Chapter Nine and a half: “Twilight's Train Troubles”
Chapter Nine and a half: “Twilight's Train Troubles”
{Authors Note : I didn't think this was all that important to the story, but thought it would be funny enough and necessary to write in. I didn't want to give it a full chapter, nor did I want to break the flow of chapter nine, so I suppose you can call this a “bonus chapter” if you like.}
Twilight yelled, “don't worry Applejack, I'll catch the next train,” as she continued to wave at the train pulling out of the station. After it was out of sight Twilight got irritated. “The nerve, he could have at least let me get on and pay him later, and I can't believe Princess Celestia would forget me like that.”
Twilight went to look at the train schedule and pricing. She found when the next train was headed to Canterlot, and how much it would be. She then quickly ran home to get the money she would need. When she walked in the door Spike was eating ice cream from the tub with a large spoon, surprised he tried to hide it behind his back, “oh Twilight, what are you doing here, I thought you'd be on the train with Applejack heading to Canterlot.”
“Well I would be but I didn't have any money, and apparently the princess forgot to mention me in her letter to the station. Are you eating ice cream again Spike?”
Spike blushed slightly and said, “I'm sorry Twilight, this stuff is just so good.”
Twilight gave Spike a disappointed look, “well I don't have time to lecture you right now, I need the money for those tickets pronto.”
Spike looked down at the floor and kicked his foot.
Twilight realized why almost immediately, “Spike, please tell me that we had that ice cream before I left.”
Spike still looking at the ground said in hushed tone, “no, I uh.... went out and bought it.”
Twilight groaned, “please tell me we at least have enough for a ticket to Canterlot.”
Spike looked up, “well we have enough for a ticket TO Canterlot, but we don't have enough for both ways.”
Twilight looked hopeful, “that's fine, the princess will be able to make arrangements to get me home, I'm sure she will understand.”
Twilight grabbed what money Spike had left her and went to the train station. She waited impatiently for ten minutes for the next train. Once it arrived she quickly boarded, but got irritated as the train waited for all passengers to board. After a few minutes the train was in motion and she fell back in her seat, calming down, knowing there was nothing to do now but wait. The train ride was uneventful, and when the train arrived at Canterlot she ran straight to the castle.
She looked all around the castle for any sign of Applejack, Celestia, or Luna, but she found none. After half an hour of searching she finally asked a guard, who informed her that they had went back to Ponyville.
“WHAT,” Twilight yelled, getting enraged. After a moment she realized that without the princess here she was stuck. She thought about it and decided she could go explain the situation to her parents who could lend her the money she needed to get back home.
She went to her parents house and knocked for a whole minute before asking their neighbors where her parents were. The neighbors informed her that her parents had went on vacation and wouldn't be back for three days.
“Oh you have got to be kidding me,” Twilight said as she walked back to the train station. She figured she could wait for them to arrive back there, it seemed to be her only hope. Once she got there one of the guards stationed at the station saw her looking sad, “hey Twilight why you looking so sad for?”
Twilight looked up, “oh, I just came here to catch up with my friend Applejack, and didn't have the money to go home, but they already left back for Ponyville.”
“Is that all,” the guard asked and turned to face the conductor of the train currently in the station, “hey conductor,” the conductor turned to look, “mind if the student of Princess Celestia tags along, she needs to get back to Ponyville.”
“Student of Celestia you say? Well why not,” he turned to Twilight, “hop on board miss, the train leaves in twenty minutes.”
Twilight stared dumbfounded, then after a moment turned to the guard, “thanks, you don't know how much trouble you saved me.”
She walked on board and began mentally kicking herself for forgetting how famous she really was.
{Authors notes: I want to quickly thank my friends John, Cody, Craig, and Chris for helping with spell and grammar check, also my grandmother for helping me put the finishing touches. I would also like to especially thank Chris for challenging me to write this, and finally I would like to remind anyone who has actually read this far that this is part one part two can be found at: Retexo }
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Hold on, your nan helps you to write a My Little Pony fanfic? Im i the only one a bit confused by that?
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My grandmother is a very supportive person, and I'm quite open about my love of My Little Pony. But to answer your question, no she didn't help me write it, she simply fixed my atrocious use of words and incredibly long run on sentences.
1117555 oh, ok, it just confused me because im not on good terms with my own grandmother
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I have lived with my grandmother my entire life. She is practically my mother, but sometimes we act more like best friends. And sometimes we argue like best friends too.
1117607 but thats to be expected.
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Yeah, Fluttershy may be my favorite pony, but god I love Pinkie Pie sometimes. She lets me have fun and be sudo-serious like that.
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I suppose your right, but I'm still sad to hear your not on good terms with yours...
1117709 ahh its fine
its been that way since i was very young
Thats awesome that your grandma helps
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Two things on that. One, that is pretty much my view on immortality. Two, no one else but Pinkie Pie could possibly have said it better. No realy, I let the characters right their own dialouge in my head, without her, I could have never put my own thoughts into words.
*Grins and claps* Very cute. The grammar needs work but overall a very cute story.
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You gotta be kidding me. The grammar needs work? Shoot, I reviewed it a lot. Can you tell me where you saw some errors? I'd really appreciate it. Unless you're talking about in the dialogue, in which case some of it is intentional.
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Sorry >.< I'd have to look more closely over things to let you know but I think most of it was dialogue. It was really jarring to have the pony use contractions and formal speech in the same sentence and didn't feel like it necessarily fit with the character.
I'll read it again and see if it was just dialogue that was bugging me or if there was other stuff I noticed.
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Yeah, I tried hard to stick with the characters standard speech model, but occasionally switching back and forth between characters like AJ and RD, and Twi and Rarity, caused some funky problems, I appreciate your efforts though.
1136986 but all of them speak with contractions so that doesn't make any sense as to why the characters would use casual and formal speech in the same sentence.
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Well maybe my view is biased, I am actually from Texas, so I am quite used to seeing that sort of thing regularly. More than likely it is the cause of my dialogue being back and forth like that. From now on, I will attempt to stick a little better with speech patterns, thanks for the critique.
1142458 Really? That's fascinating.
I'm a Canuckian from up North so I'm not used to it. For me contractions are for everyday speech and not using them indicates more formal speaking like in a lecture paper or somesuch. so combining the two comes across as strange but if it's normal for you I can definitely understand why that wouldn't seem out of place.
Definitely looking forward to more of your works and glad I was able to help.
First fan fic I read. I really enjoyed it, not just because A.J is my favorite.
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LOL, it's the first fan fic I've written. Glad to here you liked it though.
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Yeah I've seen it, it's a reference to the Apple.mov video by hotdiggedydemon (way to lazy to check my spelling on that)
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Yeah this was my first ever fic, so I can be predictable. Read my newer work, people LOVE perception. And Discord's Resignation, but I prefer Perception by far.
I found this to be an Okay story to me...
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People still read my work?
LOL
Anyway, thanks for the error spots. I probably won't edit them anytime soon, but if I ever get the time to jump start my series back to life, it will get done.