Sweetie Bell and Scootaloo have always been as close as can be. They keep no secrets. But is there something there, something important, that Sweetie Bell won't admit to herself?
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I have to say your twist is kinda obvious.
:)
Nice! Can be an interesting ride!
You surely know how to write the characters and descriptions well, so we know what's going on as if we were there.
However, when you step on the thin ice of longer sentences, you tend to write them overly long, mashing together all the information. Try to split them Be aware that the part where DT thinks Sweetie is talking to her is slightly confusing.
Also, it's 'Belle'
I'll read more later today
Okay, the points from mz previous comment stand, except one. Now I see why it was confusing. She's imaginary friend, right?