The Homewrecking Contest

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LILDASHIEGRINGO

LILDASHIEGRINGO #1 · Feb 16th, 2020 · 3 · ·

rapped on the door.

Lil Array deciding to drop some bars out of nowhere,

Adeire

Adeire #2 · Feb 19th, 2020 · · ·

I did not expect that ending, why didnt I expect that ending?
Well played sir.

dirty little secret

dirty little secret #3 · May 24th, 2020 · · ·

This is your official review from Dirty Little Secret's Dirty Little Contest!
Remember to vote in the contest's poll -- voting closes at midnight, June 6th.
And make sure to allow notifications from the contest group and/or follow Dirty Little Secret to get the full results and the awards show post on June 9th!

------ Review ------

Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-Lots of fun variety and all kinds of different stuff going on.
-Not really clear why they want to wreck some homes.
-It's often not clear who they're with ... which makes things difficult to visualize or understand. In some of these scenes, I never really understood who they were with, other ones it wasn't clear until more than halfway through.
-These little scenes are too short to have enough buildup. It's a great variety and does a very good job of displaying their depravity, but each scene could be developed much more; there was enough room in the word count for it.
-maam -- needs an apostrophe.
-I was wondering where Sonata was the whole time, and the joke at the end was almost worth it.
-It's very nice how casually good at this they all are. Yes, Sonata as well!

------ Scores ------

To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 90/100
Allure: 70/100
Enticement: 95/100
Immersion: 55/100
Prose Quality: 89/100
Total Score: 399/500
The more specialized scores for individual prizes, as well as the results of the community poll, will be published when the full results are announced. If this story wins any awards, there will be another post in the story comments sometime after June 9th announcing that this story has won.

Thank you for participating, and thank you for contributing to Fimfic's collection of clop!

dirty little secret

dirty little secret #4 · Jun 10th, 2020 · 1 · ·

Congratulations on winning Dirty Little Secret's Dirty Little Contest!
For the full results, check the Dirty Little Award Show.

This story won:

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Fetish Fuel: Infidelity
Well, yeah, but who doesn't like getting a little action on the side? It’s easier to ask forgiveness than permission! Your clopfic had the best scene where a character cheats on their spouse/lover.

chokingchicksandsodomy

chokingchicksandsodomy #5 · Jun 11th, 2020 · 1 · ·

10087858 Every time I see this comment I want to reply, and I've managed to hold off so far, but right now I am just drunk enough...

Aria Blaze, here for the lays,
Leave you walking like John Wayne for days.
A haze of praise and post-coital daze.

And this might be crazy but I know you crave me
I'm bad to the boner and no one can save me.
And my misbehaviour will someday enslave ya,
So take a good look at your lady and saviour.

I take what I please, charge reasonable fees,
And give you good reason to stay on your knees.

Productive faffer