Scraps of ideas that just pop into me. On a moment's notice. Might as well put 'em somewhere. If a story leaves, then it means that I've probably made it it's own story.
This is called Stream of Consciousness for a reason...
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I hate to be THAT guy, but I am just trying to give you feedback to improve your writing.
I am reading it and already there are some issues in the first paragraph alone.
First of all, I think the disclaimer is not just unnecessary, but actually detrimental. It breaks the illusion of a story before it even begins. Plus, the warning says that you might not even get it, and that you're better off if you don't. If you think it's better if something is not "gotten" by the reader, then just don't put it in the story. Or if you want to see if the reader gets it, then just write it and ask people what their impression was.
Then, there are enough spelling mistakes that give the impression that it's not a typo. For example, acouple instead of a couple, and evidance, and mid-sentance. Also, when you say, Trixie just so happened to see the last bit, the last bit of what? the last bit of the evidence?
I got to the part where you talk about Starlight Glimmer, but since I haven't seen beyond season 4, I stopped because I don't want to spoil it.
Again, I'm just trying to help you improve your writing. It was too bad that I didn't want to read because of Starlight Glimmer because I really, really like Trixie.
Anyway, I left a comment coz I saw this in the comment group and I will come back to read this fanfic once I see the episode with Starlight Glimmer.