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Charles Farrow #1 · Mar 24th, 2019 · 2 · · Prologue (un-edited) ·

Bro why you gotta bring up these memories in me.
Poor Glenn.

Looks alright so far, though I'd recommend joining some of the sentences when the characters are talking continuously.

"So instead of this"
"Where you talk in a separated fashion"
"But it's still the same person speaking"
"And you start a new sentence every time they say something new"

"It could be like this, where the sentences are joined. Don't get it twisted, it can still be the same person talking, but it doesn't read so awkwardly."

That's simply some advice from my personal view on it. It's up to you in the end. Just thought I'd put it out there.
Other than that it's actually written quite well, and I hope you keep writing it.

Sky Charmer #2 · Mar 24th, 2019 · 2 · · Prologue (un-edited) ·

Really interesting story, can't wait to see more.

WUBZ-_-Vinyl #3 · Mar 24th, 2019 · 1 · · Prologue (un-edited) ·

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Thank you for your advice! I think I will take you up on that :) and thank you for reading it. I will most certainly write more.

Sunny Milk #4 · Mar 25th, 2019 · · · Prologue (un-edited) ·

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What is this a crossover with?

WUBZ-_-Vinyl #5 · Mar 25th, 2019 · · · Prologue (un-edited) ·

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MLP X The Walking Dead

Ihatemylife #6 · Mar 29th, 2019 · 1 · · Prologue (un-edited) ·

I support this all the way.

WUBZ-_-Vinyl #7 · Mar 30th, 2019 · · · Prologue (un-edited) ·

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I'm glad that you do, I currently have the next chapter in the works already :)

ABitterPill #8 · Mar 31st, 2019 · · · Prologue (un-edited) ·

Not sure why this is flagged as "Second person". This is a first person perspective.

Cobolt blue #9 · Dec 2nd, 2019 · 1 · · Prologue (un-edited) ·

Finally a Walking Dead story, looking forward to this

WUBZ-_-Vinyl #10 · Dec 7th, 2019 · · · Prologue (un-edited) ·

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Don't know how to proceed. Will do what I can, when I can.

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