You cannot see what I see because you see what you see. You cannot know what I know because you know what you know. Everything that you see, hear, or experience in any way at all, is specific, to you.
Luna may have killed somepony. This does not go down well in the Coffeehouse.
Just a little something I wrote when I was bored. I got my inspiration from Awful Lot of Coffee in Equestria (big thanks to NorristhePony for brightening up my Tuesday evenings!) This is my first thing (it's not exactly a real story, but I do have one planned for soon. Depending on how things go, the first few chapters should be out around May sometime.)
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You know... I like it. Fanfiction of fanfiction, but it's still good.
Do you have any idea how hard it is to not make an Inception joke here? I mean, just this fic's existence justifies it, but out of respect to the original author, I won't. But, just know that it's damn hard.
7065843 Within a dream?
It's okay. A bit rushed in many places and I don't mean Luna's speech. It takes some time to order tea and yet Celly gets it immediately. This doesn't gel well with how they've been written in the other story, as 'just a couple of mares' type of thing. Also, it ends a bit abruptly and the memory-wipe is a bit of a cop-out. Also also, why did it happen exactly?
I mean, it's not terrible, it's not even what I would classify as bad. It's pretty okay. But fix the pacing a bit and maybe don't cop-out the end - and maybe give a reason (even if it's a throw-away humor thing like 'I didn't know it wouldn't fit up his ass' or something) - and it might seem a bit better. For a first try, I give it a good solid 7/10. Most 'first pieces' end up SUCKING ROYALLY and this didn't so good on ya!
EDIT: Mind you if this was your eighth piece and it read like this, it's be a 4 or 5 of 10 but still, for a first time it's pretty okay!
I guess when you live that long you eventually will kill someone
Seems legit to me.
You gotta take care of family!
7066158 twue wove, a dweam within a dweam.
(20 points to whoever gets that reference.)
7066413
20 points? For such a common reference? Nah, 10, tops.
And before you fight me over this, just put down your rock and I'll put down my sword, and we'll try kill each other like civilized people.
7066572 Fiiiiiiiiiiiinneee. 15.
>>Minalkra thanks (mostly)! I hadn't noticed the tea ordering thing until now, but after a minute of thinking, I'll put that down to them being 'high priority' figures. The fact that it's a bit rushed is because I wrote it in about 15-30 minutes; and finally, different people have different writing styles and it's INSPIRED by Awful Lot of Coffee, not written as part of.