A *Ahem* Closet brony with some...unusual traits. enjoys crossover stories. Favorite characters: Dr. Whooves. Derpy/Ditzy Hooves. Dinky Hooves. Rainbow Dash. Princess Luna. Pinkie Pie. Pinkamena.
In a freak accident, Big Boss/ Snake From MGS3: Snake Eater Get's Teleported To Equestria. Will Snake Get Home? Can Fluttershy stand up To Snake for his animal-eating Habits? Will this Fic ever get favorited? *Hint Hint* All these (not really) and more shall be answered...whenever I can get my lazy Ass to write chapters. NEXT TIME ON DRAGONBALL Z- I MEAN MGE3: SNAKE'S HERE: STUFF HAPPENS!
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ARRGGH WHY DO PEOPLE NOT LIKE MY STORIES? THREE DISLIKES. ALREADY! WHAT THE EFF PEOPLE
999810 Alright. If this gets more than 13 Dislikes. I'm Stopping. Ok. I'm guessing you don't like this story. Fine. Don't read. I understand that my stories aren't good. It's Fine With Me.
999975
I like the premise... but the execution is severely lacking on the effort. Which is really a shame because I would like to see a well done fanfic along these lines.
Listen, try again. Take the story down, rewrite it and find someone who is willing to work with you.
A collaboration project would make working on this more interesting, and give you some great ideas and constructive criticism to better yourself with. 
999975
The main thing to keep in mind, IS PACE YOURSELF!!!
Take your time, have fun with this, and in a cliche sense try to bring the story to life.
This is beyond rushed. Include details regarding character motivation and actions, slow down and pace the dialogue out a bit, and by all means check out some of your own books or popular stories on here and pay attention to how the story plays out. It does help.
999951 Dude... This story is FILLED with mistakes. After every "..." There's a space and that includes the ending of sentences. Plus, the way it's set up is just... It's hard to cope with. Work on this, read other pieces of work and remember that grammar mistakes can get you a LOT of dislikes. I don't dislike, or like your story, but I am jealous of the fact that you beat me to this idea. I was already working on a MGS "Cake Eater" thing, and you got to the idea before me.
But yea. Work on improving this.
Also, read some of my fics to analize grammar.
I would recommend you find a proof reader if you want to make it look proffesional.
Once again. You can fix all this. If you just hire a proof reader.
I really want to like this story, and I think it has hope. You have a real grasp over characters, which a lot of people do lightly or not well enough.
Few grammar mistakes here and there, so that's not bad.
The only thing I have a real complaint over, is that the chapters are small. It makes it easy to read, but it leaves me wanting more.
This story could get better if the chapters were longer.I hope you continue this.
1022173 My computer shall be fixed soon, so better chapters are soon Coming in a few days. as well as new chapters for my other fic.
1022191
Yay.
I agree with everyone else. You should proof read but you have had my attention since the beginning because I am a HUGE MGS fan!
Can't wait for more updates!! And if you would like, I could always proof read it for you and help you, I'd be more than happy to
Will you tell us who'll be Mega Man in your story ?
1084816 Classic Mega Man/Rock. Also PROTOMAN BIOTCHES!
I am putting my other story on hiatus. I will start working on the new fic soon, And i will have a new chapter up soon.
You know, that you will have to tell the story about The Boss to the Mane 6.
I honestly think you should focus on this fic
1099278
that's what the blog is for 
And not use it as a news spot
And remember kids,if you screw up in Super Meat Boy,it's your fault.
999951
Get a editor. It's too hard for most writers to find and fix their mistakes.
Hey MGS fans check this out:
Nice I love Metal Gear Solid [MY got me to fav it]
Might want to go into more detail with... Everything. I want to like it, but it's way too rushed, and Snake probably would'nt be so casual about things. Put something between him landing and meeting Fluttershy, maybe have her just take off when she sees him. Also, I belive he left The Patriot at The Boss' grave.