It’s a chilly fall day at Sweet Apple Acres, the crown jewel of Ponyville, and Applejack, the head farmpony of the lovely little orchard can’t wait to get started on her early morning prep work. The harvesting season is coming to an end, and the remaining apples and trees need to be tended to. There are only two issues that are putting her more on edge than normal:
The present, thick fog that was scheduled for the entire day, and the strange, moaning noises she heard last night.
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Nice start. I especially like the scene descriptions. It gets you a good picture of what’s up. A few typos, but nothing major, except maybe “lightening”? Haha. Unless I got the wrong idea, it should be lightning. Lightening is... something else, haha.
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Oops. I didn’t notice the lightning/lightening issue, as it didn’t underline the word.
Also, what other typos? Mind giving me a few examples so I can quickly fix em?
Oops, it's been a few hours, so I don't remember, but I think one was missing an apostrophe. I think it was creatures hand or something, haha.
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Jeez, I have NO idea how I managed to miss that one. I wrote that chapter when I was pretty much wide awake. Thanks for the heads up.
Also, thank you very much for being the second person to check out this story. I greatly appreciate it.
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Haha, hey, no sweat. We all miss things in our stories. And haha, cool, I'm the second person. Well, I'll be getting on to the next few chapters when I get the time!
Haha, exhilarating story. Makes me wonder just what’s going on as well. Guess I’ll find out next chapter? Haha.
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only one way to find out.
Quite the interesting story. It would be nice if more of this could be expanded on in a future story or something. I think it could be quite the interesting tale. And haha, you had me in the first half, not gonna lie
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For the most part, Apparition Amphitheater stories are more or less self contained one-offs. However, like Goosebumps, I may consider re-visiting a story if I feel the need to expand on it in any way.
I do highly suggest you give my Apparition Amphitheater stories a try.
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Haha yeah, but it’s got interesting lore with these “stuck”, haha. I suppose it’s not much of a need to expand on this, but it would be cool.
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Like I said, I’ll keep it in mind for future works in this line. Thanks for having such an interest in it, though.
My Little Reviews & Feedback Review in 2023.