Rainbow's Dark Origins 2

by Orangeblossom1212

Hidden Problems

Author's Note:

Hey everypony! Just a heads up, this chapter takes place right before the dinner.
Also, sorry for the short chapter. Never mind, I'm not. Sorry, I'm not trying to be mean, I just wanted to add to the suspense.
So, yeah..... Comet Streak apparently CANNOT keep a job to save his life. Who knew? Anyway I'm sorry this was, once again, late. I was trying to learn to make digital art for you guys but it's harder than it looks. I'll keep trying. Just please don't judge me if it's bad. I'm still new at this.
A lot of thoughts going on in this chapter. Post in the comments below and let me know what you think!
Thanks for reading!

Sincerely,

-Orangeblossom1212

P.S. Chapter edited by Easy Breezey. Easy Breezey also named this chapter, so a special thanks to her! Thank You!

Rainbow Dash trotted into the living room, catching Soarin's attention. Soarin turned and froze, mouth agape. Rainbow Dash was dressed in a nice elegant, royal and cyan blue colored dress. The array of beautiful, vibrant colors of Rainbow's mane were pulled up and secured with pearl tipped hair pins. Rainbow Dash stopped and turned to look at him.

"What? does it really look that bad?'' Rainbow asked, wearing a worried expression on her face.

"PppffffftttthHhahahahahah!'' Soarin laughed as he fell over.

Soarin was now clutching his sides and rolling all over the floor. Causing Cloud Chaser to look up as Soarin knocked over his blocks. Soarin's cheeks were puffing out as laughter was released into the air.

"Soarin! I don't know why you think this is funny, but it isn't! Don't you understand how important this is to me?! Tonight will be the first time I've actually really seen my Dad casually in TEN years!'' Rainbow Dash yelled tears brimming her eyes, as unwanted thoughts of her past were forcing their way into her mind as she tried to block them out.

Soarin's eyes bulged as he realized what he had just done.

"No! Dash! I didn't mean that at all! I was just surprised at seeing you so dressed up. It's not something you'd normally do. It just doesn't seem like you. Truthfully you look beautiful, but you are even without all this. Your beautiful because you're you. Honestly, are you sure this is the right approach you should be taking?''

"What are you talking about!? You already just proved how you feel about my Dad! What does that have to say about how you feel about me!?'' Rainbow Dash yelled, stress and frustration piling up.

"No! I-I mean, all I meant was that he's your dad! "

"Well, duh! Gee, Soarin, go figure, I never knew that!'' Rainbow Dash growled sarcastically.

Soarin took a deep breath to calm down and regain his composer. After all, this was for Rainbow Dash. If he too got frustrated and lost his temper it would due little to help Rainbow Dash calm down and think about this from a realistic angle.

"All I meant Dashie, was that he's your dad. Do you really think you should have to dress up and change who you are to impress him? Dash, you know you don't owe him right? If any pony owes anything it's him. If he doesn't want to put in the effort it's his loss. Never change who you are! I know it's hard because he's your father, but at some point you need to put your hoof down here. Dressing up? It's good start, it means your putting in the effort, but is he? "

"W-what do you mean,'' Rainbow Dash asked after a small pause, her voice quivering and cracking as she spoke.

"What I mean is,'' Soarin continued tenderly. ''Is that it's clear you care and are putting forth the effort. However should you continue to go out of your way for him? Don't let him wrap you around his hoof. You are control your life. Remember that you're your own pony. None of this is your fault. Your fathers actions are his own. I just don't want you blaming yourself. It's his loss. Maybe next time you meet up with him somewhere you go to a more casual place. Someplace you enjoy, let him get to know you catch up on the times he missed. Your father has no right to control you life. Just don't forget that no matter what happens, you can't change him. This is your life, sometimes you just have to step away. Sometimes it hurts but sometimes its also the right thing to do.''

"So, you just want me to give up on him?'' Rainbow Dash asked her voice choked up at the end.

"No. Put in the effort to make a relationship, but don't change who you are to please him. Dressing up? It's a good start, it proves you care. However don't let him change you or make you think that anything that happened is your fault. Especially if he doesn't put in the effort. Okay?'' Soarin replied seriously as he took his leave, quietly exiting the room and trotting into the kitchen.

"Okay.... '' Rainbow replied to no pony in particular.

Rainbow Dash wanted to argue, wanted to say that he was wrong, but how could she? She hadn't really seen him without constant supervision. How would he act? Would he play her? Rainbow Dash hated to think that way, but he very well could. Forget the fact that it was a possibility. It doesn't matter. They still don't know what will happen. Rainbow allowed her gaze to drift down to a silent Cloud Chaser. Rainbow felt it, and it was obvious Cloud felt it too. Something was going to happen, but for better or worse Rainbow didn't know. Only time would tell, time and Spectrum Blaze......
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Soarin trotted into the kitchen and leaned casually against the counter deep in thought.

No matter what happens, I just hope that Dash doesn't get hurt.

"Ring, ring, ring, ring- ring, ring, ring, ring. " A loud noise interrupted Soarin's thoughts.

Soarin turned his head and cast a brief glance at the phone before reaching forward to grasp it in his hoof.

"Hello?'' Soarin asked with a sigh pulling the phone up to his ear.

"Hey! Soarin!

"Comet Streak? "

"Well, yeah! Who'd you expect? Guess wh- ''

"Let me guess- new job? "

"Yup! As always your daily news from yours truly,'' Comet said in a playful tone.

Soarin smirked and shook his head, ''alright then, what's your new job? Lay it on me.''

"A brand new, just opened restaurant by the name of Oak Garden! You know that fancy shmancy new place down town that just opened.''

"Oh cool,'' Soarin said rolling his eyes and smiling, ''how long is this career? "

"Eh, I give it 24 hours. Come on, we all know that I'm not good at being fancy.''

"Eh, I give it 15 minutes,'' Soarin replied with a smirk.

"Folks! We have a winner! Anyway yeah you definitely win,'' Comet Streak said with a smirk. "So where's the dinner at? "

"I have no idea. Your sister's the pony who picked it. I'm just worried she went a bit over the top. I just hate how stressed she is. "

"Yup, only so long before the tower topples over. "

"Yup, right you would be.''

"Just keep an eye on her for me, okay? " Comet asked, his tone going from playful to dead serious in an instant.

"You know I will.''

"Thanks Soarin. "

"Comet Streak who are you talking to?'' Soarin heard Comet Blazes voice ask over the phone.

"Hush! It's the president!"

"What?!" "

"It's Soarin. By the way, I can talk to ponies by myself, you know! I don't need you monitoring me twenty-four-seven! I'm old enough to take care of myself! Hey-!" Comet Streaks voice was cut off.

"Hello?''

"Hello Miss Comet Blaze, how have you been?'' Soarin asked curiously.

"Comet, do me a favor and go down stairs and finish the dishes for me please? "

Soarin then heard Comet Streak grunt and stomp off.

"Soarin, I hate to ask you this but.....''

"But what? Blaze, you know if you ever need anything you just have to ask, right? "

"Yes, believe me, I do. Look, I know it's a lot to ask, but are you willing to let Comet Streak come live with you for a bit? I've finally been offered a promotion...... In Las Pegusus.... Soarin, I'm sorry. I really don't have a choice. I've been getting by for a while now, but money has always been tight, and now I have to pay off all of Comet streaks medical bills from.... you know...... the incident. "

Soarin stood there quietly, thinking.

"Yes, I think having his stay with us would be a good idea. It would benefit all of us. I have to go back to the Bolts soon and Rainbow Dash has to go back to school soon... having him around would help lift a lot of stress off of Rainbow Dash. Plus, Comet Streak loves Cloud Chaser. Honestly, that's the only job I trust him with. I know for a FACT that Rainbow Dash won't mind at all. Those two are really close. However if you need any help with money I can-''

"No, no! Its fine think you. Its my problem not yours..... just don't tell him yet, okay? "

"Wait, you haven't told him yet?''Soarin asked eyes growing wide in shock.

"No. Comet has no idea how bad the situation is.....and I plan to keep it that way. I just..... haven't told him yet..... I'll go tell him that he'll be staying with you.... just..... please don't say anything to him......''

"You have my word, '' Soarin sullenly swore.

"Thank you.''

" Your welcome. " With a sigh he put down the phone

"This is gonna be a hard secret to keep from him."Soarin sighed sadly "I hope I can keep it."He whispered to himself.

Comments

[Phoenix Nebula]

Hmm.... There are still a few errors and the sentence structure needs some work. There are a lot of run-on sentences and grammar is lacking a bit. Other than that I'd say it's good!

[Orangeblossom1212]

7888371 Thanks!

[Easy breezey]

*reads authors note* Why your certainly most welcome my dear *curtsies* As I said before happy to be of service
7888371 Yeah I just now noticed it So evrey error in this story I take full responsibility I wish I was just better in grammarShould have paid more attention to grammar lessons

[Orangeblossom1212]

7890587 Don't worry about it. I told you, effort is what counts.

[Phoenix Nebula]

7890587

Took me a while to learn proper grammar in writing. Even now I have trouble, but I've gotten better. Since I'll be editing the next chapter take note of how I fix and structure the sentences. Also If you need an example of intermediate writing I can give you a link to the first chapter of a story I'm writing.
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You too!

Also don't feel discouraged! It takes time to be a good writer.

[Easy breezey]

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I thank you kindly for your words but I still feel that evrey mustake in this chap is my responsibility my mistake I feel like I failed you Orange I'm the editor of this chap and it is my Duty to make this chap to have little to no errors and I know you might think that I'm putting myself way to high
but that's how I feel really and I hope I can do better next time again I take full responibility with all the errors in this chap. Do not blame OrangeBlossom balme me. Non of it was her fault fully mine.

[Orangeblossom1212]

7893150 Hey! Don't blame yourself like that! If you think I'm good at grammar, your seeing things. Seriously! I wanted you to help with this project, that's why I let you do it. Editing RD's Dark Origins is supposed to be a fun way to help and work on stories in the fimfiction community! Don't EVER let anyone get you down! If people have a problem with it then they can deal with me. I was the one who was ultimately in charge of the story to begin with, so it's my responsibility. Don't look at Phoenix like he's trying to get you down, instead look at it as advice he's giving you to help you improve.

[Easy breezey]

7893186 You got me all wrong Orange I do see his word as something that will help me grow and do better and I do enjoy editing this story it's just I'm a perfectionist in these kinds of things so you know why I push myself this hard because I want it to be perfect

[Phoenix Nebula]

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I'm a perfectionist when it comes to art. And I was horrible at art. I failed most of my assignments. Eventually, my perfectionist side made me good at art. Now I have some of the best art in my school. Just keep practicing.

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It's nobodies fault. Do you want to know why I'm better at this than you two? It's because I've read hundreds of stories and have practiced for hours on end. If you two keep practicing you will surpass me in no time. I know you will surpass me because you two have a passion for this that I do not.

Both of you need to stop putting yourselves down. I'm here to help and before long you two will be masters at writing. Just keep at it. Every mistake is a new opportunity to get better. Don't let it get you down!

[Easy breezey]

7893440 Wow that's good to know and thank you again for your word it really inspireing

[Phoenix Nebula]

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Sure!

[Easy breezey]

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[Broken Glass101]

7890743 Hey if u need an artist I can help, but it's not digital

[Orangeblossom1212]

7901778 Thank! I'll definitely keep that in mind.

[My Rainbow Dash]

So, umm, no continue on this? Really? I just finished reading the first book about twenty minutes ago and moved onto this one. Why isn’t it going to continue? Did you get bored of it or just don’t care about it anymore? I really think you should continue! I love it!

[LH45]

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It was cancelled because he was being stalked by somebody/somepony(whatever is appropriate here, which I do not know). He did not do it lightly.