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JazzyWaffles


I really like changelings.

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Queen Chrysalis has trusted her son, Prince Pronotum, with a very important mission to Ponyville. He is to infiltrate the town, find a way to remove the Elements of Harmony from the picture, and prepare for a second invasion. He's determined to make her proud. Unfortunately for Chrysalis, her son isn't very bright, and, as a result, he took a few months too long to get to Ponyville.

UPDATE: Glorious cover art by GIULIO.

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Thus the lone changeling at the donkey wedding is explained.

Good story!
I enjoyed reading it. Sure this is your first story?

Since you asked for criticism:
The ending is quite... sudden. For me it would look like the first chapter of an bigger story instead of an stand-alone fic.

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It's not the first thing I have ever written (Lit classes made sure of that), but it's my first FiM fic, and the first fanfic I have published at all.

And yeah, the ending is a bit abrupt. I may return to this eventually and add a second half at some point. Not really sure.

Cute and nice story i like your style would read more

I like it! I hope it gets expanded on :)

I'm dying at the cover art.

I'll admit, the ending was very abrupt, almost like it was meant to be continued.

Aside from that, I love how pretty much no one reacts to him walking through the town. A fun sequel(?) might be the townsfolk reactions (or lack thereof) to increasingly weird things in town.

Why are Tuesdays always the boring days? Why not Wednesday? Or Thursday?

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Tuesday is simply the most mentioned day of the week in FiM, so I went with that.

Heh, that was fun. Poor clueless lings, you wonder if Chrysalis sent him purposefully or on a whim?
Keep going! ;)

Poor guy. At least he got himself invited to a wedding.

Three ponies, in particular, became very overdramatic about the whole thing and fell to the ground despairing the non-existent horror of the situation.

Funny how fans will immediately know the exact scene you're describing, based off the show. :rainbowlaugh:

A cute little story! You're fairly adept at writing, I hope you continue to! Maybe a fic about changelings and waffles is vastly overdue. :trixieshiftright:

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