In a distant land, west of Equestria and across the Lunar Ocean, is the country of Cavalla. Here, live ponies without Harmony.
Harmony was essential to the founding of Equestria, but there are ponies who live outside of its influence, the ones who stayed behind. After centuries of near isolation from one another, age-old prejudices are coming to a head. Tensions are high. Turmoil, strife, and unrest plague the land of Cavalla. There are even quiet rumors of war coming from both sides. The burden ultimately falls on one young stallion, a mere coffee pony, to show to Princess Twilight and her friends what life without Harmony really means; and to show that we are all really not so different after all.
[[Note: This story is currently incomplete, that means minor changes and corrections to previously published chapters are imminent. Speaking of chapters, if anyone wants to suggest names of chapters rather than the straight forward "Chapter One, Chapter Two, Chapter Three" those are appreciated.]]
It's interesting, what with applejack clearly have a prejudice against his people. And apparently twilight never heard of them?
Also twilight that's were you're wrong, I guess you've never heard of Australia before have you.
Interesting beginning, I am looking forward to see how this Romero guy turns out as well as to learn more of those Cavallians. The only problem I have is the tense inconsistency. I can bear it, but I have learned the hard way that it can turn many readers away
You should either keep it all or in past or present tense. Also, why is the name underlined?
Anyway, I hope to get to the next chapters soon!
Hmm, interesting, I didn’t really see this one coming. Also, I bet it’s gonna be one crazy adventure!
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Yeah, a friend just gave me the same advice. I usually write in past tense, but he advised me that preset tense would better with the story. I'll have to go back, read through it all and made the appropriate changes when I have the time.
Thanks for the advice!
At least one bearer of the elements of 'harmony' is being nice. Good job pinkie, the same cannot be said for the rest of you (except maybe fluttershy). I am ashamed
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I know from experience that both the tenses work really well, so just roll with the one you feel comfortable writing.
I see, you are welcome
Interesting, I'm curious what adventures await them in this city. Also, glad to see at least somepony cares
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Fluttershy will get a full introduction into the story soon enough. It won't be for a few chapters though, you know how timid around new ponies she is.
Rainbow I swear to god if you purposefully get hit by a car just to prove how "tough" you are or because you didn't listen to Romero then honestly you've just reached new levels of stupidity. And the scary thing is is that this may actually happen, even if it's just a small chance, because with how much rainbow dislikes Romero she may do it just to spite him. And she has zero knowledge about cars.
Don't do it.
Wow...the mane six is being rude af