This is part 1 of a (probably) 3 part series.
Celestia(Age 10) had finally done it! Her and her family have patiently waited 3 years to get approval to take the exam safely to enter Twilight's School for Gifted Unicorns! After her mother's gruelling multiple desk jobs and her father working double shifts to even afford it, they got the fees covered!
Her real challenge was now actually taking the exam. Will she be able to finally have her wish come true, and be allowed into the premier school, or will it end in failure? Only time will tell...
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Cool nice job l always wondered what would be like if celestia end twilight switch places
I see you are already showing the differences between ruler!Twilight and ruler!Celestia, with Twilight having stricter rules for the entrance exam which I believe would mean that ruler!Twilight wouldn’t have let student!Twilight pass due to the surge that hatched the egg, and also her parents wouldn’t have been in the room to be turned into plants, yet Ruler!Celestia would have likely let student!Celestia pass, especially if the surge showed the true potential of student!Celestia.
I have to say, I DO like these possible showings of what COULD happen under certain different circumstances. In this case, what if Twilight and Celestia switched places. And, yeah, I COULD see Twilight having stricter rules in place for the school so it's just as focused on control as it is about ability. And, yeah, I DID like the scenes with Celly and her family at the start.
Anyway, wonderful job on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up. And I will definitely be looking forward to more of this (even if I'm mature enough to acknowledge and respect that real world matters need to take top priority and inspiration might not be easy to come by).
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Thanks! It's been a while since I did a vanilla fanfic. Mostly I've been diving into Crossovers, and have been looking for something to write when I'm in a good mood!
Good first chapter!
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Yeah. I can definitely understand that.
Celestia: I'm glad I FINALLY made it, your highness. But, I thought the whole point of the school was to teach young unicorns how to control their magic.
Twilight: Actually, it's only HALF the point. The OTHER half is to teach them more creative uses for their magic. And, well, think about it. YOU are quite a bit more powerful than most "gifted unicorns" - particularly in the field of fire magic. And that can be quite dangerous if you lost control. That is why you actually needed to learn to control your magic to a certain degree even BEFORE you got in. Imagine if you lost control in the middle of class. A LOT of innocent ponies would get hurt - including potentially several good teachers.
Celestia: Yes. That DOES make a lot of sense. But I solemnly swear that I will work extra hard to control my magic even when my family isn't around.
Twilight: I know you will, Celestia. You have already improved considerably since the last time you tried and I have no doubts that Spike and I, between the two of us, will help you improve EVEN MORE in the years to come.
Spike: Remember the LAST time you got so excited about a student, Twi? Sunset Shimmer?
Celestia: Sunset Shimmer?
Twilight: A long, sad story. She was my LAST personal student. Brilliant, powerful and hard-working, but also too arrogant for her own good and too ambitious for everyone else's. We did not exactly part on good terms.
Okay. Sorry about that. My mind kind of ran away with me for a few seconds.
GREAT job on the exchanges and characterizations in this latest chapter. The details that made things different from canon were beautifully done. I especially loved Celly's interactions with Moondancer and Sunset in this universe. And, yeah, the detail of Trixie being a descendant of Starswirl and a friend of Twilight's from "back in the day" was another great alternate universe detail. And, yeah, I am GLAD Twi put that jerk Quill in his place. Celly's performance with the levitation tests (even with Quill's -additions to try to sabotage Celly), the creativity test AND the phoenix egg portion was truly wonderful stuff.
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Thanks! This chapter made me nervous to publish because there were soo many things that were new to the AU and I wanted to get it just right. Good to know it turned out well!
UPDATE: I don't really post things like this unless it's important, but I think it is. I'll have a writing schedule for the stories I am working on up on my Blog so make sure to check it out for the current schedule to keep you informed of how I'm structuring these chapter updates for the sake of time management.
Sorry for posting like this, hope to hear from you soon!
Again, this was a really good chapter. LOVED the work that went into the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up. I have to say, I LOVED seeing Sunset calling Blueblood out on the prank he pulled on Celestia, as well as Spike's role in Sunset's lesson plan. I also got a few laughs out of Flash's interactions with Twilight and Celestia. And, yeah, the introduction to Bright Star (who is both Starlight Glimmer's granddaughter AND Silver Quill's younger sister) was pretty darn good too, as was the detail of Chrysalis's statue near Discord's, Twilight's getting used to making friends again and Celestia fighting back that nastier inner voice.
All in all, I will certainly be looking forward to more.
twi turned into such a mischievous and silly filly in close to 900 years... ilike it. this makes her a firecracker almost.
like sunsets outburst there, little of the old her showing.
That voice sounded like it must have been the nightmare trying to corrupt someone so it can be freed, and why is Twilight just keeping everything right under her in a position where she can be easily attacked if they get loose? I can’t just be “keep an eye on them” right?
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I imagine she's smart enough to have measures in place. Plus There's still a prophecy tied to Nightmare's return. I decided to keep it for relevance. "The stars shall aid in her escape"
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Also, you have been shortening Twilight’s School for Gifted Unicorns, to TGSU which when unshortened becomes Twilight’s Gifted School for Unicorns, because you have switched the G and the S
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Yes, that's intentional. Ponies referred it to that because it used to be called Twilight's Gifted School- For Unicorns way back when. I was planning on revealing it in next chapter, where Celly asks why everybody abbreviated it that way.
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Well I got to the question first, take that Celly!
Is this actually a role reversal? Or is Twilight's protege a completely different pony in a world that has already had a 1000 year rule by Celestia followed by an abdication of power, and this is a time after Twilight's friends passed? I'm kinda getting a vibe of the latter lately, but originally I thought this would be the former. It's not a bad thing, in fact I feel even more welcoming of such an idea. I just want to be sure moving forward what manner of tale I'm reading exactly.
Excellent work on this latest chapter. I got a real laugh out of Twilight's attempts to disguise herself, as well as the encounter with Rarity's granddaughters. And, yeah, the fact that Golden was able to see through Twilight's disguise, but able to keep quiet was a beautiful detail. The little Shout Out to Equestria Daily was another great detail. The "patience rewards friendship" lesson was simply wonderful.
Anyway, the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are all superbly done.
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I feel inclined to agree with this whole heartedly.
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Right now, it's leaning more towards an AU where Twilight ascended the throne and went through some sacrifices like Celestia did. I wonder where Shining Armor is? ;). These chapters during her school years is more about building up her character backstory.
Excellent job on this latest chapter. The exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. Ouch, Celly let herself get overconfident in that chess game with her cousin. You know you messed up big time when Twi lays down the law LIKE THAT. But I DID really like the detail of the origin of the lettering confusion as far as the name is concerned as well as Starlight's introduction to Celestia.
VERY definitely going to be looking forward to more of this.
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Spoilers!