"Hey, not my fault I bet her fair and square." Cabala said with a smirk as he began eating his breakfast.

beat. Not bet

"She didn't lay down the rules though." Cabala said in a smart tone in his voice.

use a comma instead of using in twice. do it like this:

"She didn't lay down the rules though." Cabala said, a smart tone in his voice.

Their... eyes... locked.

well. shit