• Member Since 25th Jul, 2012
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Vinal_Scratch


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The Mane 6 are blamed for a crime that they didn't commit and get banished from Equestria. They must find the actual culprits and claim redemption.

Chapters (2)
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This wont end well...

1082756 The story. See, that cover picture was already used for another story just a few hours ago. Odds are the denizens of the site won't take kindly to it being used again.

That being said, it's culprits, not culprets. Also, you have a habit of substituting 'were' for 'where'. Also, this story makes little to no sense. Other than that, it's a decent read.

Ok I found a replacement

Hmm, I've seen this sort of idea before and I did enjoy it...

Ah, what the hell. *Reads*

Post read edit:

Noticed a error. You used the word 'there' instead of 'their'

Also, potential ruining the story as I'm exceptionally picky about this so... Is it just me, or has everyone forgotten about the memory spells? I know how that someone could've easily meddled with the minds of the guardponies in the hospital but, a simple memory check of Twilight and friends, along with an alibi... Well, potential plot holes are going to be numerous, I just hope you find and plug them all up.

I'll be keeping an eye on this...

Facehoof :derpytongue2::derpyderp2::derpyderp1: so sorry about that.

1083346
and while you're at it...
*didn't
*banished

Hmm....... Interesting. I will like this and keep up wiith it. Good job:pinkiecrazy:

Look at those chapter dates!! The fact someone can post a second chapter of a story, nearly seven years after the first, is extremely heartening for the amount of amazing unfinished fics across this site that seem to have been abandoned.

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