and it;s good that they are looking into the existance of other monsters Grogar created.

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