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Grubkiller13579


Just an inconsistent and novice writer....not much else to say.

Comments ( 29 )

Damn!! Cant wait for the next chapter!!!:pinkiehappy:

This story is interested

I love this story so far. Keep up the good work.

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It's a SI fanfic but for a anime called One Piece. If you google it I'm sure it will come up. It's actually my inspiration for this.

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I'm actually working on Griffon thr brush off now so you could get your suggestion

So this going to be a good Gilda that isn't a jerk like cannon?

I like the story so far and look forward to reading more

I like it. Favorite it and watching it now forever.

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Thats right, I'm sorry if it upsets you but I felt that Gilda was given the short end of the stick.

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nah i like good gilda, honestly I play it off cannon as just being a species difference, naturally, a carnivorous predator from a more warrior-like society will be aggressive to others and especially to a different herbivore prey species

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That's an interesting way to look at it. I saw it asshe was getting more and more aggrivated by Pinkie's consant apperance and she took it out on the easiest target aka Flutters. But I'm glad you are liking this story :3

Gilda she needs some loving and/or applejack

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As much as I like AJ I like Gilda just a little bit more so she's the last one. I only feal comfortable with five girls maybe I might increase it later but I don't know.

Whens the update coming up

"W-well we're hear Flutters."

here i'm sorry if that was rude but it bugged me also of what i read so far this is a great story

as i said before great story so far i hope to see more soon

Whoo! Instant fave and instan tracking, I cannot wait for the next chapter!

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It's going slowly then I hoped sadly. Been dealing with some IRL stuffs but I'm close to finishing the Dragonshy chapter so you can look forward to that some time next week hopefully

Ok, first things first lots of typos. One of the reasons why people don't like self inserts is because a lot of the time the writer doesn't realize they're making themselves out to look like an edgy teenager, and no one likes an edgy teenager... except for maybe edgy teenagers. Another reason like this chapter is because of all the plot conveniences. Other than those things I thought this chapter was pretty okay.

Just found this and am quite eager for more *Sips Tea* I look forward to further updates

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Thanks for reading and you make a fair point. I've read a few SI's and, like I said in the first chapter, This Bites is the only one I like. Regarding the other things, there will be a point in the story where the whole 'edgy teen' thing comes into play but it will be under special circumstances and the reason with all the plot conveniences well you can thank the God of Mischief himself.

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The chapter is coming along don’t worry, I’ve just been more focused with work and IRL things but it is coming.

After reading the whole story I’m a keep an eye on this

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