Spike The Brony Dragon

by red4567

Prologue

My name is David Smith. Although, that won't matter in the long run. I'll explain that later. I've been in the brony fandom for over a decade. It has been over a year since Friendship is Magic has ended. There were still a few bronies here and there, but until Generation 5 comes out, that number wasn't going to increase anytime soon.

As a brony, I always wondered what life would be like in the pony world. I could interact with my favorite ponies, eat some of the delicious treats, and explore some of the different cities around Equestria. I also wondered what pony species I would be. I could practice magic spells as a unicorn, I could fly almost anywhere as a pegasus, and as an earth pony I could grow interesting plants. Little did I know that I was going to be none of the above.

It started like any other day, I browsed the internet, looked at videos and whatnot. That's when I decided to do something nostalgic. I went on Netflix and searched for My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic. Thankfully, it was still on there. I was going to watch the very first episode just to see how much has been improved.

Just when I was about to hit play, I suddenly felt lightheaded and very tired. This was unusual for me, as I get plenty of sleep, and I haven't eaten anything out of the ordinary. My eyelids felt really heavy, so I thought that maybe I should take a quick nap. I turned off my laptop and went to bed. It didn't take long for me to fall asleep.

Comments

[redandready45]

Off to a good start.

[Alondro]

Ok, so... right off the bat, about as generic a beginning as possible. If some force is going to grab some random brony and toss him into Equestria, IT NEEDS TO SHOW UP AT THE VERY START AND EXPLAIN WHY. This mystery box BS is aggravating and makes no sense. A power strong enough to rip open holes between universes and smart enough to know it needs to bring in someone from said dimension to help smooth things out should also be smart enough to know the poor sap you just threw into the Everfree (where 90% of them end up) NEEDS TO BE GIVEN A BUCKING CLUE!!

[Cheshire2]

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Not if said powerful being makes less sense than discord and pinkie on a sugar rush combined

[Cheshire2]

10100825
Some just do it for s.h.i.t.s and giggles

[Cold Spike]

It all sounds a tad generic and far too wish fulfillment like. I dunno.

[MagicLover2128]

Very good chapters so far, nice small changes made to the original canon and I can see this fic being a good one.

It’s weird though that the words ‘Shut Up’ & ‘Stupid’ are considered curse words to Ponies

[DraquineWarrior]

10104478
Along with "peeved"?

Either way, maybe they just don't like them because they are mean things to say.

[Pinklestia]

This is just.. too short.

[Kitsune_Kenshi]

10406343
Well this is the prologue.

[RDDash]

The problem with those stories is that he knows what's is shown on the TV. Him falling asleep gives me an idea of what the ending is going to be like, maybe he just Imagined it.

[Killjoy1221]

I have a suspicion and you better hope I'm wrong. If you make every episode into a Spike episode, you'll make a lot of people very unhappy.

[KvAT]

Just when I was about to hit play, I suddenly felt lightheaded and very tired. This was unusual for me, as I get plenty of sleep, and I haven't eaten anything out of the ordinary. My eyelids felt really heavy, so I thought that maybe I should take a quick nap. I turned off my laptop and went to bed. It didn't take long for me to fall asleep.

Carbon Monoxide poisoning?

And I agree with the others here. This chapter, for the prologue it is, is too incredibly short. It would work as a "pre-prologue" of sorts, but damn, the function of a legacy chapter is to hook readers in. If the legacy chapter is weak, then it'll kill expectations, and sent the readers in with a bad mood.

That aside, since I'm hoping for a relaxing-ish slice of life, I'm still hopeful. Bravo Six, going dark.

[TheraseVoidCaller]

Won't increase, HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA

[DraquineWarrior]

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Yes I agree the prologue is supposed to prepare and pull in readers from the start, but from what I heard (and from an expert craftsman of an author no less), in order to do so, prologues are supposed (or at least recommended; I won't enforce it on anyone) to be as short as possible, like 1 or 2 pages (ok up to a few), so readers can get to the meat of the story faster. If it's too long, it might bore the reader, and it might as well be a "numbered chapter".

[Black--Soul]

You got to be shitting me... Were is the rest of the chapter

[Black--Soul]

This chapter has less than 1000 words. I checked current progress. Often your under 5000 words. One chapter is 14.000 words... The fuck? Amazing length but... So out of... Nevermind

I really hope you make every sentance count

[Ziper Ace]

Oooh I’m so excited to read this when I first discovered this fanfic

[Enderstorm]

People... seem to be misinterpreting what a prologue is?

It's supposed to be a short intro. Make it too long and too meaty and then it stops being a prologue and just becomes Chapter 1.

[goldheart]

let's go

[Discord 664]

Knowing that he communicates with Chancellor Neighsay anonymously.

[Feroz]

My name is David Smith. Although, that won't matter in the long run. I'll explain that later. I've been in the brony fandom for over a decade. It has been over a year since Friendship is Magic has ended. There were still a few bronies here and there, but until Generation 5 comes out, that number wasn't going to increase anytime soon.

I just joined <3

[clerfamerg]

There were still a few bronies here and there, but until Generation 5 comes out, that number wasn't going to increase anytime soon.

It's funny because G5 made that number decrease instead.

[Black--Soul]

Time to start the re-reading of a great story.
It started weak and got sooo mutch better shortly after ♡