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Onyx Archer


A lazy turd of a writer that likes making stories where Sunset likes to listen to Punk Rock. Current Projects: Minerva's Den (working title), Retrograde

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THIS IS A CONTEST ENTRY. IT'S ALSO KINDA RUSHED, ADMITTEDLY.

During Starlight's visit to the human world, the subject of her human counterpart, as well as the human counterpart of Sunset comes up, to which Sci-Twi tells them what she's discovered. Thus begins a short (rushed as hell) story that shows some cute snippets of the romantic relationship of Sunset and Starlight's human counterparts, and some forced as heck exposition between Sunset, Starlight, and the rest of the Rainbooms.

I swear, I can write better than this... I just kinda made a mad dash for the finish line after a dozen ideas just didn't stick...

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Historia ishte e mrekullueshme! Më pëlqen zhvillimi i karakterit dhe mënyra se si kaluat mes skenave! Përshkrimet e tua më kanë bërë të lumtur dhe shpresoj që të bëheni mirë! Sigurohuni që mos e vendosni salcën në lavanderi!

Comment posted by Palestinian FimFic Fan deleted Sep 22nd, 2017

Dude, please make a sequel to this story!! I want to know what happens when Sunset And Starlight meet their human doubles!!! Also, I like how you made Equestrian Sunset and Princess Twilight a couple, they're my favorite ship!!

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Thanks! I'm glad you liked it, because I sure as heck don't. I feel like it's waaaaaay too rushed for it's own good, and suffers as a result. It was made for a contest, so if I make a sequel, it'd be for a contest I'm interested in entering, though who knows with me.

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I don't think you really need to enter a contest to do a sequel. I mean the story is rushed I get it, but it's really good!! I feel like if you have enough free time and no writers block, the sequel could surpass this story!!!

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It's possible, though I'm still not 100% sure on what I'd even do for a sequel, hence why there isn't one. I'd be more likely to refine this one to iron out kinks I think exist, but I don't really know at this point in time. I'll consider it though.

Very cute. I'm sure a small part of her is jealous. She has Trixie though. Who I'm sure is interested. I can imagine one reason why Sunset has stayed with her though. Starlight is a bit crazy and more than likely possesive. Her taking the place of her oldest friend. 😆

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Thanks! I'm gonna be honest though, I'm not a Strixie/StarTrix/whatever the ship's name is fan. It's cute, but not my thing.

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I can imagine a sequel. My head canon sequel to this is they meet. A touched up explanation is given to not freak them out. Starlight being her tries to get her equestrian counterpart on side to set her up with Sunset. And from there it can go in a variety of fun directions. lol.

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I'm considering a sequel, but it's still up in the air. I'm working on something else right now after all lol

Nice. Wonder how Sci-Twi would/will react to finding out Sunset is dating her double.

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Well, I'm sure she'd be surprised, but given that I don't like SciSet or anything like that, I think she'd be okay with it.

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Ogres and Oogliettes

It's "Ogres and Oubliettes", actually. <.<

I hope you revisit this, if only to give it the rewrite it needs.

You know the saying that goes in hand with the title?

When you expect the unexpected the expected becomes the Unexpected.

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