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A tale of the Seven Days in Sunny June universe.

Originally started by The Quiet Party.


Once, when they were children, Rundown knew Debonair Lace.
But that was back before his dad's stupidity caused his family's fall from grace.

Now, living in the slums of Sunny Town, Rundown pines for Debonair from afar, wondering if she even remembers him. It doesn't help that he knew she was one of the girls affected by the Vibe incident.

Still, he wants to get to know her again and tell her how he feels.
But what chance does a loser at Sunny Town High have with a girl like her?

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 14 )

I. am. impressed as hell.

Looking forward to reading this!

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Oh, wow - you made my day with just saying that! Thanks!

Indeed, this is truly top notch. I look forward to seeing where you go with the story.

Also "her tits were just vertical pyramids" is one of the funniest lines I've seen in a long time.

Love this!

Looking forward to more of it!

Have a Fave, a Track and an upvote from me on a job well done!

Finally got a chance to read this and I must echo the sentiments of my fellow 7DSJ authors: this has significantly exceeded my expectations. The characters are all so believably flawed and there is plenty of potential for drama and intrigue. My only criticism is there’s a number of typos and incorrectly used words throughout, for instance:

“Thanks, Mom,” he told her, getting out of bed and making a beehive to the bathroom to get ready.

The actual expression here is “making a beeline”. Regardless, this is all stuff easily remedied with a second set of eyes, and I’m sure any one of us would be happy to preread this for you. Keep up the good work!

An excellent followup entry chapter! If I may ask, do you have a set schedule for when you'll be uploading?

Freestyle confirmed to be Sunny AS A MUGGLE!

(Making this clear, this is not a bad thing.)

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As I get them done, really.

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This is pretty much how I update things. :pinkiehappy:

Good chapter, but...you really need an editor. I've noted several errors you made (you have "a second girl" twice when one should be a third girl) and there's some awkward phrasing.

Not saying that you should have us do your editing (though we wouldn't mind), but I strongly suggest an editor. They make your life easier.

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Second.

And yeah, this chapter has set up some very interesting things. Can’t wait to see how it plays out!

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Um … I actually have an editor. :twilightblush:

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