Twilight's time is coming, her and the Princess spend her last moments together.
This little story was based of this comic. http://willis96.deviantart.com/art/Always-Faithful-296380328
Credit to FauxShores for proof reading and editing any mistakes in grammar.
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Cool story bro
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I see you edited your comment.
I'm not even sure if you really read it.
Well I guess it doesn't really matter.
Good show!
Unofficial Sequel: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/40863/Trauma
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Just did, wanted to reserve my front row seat
like i said, cool story bro
I will say...
Why it is short, it does have a moral.
Awh shit. Manly tears alert.
1113121 media.steampowered.com/steamcommunity/public/images/avatars/bb/bb4aa82dac296beb84c185c156d0db690eff75f9_full.jpg
That being said, even though I am totally immune to sad stories, I find this to be a nice short read.
Your probably going into the feature box.
Not that I like it, but I also haven't said I hate it. It's just a trend I noticed. Sad, short, one shots that are written well tend to go into the feature box.
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Oh well thanks for that.
I hope I make it.
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I wanted to keep it short and simple.
It was just something I wanted to throw out there.
Did you enjoy it?
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I hope you enjoyed it my friend.
Also sorry about using a different editor this time.
I didn't want to bother you with this one.
1113179
Well it certainly was more respectful than my one-shot.
I can't write for my life.
So why do I do it?
BECAUSE I HAVE THE RIGHT TO.
I read that comic and it took everything I had not to cry. But the story was too heart wrenching and I shed manly tears, and this story was just as good.
1113198 Thats fine! I've been incredibly busy, and I've barely had time to update my stories, let alone get started on new ones
excellent job here though!
Sadder then my little dashie
1113248
No way!
you really found this sadder than My Little Dashie!?
1113167 I thought of a joke while reading your response. (No offense, I am neutral about your story.)
Feature Box! The game
Choose your difficulty
>Sad-Easy<
Comedy-Semi Easy
Random-Below Average
Slice of Life-Normal
Adventure-Medium
Human-Hard
Dark-Expert
Sex-Demigod Challenger
Gore-Good Fucking Luck Douchebag
Select your perk!
Veteran Author-Great chance your story will become featured as soon as you put something out there
>One-Shot< -Due to your short story, more people will most likely read it.
(That's all I can think about :l )
1113289
I'm sorry about the tears, but you just made my day!
1113263 Yes I'm crying more
Grammatical errors really kill the moment, just saying. Anyway, have a fav and a like. The comic almost made me cry. I've read
too many sadfics.OhGod, I just remembered that I read The Battle of Fort Book a few hours ago. Transition from childhood, being babysitted, to lying on your death bed. Here come the waterworks... (While listening to this)
I loved the fic, it was really sad and well written but one thing that really bugged me about it was this sentence right here "She smiled. “Some of the most amazing people in Equestria.” Cried Twilight a single tear now rolling down her cheek." I don't mean to be nit-picky but I think it would be better if it was changed to ponies instead of people. Aside from that I loved the story and was a great read for me
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I said people
Oh Celestia away to the edit button!
Edit: I fixed it and thank you so much for that heads up! I guess real life habits are kinda hard to ignore.
1113394 Oh no problems at all :) I'm glad I was a help
keep up the good work with your stories 
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>Comedy
>Vet Author
What am i doing wrong ;_;?
Havent even read it yet and im already crying, i know this is gonna be good
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What...?
How is that even possible?
Well I hope you enjoy the story for when you fully read it.
Don't forget to let me know what you thought of it.
Ack!
There's a lot of errors.
For example: it’s not going to be that bad.” Whispered the purple unicorn,
It should be bad," whispered
Only you repeat this mistake countless times... and that's all I have to say about that.
Other than that, though, hasn't Celestia's whole 'immortality is really sad' been done practically to death? I think it's just slightly unoriginal, but I've got no room to talk anyways. I mean, I really don't want to bash the fic, I'm sure it's done well, but in my nitpicking eyes, so many capitalization errors are just so glaring as to detract from the story for me. I'm sure it's decently written and all, but it's just... not my cup of tea.
So have a wonderful day, all the same!
I enjoyed it, have a fav and like.
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Thank you very much!
My Face, neck, and shirt are wet from the tears shed. I was also to lazy to get up for tissues during the read. You sir/ma'am must continue making people shed tears. write more i beg you. This story equals up to My Little Dashie and another story i read where Spike dies from a toxin produced by the changlings... You have a gift And I wish I could write as good as you. Love and Tolerate- Shamrox17
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I promise to keep writing, you have made me very happy by just writing that.
I hope you enjoy my future works and if you want to keep update (I hate saying this part it feels so needy) don't forget to give me a watch!
I'm glad you think this is on par to MLD, but I doubt it's that good.
Also I'm a guy lol.
Thank you so much for your amazing comment!
Sorry about the tears.
Gorgeous little story. I hope you told Willis96 about it, I imagine he'd like it too. Very well-realized, Twi and the Princess were clearly very, very close.
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Yeah I left him a message on his DA page informing him about it.
I'm glad you enjoyed the story.
While I didn't cry (don't worry; I didn't cry during "My Little Dashie." It's probably the factor that I may possibly be a robot, but that's beside the point), it's definetely got some emotion I noticed. While the topic of "Twilight dying and Celestia's sad because she's immortal" has been done before, well, so have a crap load of other ideas that are throughout Fimfiction and other fanfiction sites. But you know, you just got to let it go eventually, because while it's not original, it can still be good if done right. (Oh, yeah, this was a comic--well, nonetheless, it's not uncommon.) And when I do let it slide, I see a beautiful, simple piece. The part where Celestia sang the theme song for the show was a nice addition.
My only nitpick is that some points, some dialogue isn't in another paragraph when it should be. When another person (or pony) speaks, it should jump into another paragraph, and it won't confuse some people as to who is talking. Like here:
Should be:
[Celestia wrapped Twilight in her hooves and continued her story. “I love you Twilight... You are my daughter, I only wish I could join you," whispered Celestia.
Twilight with the little strength she had was only able to say “Princess... please don’t say stuff like that.”]
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I see, sorry for my mistake.
I will take your advice and use in my future stories.
You've made such amazing fanfiction, I am crying and writing. Using my memories of the placements of the keys. My nose is snuffed, my eyes are puffy and bloodshot, you've done a amazing job of this fanfiction. Thank you s-so much.
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Thank you for the lovely words.
Sorry about all the tears.
I really hope this gets featured. I never thought anything I write would, but everyone seems to love this story.
I like the friendship report.
1113509 This was absolutely beautiful
Thier just isnt a emoticon to explain these feels
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I'm glad you enjoyed it my friend.
Sorry if it upset you in anyway.
I cried in this JUST like I did in the comic!
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I'm glad you enjoyed it.
I've read no less then fifty fan fictions in the last week alone(sick in bed) in the area of my little pony, and no less then 100 altogether. I've read My Little Dashie, Last Party, the really sad stuff. And none of them made me stop and look away to avoid tears, but yours did. Thank you man, I needed that.
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I'm glad to help and thank you for your lovely comment.
Please get well soon!
I could almost hear Celestia singing a slow, sad version of the song.
That was just....This should explain it--->iambrony.steeph.tp-radio.de/mlp/gif/132681283573.gif?1328546512
Very well done.
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Now I'm picturing it...
The feels man... The feels.
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That's how I imagined it as soon as I realized what it was...
You've made a grown man cry
I hope you're proud of yourselfiambrony.jsmart.web.id/mlp/gif/131653349422.gif?1316805684
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You make me feel like a bad man now.
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The fic was very well-written and I loved your word choice. It all flowed seamlessly.
Feel any better?
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A little, thank you.