Lord Zarcon
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You need to go over and sort out some capitalising as there are some words that have been capitalised wrongly and some that haven’t, but other than that, a pretty good start.
Really good! I like the re-assessment of Equestria, especially when Moondancer hadn't invited Twilight to her party and god when everypony thought she was just mad. Look forward to read the rest of the story!
Interesting. I will see where this goes.
Clearly, finding out what's happened to Celestia, Cadence and Flurry Heart is the most vital thing, so, kidnapping Neighsay and ripping all the secrets out of his head with the most painful spells possible, leaving him a brainless drooling husk is clearly the first step.
So Twilight is the new Corvo?
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Funny think is I actually had Dishonered in mind when I was writing this fic.
If Chrysalis saved them when they’re at their weakest, I will die laughing at their weakness
I have difficulty believing Neighsay managed to find so many asshole ponies to do his dirty work. Even if Twilight manages to off Neighsay and free Celestia, undoing this corrupted Equestria will be the work of generations, and regaining the trust of other races will take even longer.
I can see Nuremberg style war crimes trials, and a lot of new ponies in Tartarus.
I wonder if neighsay is somehow mind controlling most of his followers or if most ponies simply dispise the other races enough to do these things.
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I have a lot of things planned for this fic. Many surprises await.
9284459 Ohh, that's a nasty thought. That means Twilight has been slaughtering ponies who were just as much victims as the Changelings.
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I would say being full on out genocided is worse than being mind controlled/brainwashed....
I am very comfortable with this. I would even go so far as to say I feel right at home with this story's themes.
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Glad you are enjoying it.
Just how dark is this story going to get? ...It won't reach Dairies of a Madman levels, will it? Good lord was that story a chore to get through...
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Depending on what you consider dark. I don't know if I can answer that question.
This is so overboard it makes me chuckle at time.
9623165 Agreed. It's supposed to be a grim and gritty action adventure, but it frequently goes over into melodrama or even camp. Not that's it's bad, camp can be fun (see Flash Gordon) but the bad guys are so moustache twirlingly evil it loses impact.
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Not to mention the occasional childish moments.
Like then shoveling food into her mputh for torture.
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Well I wanted to write a more dramatic chapter. But I guess that maybe I'm not really good at it.
9626623Hey, I'm still reading. I would have put in something to explain how Zesty escaped, as it did seem to come out of nowhere.
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Thanks for the feedback. I'll be sure to take it into consideration.
This setting is reminding me of something else...
This isn't gonna end with Neighsay caught up in an explosion or reduced to molecules, is it?
I'm going to be taking a break from this fic. Not really getting that much satisfaction from writing it, and I really need to rework somethings. Alot of my ideas don't seam to be working, and I'm not sure how to salvage what I currently have.
That monster if he ever hurt rainbow dash or the Cutie Mark Crusader's or any of the mane 5 he will face punishment
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Twilight sparkle is like batman
Neighsay is losing the battle
Lord neighsay: Decepticon transform and rise up wait wrong universe
Did pinkie pie ate that guy that is dark
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Good luck