Luna wants to take a bath without being disturbed, but Celestia has different plans for Luna that she thinks is way better.. Luna thinks otherwise..
Rated T for language.
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Luna wants to take a bath without being disturbed, but Celestia has different plans for Luna that she thinks is way better.. Luna thinks otherwise..
Rated T for language.
I noticed I forgot to favorite this. Whoops.
And it seems you plan to continue it? Or you marked it incomplete for some reason
SATAN SPAWN SHOWER HEADS
Please continue! This story is AMAZING!
You should get an editor/proofreader to go over this... plenty of grammatical mistakes (mostly with capitalization).
But other than that, still funny.
Good thing she didn't threaten her pet possum.
7583382 I'll make a sequel for this story soon
Equestria
It is a place name so it requires a capital letter. I'm such a grammar Nazi.orig14.deviantart.net/34b5/f/2012/227/c/3/nazi_luna_by_shadoroq-d5b6o3i.jpg
Not even finished the first sentence and I find this. THE FIRST SENTENCE!
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Dangit Celestia, quit using the satan spawn to do that!
7749011 Um
Luna did that >_>
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I can only wonder if she saw one of these
7859628 she's think satan was apart of the shower and getting stronger as the shower upgrades
7859830 Maybe
I am such a grammar Nazi.
Capital letter.
The plural verb 'were' doesn't agree with the singular subject 'bird'.
Incorrect spacing with punctuation and Canterlot is missing a capital letter.
This sentence ends with a double full stop. Either replace with an ellipsis or just a full stop.
Solar Court.
Solar Court. Lunar Court.
You have used a full stop in the middle of a sentence. Consider replacing it with a comma.
Double full stop again and the pronoun 'I' should always be capitalised.
You are missing a punctuation mark after the interjection 'Well', you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase 'So after my bath' and you should capitalise the pronoun 'I'.
Again, you have used a full stop in the middle of a sentence.
you are missing a comma with the interrupter 'though'.
Comma again.
Again, a comma.
Double full stop again.
Common misspelling of preferred.
Capital letters for the start of sentences and the pronoun 'I'.
Double full stop.
'A few seconds after she said that there were noises coming from a closet in one of the extra rooms.'
'Oh, that's where you are...'
A comma needs to replace the full stop which is in the middle of the sentence.
Celestia. A space after the end of the sentence.
A comma again and the common misconception of the word 'cast' being able to be said as 'casted'.
'leapt'.
I hope you see the problem here.
'through' and 'past'.
'Finally, she blew up in rage.'
'Celestia'
Again with the double full stops.
There is a double full stop, again.
There is a comma needed instead of the double full stop.
Again, a comma instead of the full stop.
Missing comma.
'I'm', 'I'm' and 'you are too," Luna said.'
Commas.
Again, you are putting full stops in the place of commas.
You have put a double full stop again and a missed a full stop at the end.
Captalised letter at the wrong time.
>_>
<_<
*rereads*
*ded by giggles*
Before I read this, I must know: Why doesn't Equestria have showers?
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Good question haha.