The Summer Sun Celebration came and went, marking the second anniversary of Twilight and I moving to Ponyville, and me coming to Equestria. I had to admit that all the preparation the girls and I did for the festival paid off, and for once there weren't any major catastrophes.
With Season 5 already done, I focused on what future episodes to change. It was possible that Season 6 and 7 would happen together and out of order, so I would have to prepare for that.
For Season 6, Flurry Heart wasn’t born yet, but when that happens I could prevent the Crystal Heart from breaking, or convince the citizens to evacuate early if that doesn’t work. I don’t know if anything changed with Thorax, so I would have to wait to see if he still shows up before determining anything. Again, like in Season 5, I would skip any map episodes. I could still let the “Gauntlet of Fire” play out like in the episode, but I would react more positively with Garble. With Twilight being neutral to Trixie, I bet that “No Second Prances” would end with them being on better terms than in the show. Obviously, I would have to remind Rainbow how the Wonderbolts come up with embarrassing nicknames to prevent her from being called “Crash,” and I should talk to her so she wouldn’t pull any more pranks in “28 Pranks Later”. I didn’t know where the old Spike was during “the Saddle Row Review,” so I planned to join the girls to help with opening Rarity’s boutique in Manehattan. I could try to convince Zephyr that failure is nothing to be worried about, and not fall for his schemes to get out of work.
For Season 7, I could take care of Flurry while Twilight helps the fillies and colts at the hospital. I could also call out those “experts” that tried to make Fluttershy’s sanctuary into their idea instead of hers. I wanted to prevent Rarity’s mane from messing up, or at least find a way she can have her mane back. I also had to find a way to get rid of the Friendship Journal to prevent “Fame and Misfortune” from happening. When the changelings get reformed, I could get Dragon Lord Ember and Thorax together early instead of keeping them apart.
The rest of the episodes for the two seasons would have to be decided when they show up.
Wow, I’ve sure got quite a lot of events to change, and I didn’t even think about the movie.
The movie itself had a lot of ground to cover. I felt like as long as I called the girls out and prevented Twilight from being separated and captured, the events should play out better than in the movie.
One day, Rarity, Pinkie, and I were riding on a train to Manehattan.
“I do appreciate you coming along with us, Spikey,” Rarity said as she filed her hoof.
“No problem, Rarity,” I replied. “I haven’t been to Manehattan since last year, so it would be nice to visit it again. I hope you’re excited.”
“Oh, I am. Although, not as much as Pinkie.”
Pinkie Pie hopped around the train car singing about going to Manehattan, much to the annoyance of some of the passengers.
My attendance wasn’t just from the sheer desire to sightsee Manehattan once again. This episode was “The Gift of Maud Pie.” In the show, Pinkie and Maud would get gifts for each other while Rarity finds a boutique. However, in order to get Maud’s gift, Pinkie gives up her party cannon. While she does get it back in the end, I was left wondering why Pinkie couldn’t just get Rarity, who is a fashion designer, to make a pouch exactly like the one she needed. My plan was to suggest just that.
“Yes, yes, Manehattan, the height of sophistication, elegance, culture...” Rarity put her emery board away. ”Since my boutique in Canterlot has been doing so nicely, it only makes sense for me to open one there as well.”
“And hopefully be extra cautious when hiring a manager to run the shop,” I added.
“Not to worry, Spike. I learned my lesson last time.”
Pinkie squealed like a pink pig. “We're almost there! Why don’t your faces look like this?!” She stretched the corners of her mouth upwards.
“I don’t want to get too overwhelmed by the big city,” I replied.
“This is just a business trip for me, Pinkie, dear,” said Rarity.
While the fashion pony attempted to remain humble before arriving at the city, one look at the skyscrapers slung all those unsuccessful shots out the window. Rarity kept that fawning attitude even after we left the station.
“This city's simply amazing!” She announced. “It's just... everything, ever!”
“And it's about to get everything ever-er!” Pinkie shouted. “Because guess who I see!”
The three of us saw a familiar deadpanned pony at the bottom of the steps.
“Oh, hey, Maud,” I greeted as we descended down the steps.
“Hey,” Maud replied with the same tone of voice she always used.
BOOM!!
Pinkie’s party cannon went off, showering the surrounding area with confetti.
“Maud, Maud, Maud!” Pinkie gave us all a group hug. “Yay!”
“Well, I have to say it’s a coincidence meeting you here, Maud,” I said as I brushed the confetti off my head.
“Oh, it’s not a coincidence, silly,” Pinkie said as she broke up the hug. “I told Maud to meet me here.”
“How so?” Rarity asked as we walked down the street.
“It’s part of the Pie Sister’s family tradition! Every year, I set aside a special day to spend with each of my sisters! I do separate trips with each one, and we make it super fun by picking a different location every year! We see the sights all day and then swap gifts at sunset!”
“Oh, you Pie sisters have just about the sweetest family traditions!”
“Maybe we should do the same for our siblings, Rarity,” I suggested.
Pinkie continued, “And since Maud's getting her rocktorate nearby, we figured this would be the perfect spot for PSSSD!”
“Okay…what’s the secret?” Rarity whispered.
“Huh?”
“You were making a ‘pssst’ sound,” I replied. “Or was that something else?”
“It was something else,” Pinkie replied. “P-S-S-S-D stands for Pie Sisters Surprise Swap Day!”
“I guess Twilight’s not the only one who uses overly long acronyms.”
“Well, I'll just leave you two to your PSSSD,” Rarity said. “And now, Spikey-Wikey and I are off to scout possible locations for my new boutique!”
“Before you two go,” Pinkie said, “can I ask you a quick question?”
“Shoot,” I said.
Pinkie checked to make sure Maud, who was near a stack of postcards, was out of earshot. Then she quickly grabbed our legs.
“Will you please help me?!” She screamed at the top of her lungs. How Maud never noticed was beyond me.
“Only if you let go of our legs and stand up…” Rarity nervously replied, seeing the crowd drawn to us.
Just like in the show, Pinkie said that she always had trouble finding a gift better than Maud’s. But this year, she planned to turn things around by buying a rock pouch for Boulder. She showed Rarity and me a poster for a rock pouch store.
“A rock pouch would be perfect for Boulder, and I know Maud will love it!” Pinkie exclaimed.
“Wait a minute, doesn’t Maud’s dress have pockets?” I asked. “Why a rock pouch?”
“Because from what Maud told me, Boulder complained about her dress pockets being too small and stuffy lately, probably because he’s growing up.”
“How can a pet rock…?” I shook my head. “Nevermind, I’m not gonna question it.”
“For the sake of my sanity, me neither,” Rarity concurred. “But that rock pouch really is the perfect gift for Maud.”
Since Pinkie hadn't purchased the pouch yet, we three agreed to route a sight-seeing path to the store and keep Maud distracted so that she wouldn’t notice. Plus, it would give Rarity a keen opportunity to find potential spots for her clothes store.
Maud returned from the postcards. Apparently, Boulder couldn’t find a suitable postcard for his cousin. The fact that rocks had relatives made just as much sense as them outgrowing dress pockets.
“Maud! I'm giving you the greatest PSSSD gift in the history of ever!” Pinkie shouted as she fired her party cannon again.
The four of us toured the city, taking in the sights. I wondered if there were a lot of book series that took place in Manehattan. I have read some comic books that took place in a big city similar to Manehattan, but the name wasn’t mentioned explicitly.
We also took this time to look for available estates for sale. Unfortunately, so far the ones we found were either too expensive, too small, or both for Rarity’s potential store.
Each of our visits concluded with Pinkie Pie firing off her party cannon. Honestly, she was using it more often than usual this time. It’s a wonder how she never got in trouble for disturbing the peace or littering the city streets. I also hoped that the confetti was biodegradable.
We took a respite from our roaming at a restaurant. Pinkie was doodling on a map with a pink crayon.
“Pinkie, put down that crayon!” Rarity hissed. “The Cantering Cook isn't that kind of restaurant!”
“Oh, let her have a little fun,” I said. “We’re in Manehattan, not Canterlot.”
“That does not matter, I don’t want ponies to think we’re…uncouth.”
“Fine,” Pinkie sighed as she gave me her crayon.
Rarity looked around the restaurant. “A pony could get used to eating at places like this!”
“I know,” replied Maud. “It's the only restaurant in the city with nepheline syenite in their bathroom tiles.”
“Good to know,” I said enthusiastically.
“You know what, Pinkie and Spike?” Rarity pulled out a tall menu. “Uh, maybe you could help me figure out what to order.”
Rarity, Pinkie and I huddled close together.
“We're so close to the pouch store,” Pinkie whispered. “It's just a block away. I could practically smell it from here…if I knew what a pouch store smelled like.”
“Okay, remember the plan,” Rarity quietly responded. “I will stay here and distract Maud while you two go get a pouch.”
“Gotcha,” Pinkie and I said in unison.
Rarity put the menu down. “Oh, why, thank you for the kind assistance, Pinkie and Spike. And now I know exactly what to order.”
“You’re welcome, Rarity,” I said. “Oh, I need to use the restroom. Could you excuse me for a sec?”
“Oh, I need to use it, too,” Pinkie replied. “Let’s go together.”
We hurried out of the restaurant and down to the city streets.
“Follow me, Spike!” Pinkie pronked down the sidewalk. “I know where the pouch store is.”
“I’m right behind you!” I quickly followed Pinkie as we traversed over the crosswalk.
“Ooh, I can’t wait to see what the pouch store might have for Maud!”
“I hope they’re open.”
“Of course they’ll be open, Spike. It’s still daytime, and it isn’t a weekend.”
“I know, but I still—HEY! WOAH!”
A taxi screeched to a halt in front of me.
“Careful, kid!” The driver shouted.
“Watch it! I’m walking here!” I retorted.
I should’ve known I’d make that reference while I was in Manehattan.
Pinkie and I got to the other side of the sidewalk.
“Anyway, I still have a bad feeling about this,” I said, “and my gut feeling is usually right.”
“Oh, don’t you worry, Spike. We’ll be fine.”
The last minute, we arrived at the pouch store. Pinkie pressed her face against the glass window.
“Look at that hand-stitched ten-thousand-thread-count velvet-lined rock pouch!” Pinkie exclaimed. “Maud will love it!”
“Hand-stitched?” Does a non-pony own this store?
I looked at the door and noticed a familiar sign.
“Oh, no,” I said.
“What?” Pinkie enthusiasm dropped like an anvil. “Don’t tell me that this is a display model and they can’t sell it because it’s the only one left!”
“I’m afraid it's something worse. Look at the sign.”
Pinkie read, “‘Took a sudden vacation to Canterlot with my grandniece. Back in a few moons.’ Oh, no. Oh, no-no-no-no-no-no-no! Well, maybe, just maybe, he's already back from vacation.”
I squinted at a date on the sign. “This was put up yesterday.”
“NOOOOOO!!”
I could see the bystanders staring at us.
“S-sorry,” I said as I pushed Pinkie away. “She just changed her prescription recently.”
We walked back to the restaurant.
“Okay, so buying a pouch is off the table,” I said. “But what if we had Rarity make one for us?”
“Wow, great idea!” Pinkie clapped her hooves. “You think Rarity can make an exact duplicate of that pouch?”
“I’m sure she will, or at least be very close since she has hooves and not hands.”
Pinkie and I went back up the restaurant just in time to see Maud concluding her story about how she met Boulder. Rarity was clearly trying to feign interest.
“Oh, you two are back,” Rarity said.
“Yeah, the restrooms were busy,” I replied. “Oh, and there was something that you should see, Rarity. I think it could help you with your next design.”
“Uh, sure thing.”
Rarity left the table, and Pinkie immediately took her spot.
Once Rarity and I were out of the Pie sisters’ earshot and viewpoint, Rarity turned to me.
“So what is that you wanted to show me?” Rarity asked.
“Okay, I’ll be honest with you,” I replied. “I got you out of the way because I have some bad news to discuss in private.”
“Oh, dear, what’s the issue?” Rarity looked behind her. “Did Pinkie not get what she wanted?”
“It’s that obvious, isn't it? The pouch store was closed because the owner had just left to visit Canterlot with his grandniece and won’t be back for a few months.”
“Well, we'll just have to help Pinkie find a new present for Maud. We have plenty of time before the gift exchange at sunset and all of Manehattan to explore.”
“Actually, I’ve got a better idea.” I took out some bits. “You wouldn’t happen to accept last-minute commissions, would you?”
Rarity widened her eyes in realization. “You want me to create the pouch?”
“Of course. Pinkie and I agreed on it. Plus, there’s a market nearby if you’re in need of supplies.”
“I suppose, but it doesn’t feel right accepting money from friends…”
“Then you can think of this as a business transaction. After all, this could be your first sale in Manehattan.”
“Oh, alright. I’ll see what I can do. It was a good thing I brought my emergency sewing kit with me today.”
“Great! Now, let’s head back.”
Rarity and I returned to the table.
“By the way,” I said. “How did Maud meet Boulder?”
“To put it simply, she found him in the rain when she was just a filly. There was a bit more to it, but it’s more or less the jist of it.”
After our time at the restaurant, we continued scouring the city. We still went to the big toy store and the jewelry shop, and Maud still didn’t show any interest in the potential gifts.
We arrived at the market square, and Rarity immediately found a stall that sold fabrics.
“Ooh, excellent!” Rarity exclaimed. “Er, Pinkie, why don’t you help me decide which fabrics to use for my future shop while Spike and Maud explore the market district?”
“Okie dokie loki!” Pinkie replied.
I quickly escorted Maud to the other side of the market square.
“So, Maud,” I said, “did you already get your gift for Pinkie?”
“Yes,” Maud replied bluntly.
“Oh, good. I was worried you might get a last-minute gift.”
“Like what Pinkie is doing?”
I stopped walking. “What makes you say that?”
“Maud Sense.”
“So it runs in the family. I wonder what Limestone and Marble’s senses are like, and whose side you get it from.”
“Similar to Pinkie and mine. Mother’s.”
“Heh. Thanks for solving that brief mystery.”
When sunset arrived, the four of us traveled to the central park. I watched as the swan boats floated by.
“Do hurry, Spike,” Rarity called out. “It’s almost time.”
“Coming!” I hurried to the blanket and sat down.
Rarity said to Pinkie and Maud, “After the day we've had, I'm probably looking forward to the swap part of the Pie Sisters' Surprise Swap Day even more than the two of you! And I'm not even a Pie sister!”
“Yeah, we can't wait to see what gifts you got for each other,” I added. But I already knew what the gifts would be.
“Well, you're both going to have to,” Pinkie said. “We don't just swap, silly. We always sing the ‘Pie Sisters' Surprise Swap Day’ Song first! Ready, Maud?”
“As I'll ever be,” replied Maud.
“It's the Pie Sisters' Swap Day Song!” Pinkie sang loudly.
“Hey.”
I lightly applauded. “Best song of the season.”
“Okay, time to swap presents!” Pinkie announced.
Pinkie and Maud exchanged their gifts. Just like in the show, Pinkie got cupcake-scented confetti for her party cannon.
“Maud,” Pinkie said tearfully. “You know me so well. You really are the most thoughtful gift-giver in the world! I'm gonna love it five-ever! That's even longer than forever.”
Maud opened her present. It was a rock pouch designed like Pinkie saw on the store window.
Rarity did a good job replicating the design. At least, I hope she replicated it.
“Thanks, Pinkie and Rarity,” Maud said.
“W-w-why are you thanking me?” Rarity nervously asked. “I-I had nothing to do with this.”
“You made this.”
“Oh, p-please. Even I wouldn’t…” Rarity saw Maud staring at her, despite the latter not changing her expression. “Oh, alright, it was me. Did Spike tell you?”
“She already knew,” I replied. “Maud Sense.”
“I knew you'd love it!” Pinkie exclaimed. “It was all worth it! Next year, I’ll step up my game and make sure your next gift is—”
“Pinkie, wait,” Maud held up a hoof. “Gift giving isn't a competition. It's an expression of love, and you always make sure to give your gifts with lots of love. That's why I'll always love them, and you, five-ever. That's even longer than forever.”
“Aww!”
The two sisters hugged each other for the longest time.
We left the park after that event. Maud had her rock pouch, and Pinkie with her cupcake confetti.
“Before we leave for Ponyville, I wish to show you three something,” Rarity said. “Follow me.”
We did just that and came up to a building that had boarded up windows and a locked gate. There was also a “For Sale” sign nailed to one of the boards.
“Voila! Welcome to the future home of ‘Rarity For You’!” Rarity announced. “I found it on our way to the park. What do you think of the place? Is this the right location? Did I pick a good spot?”
“No,” replied Maud. “You picked the perfect spot.”
“You know, I think this might be my favorite PSSSD ever!” Pinkie exclaimed. “But I can't wait 'til next year's PSSS-D-W-R-S!
“Wait. PSSS-D-W-R-S?” Rarity tried to pronounce “What's that?”
“P-S-S-S-D-W-R-S! It's a new tradition that Maud and I came up with! Pie Sisters' Surprise Swap Day...”
“...with Rarity and Spike,” Maud concluded.
“Uh, thanks,” I said. “I’ll look forward to that.”
Rarity also showed interest, but was worried about the gift she had to bring. Pinkie assured her it didn’t matter what gift it was as long as it was given with love.
“But now that you mention it,” Pinkie said, “I could use more confetti for my party cannon. You wouldn't believe how much of that stuff I go through in a day!”
Her cannon went off one last time.
I liked how this episode turned out. Pinkie was able to get Maud a rock pouch for Bolder without sacrificing her party cannon, and I got to experience PSSSD first hand. I just had to remember this annual tradition from now on.
Wow, that was unexpected. I can't believe Pinkie Pie didn't ask Rarity to make a pouch for Maud. But I am so glad they didn't run into that swindler.
Shame Rarity didn't do her Pinkie Pie impersonation.
But still, great stuff.
I wonder if Thorax would show up in the Crystal Empire after the Crystalling, since he did in the very last moment of the episode. Keep an eye on the bottom left side of this image.
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Also, I would like to see more secret meetings between Spike/David and Luna. He could warn her about the events of "A Royal Problem". That would save a trip for Starlight.
This Spike missed the '70s.
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That sounds like an amusing scenario.
Suggesting to Zecora that she label her potions would be one possible solution.
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I agree with labeling the bottles. Have Spike/David be there when that happens. That would be better than this:
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I understood that reference.
Ponk? Ponk. Ponk is good.
Honestly, Spike/David could bring the Hippogriffs situation up to the Princesses. Or invite the Yaks, Griffons, and Dragons to the Festival of Friendship. To give Equestria some more fire power against the Storm King. We can assume the areas surrounding the capital were put under his control. But I doubt that the yeti had enough soldiers to lock down the entire country. David could even form the Young 6 early with all the Changelings being reformed so soon!
Decisions, decisions. On Your Marks resolves itself so I don’t see him needing to intervene. Applejack’s Day Off just needs him to suggest Rarity, Twilight, and him seeing why her chores take so long lately. I can see him asking Zephyr Breeze the uncomfortable/important questions; “Does it feel nice to give up all the time?”, “Don’t you want to pay for your own stuff without having to ask other ponies to lend you bits?”, “Why are you taking advantage of your parents, or my girlfriend?” Didn’t Rainbow Dash learn when and when not to prank in Gilda’s episode?
As for “Fame and Misfortune”, maybe Spike could suggest adding a ‘Based on true events’ label to the Friendship Journal. The idea was a solid one besides sharing their personal thoughts with the public. A revised version could even include Twilight’s first lessons to sell home how she got to where she is now! Obviously—leave out private moments which they wouldn’t want the public to know. I don’t think the events of Every Little Thing She Does will happen due to how much Starlight has learned.
—Cragadilian
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I kind of wish they went with six-ever.
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Between Rainbow Dash mimicking the girls in Newbie Dash and Rarity’s spot on impression, I’d saw we were swindled out of seeing their impressions together.
More good
Just out of curiosity how long does it take for you to make each chapter!
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It usually depends. I try not to make it longer than a month.
Thanks
Discord should make this timeliness run a recording, it's way better than canon Spike
Maybe add it to multiverse Fimfiction to his collection 👍
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Ok, that one is absolutely priceless! 👍
So the episodes aren't happening canonically? That definitely throws a screwball.
I think a cool idea would be for Spike to encounter Thorax much sooner in a wild card episode.
As an example, Thorax finds Spike and tells him the changelings are planning to attack Canterlot Castle to rescue the queen from the dungeons and the two work together to stop it from happening, and in the process, Thorax becomes the new king, thereby eliminating the need for To Where and Back Again.
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It really is amazing how they hid Thorax's arrival for awhile.
Also, nice chapter author. Now I can sleep.
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That is something I like to see considering the whole festival of friendship spike was the only non pony there. Maybe if she brought them together for a bit they would have considering giving the other non ponies a chance when they came to school later.
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Well at least she won't the book. Worst case scenario he tells her to stop acting like a baby and yes it upsetting but if anyone can lemons into lemonade she can. That will hopefully end the tantrum sooner.
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But she didn't know her study method and was slacking because she wasn't even trying to find a way to get that info in there. Twilight seeing that she was slacking off when she should be studying tested her and then seeing how she would have failed tried to help her.
In addition, Spike's role as ambassador happens as in the canon, but that version knows how to manage the chips and make treaties. As I also mentioned the details, Discord was present in all the generations up to the fifth and also the consequences that occurred from the events of the war against the villains in Equestria, knowing that there is always a defined end; Nor is that reality impossible and saying Spike reincarnated.
Also the role of Uncle Spike in helping his niece Flurry in controlling his powers, knowing that he is not yet aware of its use; but that would be interesting.
Good point of being able to go to Manetthan with Rarity, Pinkie and Maud.
You're just not going to touch the fact a mysterious entity is manipulating fate? For fucks sake author no one would stay sane knowing something like this spike's characterization is very, very wrong in this aspect.
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I just have to ask do any of you guys think that this fanfic can be a audio fanfic on YouTube? I mean there's not a lot of audio FanFiction on YouTube of Spike. there are still are some but not a lot.
Also which YouTube narrator would perfect for this fanfic?
Actually there is a YouTuber that has been making videos about this fanfiction. Here's a link but he does it in Spanish.
https://youtube.com/@Mlp-fictiom?feature=share9
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Huh, I didn’t know that. If only I could understand Spanish so I could see what the comments say, but I’m still glad my fanfic is mentioned outside of FimFiction.
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Have you asked any YouTuber to narrate your fanfics?
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No, but that’s fine. If someone wants to read my stories and make an audio fanfic, I'm all for it under the condition that they give proper credit.
i CANNOT wait for the gauntlet of fire episode!!!!
I was thinking do you guys think that maybe brony Spike should be equip with with some armor or maybe with a shield in the fire of gauntlet episode. That way he can reflect attacks and protect himself. Also I think he should be equipped with with a slingshot with some magic flask grenade pallets from Twilight or some smoke bombs from Trixie or even better yet some knockouts pellets from zecorda. I know we're not trying to make this spike out of character so the girls don't him find him suspicious. But come on how badass would this Spike be if he has some equipment like this.
I just realized something. Why didn't the girls just ask discord to turn into dragons. that way they could help spike in The gauntlet of fire tournament or better yet to make sure they don't get attacked by other drakes
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I think it because they can't ask for help from him. Discord tried to a friend but he wasn't good at it and despite that they regulated him to the background.
11606774 Coool que si puedas encontrar historias de MLP en youtube. Saludos.
He should also point out that what Twilight did was wrong, and told her that a true Princess is supposed to have discipline, restraint, learn to trust her subjects and believe that diplomatic protocol would succeed. They don't go around stabbing their friends in the back and abuse their trust by tricking them into distracting a foreign dignitary and stealing their artifacts, just because they didn't have the cajónes to be patient enough to see things through.
Hey remember the EqG outtake where the two Pinkies used the mirror portal to switch places? You gonna consider that in your fic? It could explain some things!
(Like in 28 Pranks Later where she seemed to not remember what she said in s1 about not pranking Flutters. Rainbow's action I could kinda excuse if she thought Flutters could take it after all this time, but not Pinkie.... unless that wasn't the same Pinkie!)
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I would actually want to see that happen. With that, we wouldn't know which Pinkie Pie the ponies, dragons or other creatures they were really talking to.
Yeah if there's any [s7 eps] at all that could come before the 2nd Changeling attack and Starlight's graduation party. What is the time frame for everything again? Will it take one more year?
(Well, Starlight did come earlier, so her graduation could come within a tighter time frame...)
Good luck with that. Though you'd probably be busy helping Starlight on the other side of the city. . .
Yeah I did make some suppositions a long time back that Thorax might not be able to reach any of the others, though it would be good to find out what's been happening in the hive without Chrysalis, and if Ocellus is in charge now and is the one to instigate the s6 finale attack.
Ooooh, but I bet you'd love to roast that elitist food critic a new one! And Pony Elvis too!
Hmmm, did I have anything to say about this one before I read the new chapter? Can't remember...
She might still be a bit peeved if Starlight ended up skipping the dinner without asking...
Oh? They gonna call her Rainbow Trash this time?
(Btw she's gonna still be called "Crash" by them.)
Hope it works this time and it makes more sense than how you made Mare-Do-Well play out. Maybe be careful with your words so not to make her think you're challenging her. Also maybe consider my previous ideas as to why Dash and Pinkie both acted like they did? (That Dash had become complacent and assumed Fluttershy could take it, and that Pinkie just had a case of absent-mindedness like you revealed in Filli Vanilli, or she was actually the EqG Pinkie visiting...)
Three time frames: the boutique opening, the interview, and the review reading. Wonder what Spike has to say to JJ Jamison Pony.
Oh, and grill that pushy landlord for spoiling his daughter rotten. (grumble grumble, hypersensitive libtards, no wonder the nation fell in time and led to the state of G5...)
"Ah ah ah, there's no way you can Tom Sawyer your way out of this!"
"Huh?"
"Nothin'. Now get busy!"
"Crackin' the whip, are you, lil guy?"
"Yep!" (*cracks whip*) "You ain't gonna impress your rainbow waifu with that attitude!"
On a scale* of 1 to 10, who wants to bet how effective this Spike will be over the old Spike? I put my bits on 5, as in no better or worse! 😛
*(oops, a dragon scale joke!)
Dandy Grandeur: (*scoffs*) "Sorry, but I don't take the opinion of some lowly baby dragon!! Run along now, whelp!"
"Hey! I'm her special somedragon, and she's your boss!"
Grandeur: "What?! Eugh, didn't know I would be working for some pedo bestial creep! Humph! I'm out!"
(*Hard Hat, Wrangler and I gape in shock as Dandy Grandeur left*)
"Yeah you better get out you xenophobic cretin! Wow can you believe this guy! Also, I'm older than you think. And we're taking things slowly."
Hard Hat: ". . . Um, ok. . . So, you and her? A Dragon and a Pony? Huh, weird."
Wrangler: "Well Ah think that's swell of you to rope up a gal like her! Heh, Ya should hear of my feller kin who found himself a fine youngin heifer gal immigrant from off tha distant coast of Foenum, so Ah'm pretty familiar with tha concept of them interspecies doohickey magics!"
Foenum?! You're telling me that Them's Fightin' Herds is canon and exists in this world?!? 😱
"Um, er, thanks. Anyway, about you two. . ."
(P.S. How's this little omake of mine? Any parts of it that could be better? Yeah I know I could've just gone with Braeburn and Little Strongheart for the cross-pairing, but I had found a good opportunity to bring TFH into this!) 😅
How about convincing Pinkie Pie that a sneeziversary is not a very Pinkie thing to do? Or have her not use the super sticky celebration string? Or delaying Rarity a little bit beforehand? And then he can run off to have fun grilling the spooky eyes in the woods?
Nooooooo! My precious!! Don't throw this good thing away! And why rob those fillies (plus good ol Rusty Bucket) the chance to learn? And the Mane 6 to learn and be nostalgic? And the chance for Sunny or Argyle in the future to find it and learn? Won't the impact of these lessons outlast the initial wave of fan drama?
At least maybe suggest the journal not be that widespread at first? Or have his own ways to deal with the fan Ponies. (And help the Mane 6 with their respective issues with em. Especially ) (Which groups of fans has he been able to deal with in the past?) Or make some edits and disclaimers that these are real Ponies and actual events. Maybe even toss around some ideas for different editions of the journal like one with the stories arranged by Element (or even separated into "books" and "testaments" [lol] for different purposes). Also I'm curious if they really did write their old pre-s4 lessons into there.
To change, or to keep running smoothly. And when are you gonna tell em what you are doing and who you really are?
Um, you mean calling Twilight out, right? What did the girls have to learn?
Maybe you could stop her from pushing her friends away, and stop her from stealing the pearl?
Or have Starlight OP the whole fleet at the beginning! 😎
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/412519/how-my-little-pony-the-movie-should-have-ended
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Edit: Wait, changed my thought on Pinkie: her flaw in Filli Vanilli wasn't the same as in 28 Pranks----not reading a room vs forgetting something---- and now her forgetfulness doesn't make sense for her. Unless, again, it's the EqG Pinkie. Or you retcon that part. You can do that. 😏
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k36H_XjidJg&list=PLmZalZ3FV4JERibTZGW8egeUlgX8eMsKR&index=77&ab_channel=FormerlyBronze
The power of the Men in MLP or Equestria.
I’m kind of curious what you’ll do with this. I doubt it will happen but it would be interesting to see if an earlier introduction ends up causing the two to be together. I kind of have a weakness for Ember X Thorax stuff, so it would be nice to get some of that, even if the ship sadly ended up not being acknowledged at the end of the show like Lira X Bombom was.
The movie is also a big point of interest for me, I really wish you can feature some of the characters in some non-canon episode.
If you are open to suggestions, I would recommend making so that the princess don’t get captured at the beginning, or at least Celestia and Cadence don’t get captured.
With Luna captured and her little ponies in danger, it would be a good chance to see Celestia edge into becoming a dark/nightmare version of herself, add in Shining and Flurry and you can easily include a Cadence who’s also struggling into not becoming a dark/nightmare version of herself
Hmmm a few more thoughts on the Fame and Misfortune ep. . .
First, it's fine if your character has plans to try and get rid of the journal beforehand, just keep him from succeeding there.
Second, I'm not so sure if saying "based on true events" in the book is going to help prevent misunderstanding or willful ignorance. You know how people can be. (Btw there was not only the "your character would've been better" part from the reporter, but also the "she's even funnier in real life" and "you are way different from the Fluttershy in the book" parts.) (They read how they will.)
Third, there are actually several implications in-ep that they did indeed write their old pre-s4 lessons and adventures in the journal. Neat! Though at which point(s) would that have been done, either in canon or in this fic with David-Spike?
The Changelings reformatted are bullshit, with its logic being so ridiculous broken it isn't funny...
It's like telling ponies sharing food and not eating themselves is a good idea.
But whatever...