I love it!
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I did enjoy this, especially Sunset's descent into mindless hatred and rage. However next time you post I recommend giving your works another proofread or two. I saw many grammatical errors, shifts from first to third person, and past to present tense. That, along with a look by a beta reader, would make a diamond in the rough like this into something spectacular.

Keep at it!

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I'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the advice!

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Glad you enjoyed it! Thanks also for the idea to write an epilogue!

Damn, this is incredible.
To show how character will go all the way to their
goal and even death will be just a little nuisance... So few authors are not afraid to do that with villains/antagonists...
And I just impressed how you did Sunset so less pony and so much more than pony.
Sometimes, Celly, it's too late to say sorry.

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Thanks! I really wanted to have a villain story where they go beyond all the way so I'm glad you liked it!

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Things of from what I’ve learned from the story, who are we?

Are we the children of God or are we monsters of the damned?

I liked the story, however I have something to criticize, if I may:
-while I liked that this isn't some cliche story where the villain gets the protagonists in strange ways and brutally kills them, I felt that Sunset was a little overpowered;I get that she is filled with rage, but she is still a pony
-at some points, the story contradicts itself, because you said that you can't die in Tartarus, then, when Sunset destroyed the gates, you said that she can die;also the same with Equestria:you said that it was impossible to live in that state, yet she didn't die.And it wasn't like it was glossed over, you actually described her awful state
-now this I dunno if it's just you or Sunset, but it feels like someone doesn't like Celestia very much

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I'm glad you liked it and those are very valid criticisms, I will say I actually did some of these intentionally. My sort of goal when writing this was to stick to first person perspective as much as possible. With the being overpowered, yeah she is though i kinda just glossed over that since I wanted her to actually be rewarded for all of her effort. With her thinking she's going to die at the gates of Tartarus I decided that she thought she was going to die. Even though we as the reader know its impossible to die in there, and she knew it as well. Sometimes we don't think rationally and her mental state at that point in the story was degraded to the point that she forgot about not being able to die and THOUGHT she was going to if that makes sense.

With her not dying in Equestria, i should have implied it better with the conversation with the doctor but I was thinking that she would have died if she hadn't been rushed to the best hospital in Equestria. Hope that clears some things up but I'm glad you liked it!

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Check this out.
https://www.wattpad.com/story/280003655-twisted-metal-fires-of-retribution

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Ooh I liked it! It seems a bit fast paced but other than that I liked it.

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Thank you

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Maybe you can help me give ideas about the wishes my OC grants to the remaining heroes of Equestria, the other competitors, The Royal Sisters, and Starswirl on the story I made.

Like quote suggestions.

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Wishes? Like I know your oc is ridiculously OP but they have the ability to grant wishes like a genie? I'd love to help but I'm really bad at one liners/quotes and since i've never played any of the twisted metal games or anything i don't think I'd do a good job, sorry about that. If you need anything else though not related to my story please just sent it to me in a mail on this site, I don't want the comment section to get off topic.

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👌

10997912
New story inspired by yours, https://www.fimfiction.net/story/504629/let-there-be-carnage

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Noice! When its finished I'll check it out. I don't really like reading things before they're complete but thanks for letting me know! looking forward to when its done.

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You’re welcome

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You know, you could have made a second epilogue regarding about Celestia recovering but while she concealed herself away then consulted by Starawirl and she accuses him of all the wrong he had done to her and her sister and now the loss of her once beloved student.

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I could, though honestly I like where I ended it so I probably won't make more unless it's an entirely new story

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Then make it as a whole new story. But don’t worry I won’t rush you, just take your time.

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I might, lifes really busy though for me right now so I don't have any writing in the works right now but if I did make a new story about this whole thing it wouldn't have Star Swirl in it. He's not mentioned once in this whole story and he doesn't really have a place in this story. Honestly there isn't room for anyone but Sunset and Celestia in this story. It's all about these two if that makes sense. We'll see if i get to writing anything new but if its another revenge fic I'll make sure to let you know.

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I have to say that using your own broken bones to gouge out someone’s eye is metal af.