My Sweet Burning Desire

by Braveheart106

Preview!

Author’s Note: “He who endures patience is a conqueror”. I want to apologize for the postponing the new chapter, but I will have to hold it off until later. I’m back in school, so its harder to update stories. Though this preview is for my upcoming book I’ve been working on, and I need your help to tell me if its good or not, your thoughts and your ideas please. This upcoming story is a multi-chapter(10-20 chapters overall) and I want to make sure it isn’t “boring” or “lame”. So please give me your thoughts, and is NOT an official chapter of “My Sweet Burning Desire”, but involves it. So I hope you all enjoy it!

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“Sister, where is thy mother and father?” Luna asked Celestia as she sighed in annoyance.

“Oh Luna you know by now that they’re out on an important meeting!” Celestia told Luna as the younger alicorn began to get upset.

“I miss them ‘Tia!” Luna said as tears began to form in her eyes.

“I know you do little one, and I do too! Although I know they’re gonna come back, they always do. Now stop crying and get ready for bed you silly filly!” Celestia said laughing as she chased Luna to the bathroom.

“You know Celestia you always had a way with fillies” Discord said smirking as she turned around in anger.

“What are you doing here Discord?” Celestia asked angrily, only causing Discord to laugh.

“You know, you’re real cute when you’re mad Celly” Discord said as Celestia ran into his arms and they hugged.

“Hey you better quit kissing up to me Discord, or else you’ll be getting the plunger pucker!” Celestia said as she made the facial expression and noises, making Discord jump back in disgust.

“Eww cut it out ‘Tia, I’ll stop!” Discord said laughing as they sat on the floor and held each other close.

“You’re crazy for doing this you know, if my parents were to come home and catch us...” Celestia trailed off as Discord gently lifted her head up to look at him.

“Oh please, they’re too busy trying to fight my father to do anything to us” Discord said as he began to kiss her.

“Oh Discord you dirty dog you!” Celestia smiled as they continued to kiss, when suddenly two large alicorns appeared behind them.

“CELESTIA WHAT IS GOING ON HERE!” her mother called as they stopped kissing instantly and broke off.

“Um nothing mother I swear, it was just in good fun!” Celestia said as politely as she could.

“GOOD FUN? GOOD FUN! KISSING THE ENEMY IS GOOD FUN CELESTIA?” her father bellowed as he picked up Discord by the throat with magic.

“Daddy don’t hurt him, I love him!” Celestia whined as he tightened his grip on Discord and brought him to his face.

“LET ME EVER CATCH YOU NEAR MY DAUGHTER AGAIN DEMON, AND MUCH MORE IN A RELATIONSHIP WITH HER. WELL LET ME JUST TELL YOU THIS, I’ll PERSONALLY SEND YOU SOMEPLACE WHERE ITS HOT ALL DAY LONG!” her father yelled angrily as his hoof connected painfully to Discord’s face.

“FATHER STOP!” Celestia yelled as he threw Discord out of their home.

“I CAN’T BELIEVE YOU CELESTIA! I FIGHT EVERYDAY TO PROTECT YOU AND YOU GO AND BETRAY ME FOR THAT NO GOOD FOOL?” her father yelled as he used magic to pick her up and bring them face to face.

“CELESTIA IF I DARE CATCH YOU NEAR HIM AGAIN, I’ll KILL HIM AND BANISH YOU!” her father yelled as he dropped her down and walked off in a fit of rage.

“Sister?” Luna called as she ran towards Celestia.

“Sister?” Luna called again.

“SISTER!” Luna called, waking Celestia up from her dream.

“Oh! Good morning Luna” Celestia yawned as she scoped around the room, making sure she wasn’t reliving that painful memory.

“Yes, it is a good morning!” Luna told her sister as she smiled happily, making Celestia uneasy.

“Luna, what has got you so excited?” Celestia asked her sister with concern, while the younger sibling simply smiled and began to hug her.

“Happy Hearts and Hooves Day sweet sister!” Luna said as she tightened her grip on Celestia.

“Oh yes, Hearts and Hooves Day” Celestia muttered as she loosened out of Luna’s bear hug.

“Things just haven’t been the same since then, I hate you Discord” Celestia told herself as Luna left the room and she began to look outside at Discord’s statue with anger.

“Then again, I can’t help but love you as well” Celestia said smiling as she blew a small kiss towards his statue.

“Happy Hearts and Hooves Day my sweet Discord” Celestia said as she wiped away a tear and walked off to prepare for the day.

Meanwhile in PonyVille........

“Good Morning Class! I hope everypony has been having a good morning, because now is time for work!” Cheerilee said as the class groaned in annoyance.

“Oh come now class, just some Math today, then at 11:30 you’ll be able to go spend the rest of the day with your loved ones!” Cheerilee said as the class then began to cheer.

“Here’s some worksheets, just bring it to me when you’re done!” Cheerilee said as she handed out worksheets.

“I’m hoping you three don’t have any Love Poison to give me this year, correct?” Cheerilee asked The Crusader’s as they blushed and shook their heads.

“Oh no Ms. Cheerilee we could never give that to you twice!” Sweetie Belle said innocently as she left to pass more sheets to the class.

“Y-yeah none of that again!” Scootaloo said smiling broadly as she slid some Love ‘Poison’ back in her book bag quickly.

“Scoots what’re ya doin’ with that?” Apple Bloom asked the orange filly as she smiled and blushed.

“Oh its not Love Poison this time, I got it right this time around. Besides its none of your business why I have it!” Scootaloo said as Apple Bloom snatched it up quickly and began inspecting it.

“Hey! Give it back Apple Bloom I need it!” Scootaloo said urgently as she fought hard to get it back.

“No way Scootaloo! Ah need to get rid of this stuff before somethin’ bad happens!” Apple Bloom said fighting her off when suddenly Diamond Tiara took it from her hooves.

“What’s this blank flanks?” Diamond Tiara asked the two as she began to inspect it.

“Looks like some sort of potion to me!” Silver Spoon told her as Diamond Tiara began to smirk.

“Perhaps a LOVE potion, we all know Scootaloo LOVES PIP!” Diamond Tiara proclaimed loudly as the whole class stopped and looked at Scootaloo, who was blushing hard.

“I-I-I do NOT like Pip! I have my reasons for having it and it is NONE of your business Diamond Liara!” Scootaloo said angrily as Diamond just began to laugh.

“Oh you silly chicken, can’t even make a good joke!” Diamond Tiara said smirking as Apple Bloom chimed in.

“Oh hush it Tiara, sometimes ah can’t tell whether you’re a pig or a pony! The only way ah ever figure it out is by looking at that thing on yer’ head that you dare to call a mane!” Apple Bloom said as the class began to snicker.

“Diamond Tiara is a pony? I always thought she was Piglet’s mother in disguise, since she snorts so much!” Sweetie Belle said innocently as the class began to laugh hysterically, even Cheerilee snickered quietly at the comment.

“Y-you shut your mouth Sweetie Belle! I’m gonna make you PAY for saying that!” Diamond Tiara said angrily as she began to get up, only for Cheerilee to intervene.

“Alright that’s enough girls! Everypony get back to work, its 11:15!” Cheerilee said as the class quickly returned to work, except Diamond Tiara.

“Oh you’ll pay all right. You’re gonna pay BIG time” Diamond Tiara said snickering quietly as she slipped the Love Potion in her bag.

As the students finished their work and the clock hit 11:30, the class began to dismiss in order to have quality time with their loved ones.

“Man am I glad that’s over!” Scootaloo said as her two friends agreed.

“Yeah, I felt as if Diamond Tiara was gonna burn a hole right through me with her eyes!” Sweetie Belle said as she widened her eyes to imitate Diamond Tiara, causing her friends to laugh.

As Scootaloo continued to laugh, she bumped into something making her cease her laughter instantly.

“Oh I’m so so...rry?” Scootaloo said as she became face to face with a smiling Pip.

“Hey Scootaloo, Happy Hearts and Hooves Day!” he said smiling as he hugged her and slipped a card in her bag.

“Happy Hearts and Hooves Day to you too Pip” Scootaloo said smiling and a blush forming on her cheeks as he walked away gleefully.

“Well squirt you sure know how to handle a situation!” Rainbow Dash said as Rarity, Sweetie, and Apple Bloom joined her.

“Rainbow Dash!” Scootaloo said smiling as she hugged the cyan pegasus tightly.

“Oh Happy Hearts and Hooves Day Rainbow Dash!” Scootaloo said as she loosened her grip on Rainbow.

“Same to you squirt, I can already tell you’ve been through alot today” Rainbow Dash said as Rarity continued on.

“All three of you have been. So in order to make it up to you me and Rainbow here, Pinkie Pie, Twilight and Applejack are going to let you get whatever you please at SugarCube Corner!” Rarity said smiling as the three girls cheered in excitement.

“Uh Rarity, will Spike be there too?” Sweetie Belle asked innocently, she missed her love Spike and wanted to spend as much time as possible with him today.

“Of course darling, why wouldn’t he be?” Rarity said as Sweetie Belle beamed happily.

“Well what’re we waitin’ for? Move your caboose!” Apple Bloom said as they all walked and laughed.

“Hey Apple Bloom!” Scootaloo said as she snickered.

“Yeah Scoots?” Applebloom asked her friend.

“Are you Granny Smith’s daughter?” Scootaloo asked as she choked back a laugh.

“No ah am not! I don’t even know who my parents even ARE Scootaloo” Apple Bloom said sternly as Scootaloo began to feel bad.

“I’m sorry for the joke there Apple Bloom, it wasn’t really funny anyway. I didn’t mean to hurt your feelings” Scootaloo said as Apple Bloom sighed and hugged her friend.

“Its alright Scootaloo, lets just forget about it” Apple Bloom told the filly pegasus as they ventured forth to SugarCube Corner.

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That’s it for now. Again this is a PREVIEW for my next book coming in November, taking place after “My Sweet Burning Desire”. Remember to post your thoughts, and give a like and a favorite if possible. Next Chapter for Burning Desire is to come out this Saturday, so keep an eye out for it. Oh and please if you can read “Applejack of my Eye” and "Conflicting Love", it’s an incest book yeah but it’s really good and worth a read or two. Until next time folks!

Comments

[TheBoxfromMetalGearSolid]

This idea seems pretty good! The only issue is that the pacing seemed kind of fast. I barely had time to process the relationship between Celestia and Discord before I was suddenly thrust into a story about Ponyville. If you spend a little more time on description, this would be excellent And Scootaloo/Pip? That's the first time I've ever seen that, and it seems

[Braveheart106]

1250314 Where have you been man? Its been TOO long lol. Anyhow I'm sorry for hearing that, but Celestia and Discord's relationship was a memory, and was never meant to be a detailed love story lol. Although for that couple, you'll get a fairly decent surprise

[TheBoxfromMetalGearSolid]

1250422 Well, I've been in Alberta for about a week, and camping in Ontario for another week, and on top of that, I'm just getting back into school this week, so there hasn't been much time for Fimfic lately. I'm trying to get on more, though, at least on the weekends.

[Braveheart106]

1250435 Me too, I just got back in school. I'll update this saturday a new chapter, and it is 4,000 words! I love it so much, and I KNOW you will too. Besides I've been hoping you would update Two Best Sisters, still praying for Left 4 Dead lol. Glad to hear from you again though buddy, and I'm excited to see more of your terrific work

[TheBoxfromMetalGearSolid]

1250826 Yep, I'll probably get a chapter out at some point this week. Keep up the good work

[Braveheart106]

1271646whoah! I didn't notice your posts, i apologize. you see let me explain this to you, this story isn't what you're expecting AT ALL. All doubts and such, throw em out the window right now, you're in for big surprises. I do need to put in filler chapters though, for I agree it needs to be prolonged for people to understand where I'm going with this. Although Twilight did what Twilight does best, I feel I portrayed her nicely, but I'll still consider your suggestions. For Spike, being younger the cider takes a harder toll on him, since he's not used to it and such. For Rarity being upset, thats her sister, her younger sister so shes upset. Also shes a changeling, as you've noticed. The chapter coming out today will explain everything, along with slowing things down and being more detailed. you must bear with me, since this is the second book I've ever posted here. Out of character, I must disagree with sadly. Just bear with me and wait for tonight's new chapter. I assure you, this next chapter will piss some readers off, and most likely dislike Spike for quite a while

[Inferno demon Dash]

1280184 Second story, not book, and as for the new story....hmmm....it seems ok, felt a bit like Romeo and Juliet to me and really fast paced for some reson but I liked the SpikeBelle in it and I hate Diamond though what happened to Sliver Spoon?

[Braveheart106]

1283735 Lol who said Spike died? He's just hurt...real bad. Also Zecora's in a different cave far from theirs, she didn't disappear like magic. Also thanks for the review, and expect a chapter tomorrow!

Edit: I apologize to all my readers, my computer has broken down and needs repairs. I'll have to update Saturday, or put it on hiatus. I'll decide tomorrow, again I apologize for the delay!

[celticfan]

Celestia has crush on discord ok i want to die now lol

[celticfan]

I hate discord more then anything

[kingthe13]

[crimsonwing]

My good sir I must say I require more of this story because once you've had a fangasm you can never have just one ..............seriously though I do require more

[Braveheart106]

My fans I've returned from months of hard work and struggles! I'm shocked at the intense support and appreciation I've gotten, and proud to say more chapters shall be coming!

[Aura Zero]