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AshStreak
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wait lil cheezy isn't a colt in canon, I thought the thing with the mane was a pinkie pie thing he got from his mom?
Well this was a very fun story, I was surprised that the twins didn't get on to each other right after with Lil' Cheese watching. Fun read, I hope you will being do more of those in the very near future, and I wonder who are the foals born from the other Mane Six you could create from Lil' Cheese to be fucked over by.
The author's note is at the bottom in this chapter, when I think you want it up top.
There are a few themes in stories I just can't get behind, and foal molestation is one of them. I mean, don't get me wrong, its fantasy so no one is being hurt but speaking as I've known a few people in my life who went through this, it makes me feel uneasy even reading it. I mean its one thing if the colt/filly is already willing or knowledgeable or just about any other scenario other than THIS ONE but yeah when you go down this route:
I just can't read this...
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Sorry to hear that, but I typically like to make stories with somewhat believable storylines. Plus even foals know about sex would probably be just as hesitant about it if they grew up being told not to.
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There was a rather huge debacle around whether he was colt or filly. Show uses a filly model while a writer said he was a colt. It's really a preference thing at this point.
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Thanks! I don't think I have any plans yet to makeup characters yet, however there is a chance this one will get some update in the future. (I was set to a 10k word count so that is why some things like twincest weren't involved)
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Perhaps if you hadn't used the "lets play a game" and "You trust me, don't you?" lines or a situation close to that, I'd be more on board with this but when you use those lines it makes it sound as if she's taking advantage of his trust for her own sexual gratification(complete with telling him to close his eyes, I mean yesh! Its like you looked up information on real sex offenders and their tactics for getting their victims for these ideas or something...no offense.
) instead a more innocent approach.
I mean, this is just me and I'm not going to tell you how to write your stories but if I wrote a story like this, (Which I have.) I'd take a route where Cheese got curious and Pound simply went along with it, slowly upping the ante, until it got to full blown sex. That way, it shows him innocently curious instead of being coaxed.
Anywho that's all I'm gonna say on the matter. I'm sure this is a good story and if you had approached this situation from a different angle, i'd totally of read it but anyways, have a nice day!
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For sure! No hard feelings! thanks for the input!
Definitely need to write more. Maybe a threesome between them, or a foursome with Pinkie too.
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I am currently in the middle of writing a sequel to this, although it's taking me a bit since there's no deadline and I have a lot of work currently. Pinkie's def joining in though.
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Yay! No problem about the delay, I can wait for greatness for a good long time.
"his ass pointing straight at Pumpkin's eager cock" wrong sibling xD