Times We Cherish 4

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This story is a sequel to Times We Cherish 3: Christmas Time

Princess Twilight, while spending her weekends with Sunset, always insists on sleeping on her girlfriend's couch when she's there. However, this time Sunset will not take no for an answer and Twilight comes to understand why sleeping in the same bed together can be special.

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TheArquius

TheArquius #1 · Jan 2nd, 2018 · 5 · ·

Dammit why is this so good

There aren't even any action scenes and it melted my heart.

10/10 will recommend to a non-brony friend

Rose Quill

Rose Quill #2 · Jan 2nd, 2018 · 1 · ·

I’m mentioned!

Bookish Delight

Bookish Delight #3 · Jan 2nd, 2018 · 1 · ·

From one abuser of smiling characters to another: your prose will read more smoothly if you use "smile" as a verb instead of having characters "give" each other smiles all over the place. Go active voice over passive wherever you can!

(This includes modified, "playful" smiles. Adverbs are absolutely a valid tool to be used in moderation, regardless of what you heard Stephen King say that one time. )

KalenNighteyes

KalenNighteyes #4 · Jan 2nd, 2018 · 1 · ·

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Thank you for pointing that out! I'm always looking for positive feedback about my writing and I appreciate it greatly when it is given. I try to improve my writing as much as I can, so this will help. Thank you very much!

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