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Tunefulsubset72


AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!

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Ok. Couldn't have waited for the next chapter to say all that in the actual chapter? Otherwise, good job so far.

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well when I wrote it since this character is mine I wanted to have everything there so people could get a sort of understanding about my character. One of the idea's I had was repairing the robot over time and then showing the past, but that would have taken my character down a completely different path and I decided to go with the idea in the chapter instead.

"Hey, not my fault I bet her fair and square." Cabala said with a smirk as he began eating his breakfast.

beat. Not bet

"She didn't lay down the rules though." Cabala said in a smart tone in his voice.

use a comma instead of using in twice. do it like this:

"She didn't lay down the rules though." Cabala said, a smart tone in his voice.

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