Sweet Chapter update, I can't wait to see more of what happens between Ms. Harshwinny and your character, sorry I can't remember what his name is off the top of my head. Anyway you think you could do a time skip next chapter, like make it a few months later and they are still dating while still hiding they are dating, I would just LOVE to see when it's time for him to propose to Ms. Harshwhinny, I mean come on with how in love he is with her, he's got to want to have her by his side for the rest of his life.
Harshwinny needs to get rid of the racist hoofball player. I can do the torch for a quarter of her price and my racing team is half human and half pony. I do NASCAR, Formula drift, Equestrian Rally, Equestrian Classic racing, and hill climb racing.
OK, so he honestly doesn't know Ms. Harshwhinny's first name. That... boggles my mind. I mean, I get that you're probably using this as some kind of big reveal/lead-up and I'm sure it will be adorable and heartwarming but... how? He's her secretary. She has, at no point, signed her full name on a document? He knows where she lives and didn't see her name on the mailbox, or on a bill left in the kitchen? She doesn't have a social security card or a letter from a family member on the nightstand?
But let's set all of that crap aside, because yeah, I suppose she could be very studious about keeping that kind of private information tucked away. He hasn't asked her what her first name is? I'm sorry but I just can't wrap my head around this; it's a plot hole so gaping that it's actually taking me out of the narrative, which up until this little mindfuck has held my attention very well. I'm not going to say "loldropped" because I honestly still love this fic but... fuuuuuuuuck this is really getting into my head.
I don’t know what it is about this story but the moment it updates I have to read it. I love this story, the relationship works and it’s admittedly adorable. The only downside is I wish I had a Harshwhinny too.
I decide to go super casual, wearing a T-Shirt that has Wonder Mare’s logo on it, and a pair of jeans. Yeah, I’m a guy who wears a Wonder Mare T-Shirt, and I’m damn proud of it.
You're wearing a superhero shirt. Big whoop. You wearing a Wonder Woman shirt is just as significant as when I wear a Punisher shirt. There is no significance, a shirt is a shirt.
Daaaaamn man, I am just loving this story so much! It's so awesome, and you make Harshwinny so likable in this. It's like... I don't know how to explain it!
I will admit, not a real fan of the fact that I'm seeing more humans and ponies hookin' up with each other. It makes the two seem less special, like when separate species get married in Star Trek.
Well, the truth of the two dating had to be revealed, even if in a limited scope, sooner or later. At least it was like this. Quite the bombshell for Kevin and Crystal, though. Oh well, neither of the couples can be hypocritical and condemn each other. And why would they do that, anyway? All are happy. Win-win.
“Dude, you need to lock that shit down tight. Marry her.”
8341469 I agree. I am just glad the author isn't making it a huge drama piece. Plus it is great when you do illegal shit with your bestie and you can talk about it.
8341274 I feel like that to sometimes, I was just not that annoyed this time, but I would kind of like it if it would have been in a still early state of that human and pony friendship thing, where they just start to show interesst in each other.
I have to focus on the movie, but how can I? I just told Ms. Harshwhinny, who I don’t even know her first name, that I love her.
Wow, you actually incorporated this on the story! I read your response to a previous comment about her first name from the previous chapter but I didn't figure you'd give a nod to that immediately! Such a pleasing development.
10750398 took me a little to get that, now if you'll exuse you you person of culture I must go die laughing, "takes out hand grenade" once I have finished stuff this frag down garys throat (this is a joke, yes I know it is clear but you can never me to careful these days)
Sweet Chapter update, I can't wait to see more of what happens between Ms. Harshwinny and your character, sorry I can't remember what his name is off the top of my head. Anyway you think you could do a time skip next chapter, like make it a few months later and they are still dating while still hiding they are dating, I would just LOVE to see when it's time for him to propose to Ms. Harshwhinny, I mean come on with how in love he is with her, he's got to want to have her by his side for the rest of his life.
The cutie mark or her flank?
Harshwinny needs to get rid of the racist hoofball player. I can do the torch for a quarter of her price and my racing team is half human and half pony. I do NASCAR, Formula drift, Equestrian Rally, Equestrian Classic racing, and hill climb racing.
Did I meantion I do it for a quarter price?
Aww, they nicked that scene from Battlefield Earth 2? The far better sequal that was never made.
Hope Miss Harshwhinney remmebered to keep the soundproof spells up to date. They got trouble, now make it double.
Honestly Came for the clop, And I forgo the clop and decided to stay here for the story instead.
OK, so he honestly doesn't know Ms. Harshwhinny's first name. That... boggles my mind. I mean, I get that you're probably using this as some kind of big reveal/lead-up and I'm sure it will be adorable and heartwarming but... how? He's her secretary. She has, at no point, signed her full name on a document? He knows where she lives and didn't see her name on the mailbox, or on a bill left in the kitchen? She doesn't have a social security card or a letter from a family member on the nightstand?
But let's set all of that crap aside, because yeah, I suppose she could be very studious about keeping that kind of private information tucked away. He hasn't asked her what her first name is? I'm sorry but I just can't wrap my head around this; it's a plot hole so gaping that it's actually taking me out of the narrative, which up until this little mindfuck has held my attention very well. I'm not going to say "loldropped" because I honestly still love this fic but... fuuuuuuuuck this is really getting into my head.
Just you wait, because Gary's gonna come out of left field and steal your girl a second time!
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Yes.
Nice.
Had a hunch Kevin would find out. Now to see him if he keeps the word.
~Skeeter The Lurker
This was a good chapter. Had to skip a little to not be spoiled for the movie but, eeee, I still liked it.
One small thing.
The 'were' is out of place there.
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It was bound to happen. At least now they can cover for each other, but I bet that Harshwhinny will try to keep them in line at work.
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This author is REALLY good at hiding names. The main character doesn't have a name yet.
Also #FUCKGARY
I don’t know what it is about this story but the moment it updates I have to read it. I love this story, the relationship works and it’s admittedly adorable. The only downside is I wish I had a Harshwhinny too.
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Both, I guess
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Thank you!
I wish I can up vote each chapter cause this story gets better with every release.
this chapter just feels really good.
every thing is played out super good and with grate detail.
I love it.
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I share your sentiment. At least I can still up-vote your comment
You're wearing a superhero shirt. Big whoop. You wearing a Wonder Woman shirt is just as significant as when I wear a Punisher shirt. There is no significance, a shirt is a shirt.
Daaaaamn man, I am just loving this story so much! It's so awesome, and you make Harshwinny so likable in this. It's like... I don't know how to explain it!
Good work on this man, can't wait for more!
I will admit, not a real fan of the fact that I'm seeing more humans and ponies hookin' up with each other. It makes the two seem less special, like when separate species get married in Star Trek.
Well, the truth of the two dating had to be revealed, even if in a limited scope, sooner or later. At least it was like this.
Quite the bombshell for Kevin and Crystal, though. Oh well, neither of the couples can be hypocritical and condemn each other. And why would they do that, anyway? All are happy. Win-win.
I concur. That is an absolute keeper material.
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I agree. I am just glad the author isn't making it a huge drama piece. Plus it is great when you do illegal shit with your bestie and you can talk about it.
Oh shit. I never expected to Kevin and Crystal to find out about Ms. Harshwhinny and him like this.
This story has me hooked. Great fricking job breezy! I am emotionally invested. The best kind of investment.
*snerk* It's bound to happen, to have their secrets discovered.
Who wants to go to Anthro Equestria!?
Yeah, damn is right!
Waiting for the next chapter is harsh...
Damn now I have to wait for the next chapter I don't even care if it's sexual I'm loving this story keep it up
8346311 I would be like Shepard and bang everything. Even regular Equestria I would. Dem plots.
This gave me keks. 👍
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Hey, Ms. Harshwhinny....
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I think you mean:
I feel like he is telling him a bit to much about her even if it is nothing bad.
I share her view a bit, they don't have to know everything.
I mean I never understood the point in telling someone something that kind of private stuff.
was crystal a pegasus?
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I feel like that to sometimes, I was just not that annoyed this time, but I would kind of like it if it would have been in a still early state of that human and pony friendship thing, where they just start to show interesst in each other.
when kevin yelled WHAT all I could think of was malfunctioning eddie from futurama
My favorit non clop of the story... Great job
Wow, you actually incorporated this on the story! I read your response to a previous comment about her first name from the previous chapter but I didn't figure you'd give a nod to that immediately! Such a pleasing development.
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Oh! You're here reading this too! Hi I love your stories as well man!
Yea bro fuck gary
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Actually I think you mean dumbass or dipshit
If you don't get that reference then shame on you it's from Pokémon
Heh. Karen.
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took me a little to get that, now if you'll exuse you you person of culture I must go die laughing, "takes out hand grenade" once I have finished stuff this frag down garys throat (this is a joke, yes I know it is clear but you can never me to careful these days)