Y'know, I never realised how bad the original was until now. This seems so much more professional!
Might I ask how different the plot is going to be? Already there have been quite a few differences, though none too major yet.

Look forward to more, as is the polite thing to say.

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It's not going to be too much different in terms of the events. Though, even major events might go differently, but it will all eventually arrive to the point from which the sequel starts.

Hey you did it! Looking forward to awesomeness!
This will be the first new story I read for 2019. Xd

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Fancy rephrasing those first few words? "It's it going"? Do you mean it is or it isn't?

Ooooohthat was AWESOME! really like the nightmare art. Xd
Looking forward to more!

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I meant to say "not" instead of "it". Whoops. I think I need sleep.

Is Heroes of Might & Magic 5 a real video game?

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It is, yes https://store.steampowered.com/app/15170/Heroes_of_Might__Magic_V/

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It's weird that you ask. It is a real game from around 2005.

You have my attention. This could be either great or horrible depending on how you play your cards. I will enjoy it either way

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I will try not to disappoint!

I'd actually tried to read the old one when it first got posted. Didn't make it more than five chapters in because of the grammar and such.

I did like the idea though, glad to see you're rewriting it.

Also had no idea there was a sequel.

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Honestly, right now, I can barely read the original. It's so... bad. That's why I knew I had to rewrite it sooner or later.

This was a huge jump in quality, the little changes and things that stayed the same are just so we'll written now. I'm excited for the next chapter now, from the little of the original I've read it gonna be fun pickin out the big and subtle changes made to the flow and charcters untill it meets up with where I left off. Great job on the rewrite.

I cant wait for the next chapter!

Me too!!!

Looks interesting. I'll bite.

What about original story's sequel?

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I will do some edits to it once I'm done with this rewrite, but that's it. The sequel is of decent quality, it only needs some polish.

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It's not going to be too much different in terms of the events.

Different from the show, or different from some other story?

Having read a number of stories based on this premise, following along the same path as the show is usually what kills them. It very quickly becomes boring, following the same path, doing the same things, with everyone knowing full well what's going to happen next. Generally there comes a point where the author is just quoting the show for entire chapters with an "oh by the way my OC is tagging along." A character in a story like that can't do anything, can't affect anything, because the events and the path through them are all known. It becomes boring fast, and these stories generally end up abandoned.

If you're going to do this, I recommend you diverge from the beaten path.

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No, it's not what I meant. The story won't diverge too much from the original, but it will diverge from the known MLP:FiM canon.

Now I'm going to read the original...

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Well, I warned that it's not really that good, but if you like it, go on!

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Ще sнац sее

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A rewrite?
If so HELL YES
if not should be good to read
Any ways have your 64th like my good author

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Thank you!

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im of the personal opinion that this story didnt need a rewrite, but ill still read it if your gonna make it :)

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your a dam good writer so keep up the good work and never give up
if you ever need help just ask your fans they will try to help even if it's just Writers block, Life or Something else
so stay happy, and keep fighting (writing) the good fight (stories) (Fallout 3, Three Dog for the win)

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I may be good but what is this
p4r71(u|4r 1n73r357 ?

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"Some... Cryptography has always been an area of 'particular interest'. "... I-n-t-e-r-e-s-t, yup.

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thanks

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No prob.

*takes 12 shots of whiskey*

Buck it you're probably better at writing now, maybe this time I won't decide to drop the fic before I can finish it. Also, you're older now, so hopefully half of this won't read like an edgy teen bumbling through what he thinks sex maybe is like half of the original one did. Got my hopes up for this remake. I'll give it a look once it has more than a prologue.

Damn... Im Hooked for this story

Honestly I feel like their is an issue with the main character's logic of obeying the disembodied voice from within the creepy forest I just can't see how anyone would see the word of something like that as trustworthy, a person is more likely to think they are going crazy than want to listen to the voice that as far as they are concerned is within their own head

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Being all stressed out because of the sudden changes, you will likely trust anyone who says they can solve your problems. Desperation doesn't exactly work with logic, and many decisions made while desperate will be pretty dumb if you look at them later on or from the side. Unfortunately, I know it personally.

After finishing the old story a while back and just finish catching up on the sequel, I reread the first chapter of the old story and this one...

And a lot has changed, while the ending is different, the perspective solely focused on where Mike was which made the story very interesting, and you added several new scenes in the process, there were a few familiar ones, but the new ending to the prologue puts a new thought: What would happen if Mark didn’t disobey Nightmare Moon?

My only nitpick about this is that they seemed to already know what he was, and he seemed to already know their names.

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This is written in a sort of third person view, and he could have heard then say their names when speaking to each other. Also easier on a writer to just do that anyway

Re-reading is quite the treat. What fate will the human meet? In darkness shrouded are the steps. In light they will end perhaps?

An empty chair hit the floor.

Ooh, that's good; I'm gonna have to steal that take inspiration from that.

Dose anyone know why Mike was clinging to Nightmare Moon like a baby to a blanket? I hope this character wises up and or mans up

What a simpleton.

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She is the only one he knows of that may know a way to bring him home.