Maximilian is an old guy. He may not look it, but he spent quite some time trying to kill an ancient evil in an obscure corner of the Universe. It may have taken him many billion a few thousand years, but the result was obvious. He won. And he came back with all of himself.
So, now what's an old man to do without a foe to fight?
Live, of course. Forget the past and live.
The problem is that the past doesn't want to leave him yet. Especially the five pieces that remain. Two pieces more than the others. A Heart and a Sun, in particular.
To all readers= Another story! Come on, let's see where this one goes.
Chapters (3)
Welp, already got a dislike. Great luck.
You need to try and work on you're grammar and punctuation mate. Also, adding more depth in both you're story, and its description would help.
7529970 Gah. I knew I shouldn't have typed it on my mobile.
7529992 Thanks.
This story has my attention. . . now lets see if it can keep it
Nicely well written, I look forward to the next chapter.
7530499 Alrighty then
It was kind of good, but I didn't really understood what happened at all.
I mean it is like you would tell two storys, one from the past, and one that happens right now.
I'm never exactly sure which person has which job, and...
1. For a second I wasn't sure if you made Spike a girl and why is he teasing Spike to apparently being after applejack?
2. Does Big Mac has a different job there?
3. Does the Human has an Alicorn as an adoptive daugther?
4. edit: I distracted myself and forgot what I wanted to ask next.
7536923 You basically saw the direction the plot will go in. There have to be 2 stories, a past and a present. Also,
1) Sorry if the applejack confused you. It was a pun. 'Applejack' literally means alcoholic cider .
2) Just finished writing it.
3)Yes, pretty much.
4) I CANNOT HELP YOU!
Hot diggity damn. This is really good
Ugh, I love stories that have good lore to them, can't wait to see where this goes!
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I remembered what you said, started writing the chapter, and then forgot about it. It's here now though.