For years, the stories of wolfponies were passed down through generations, a legend that fillies and colts begged their parents to repeat over and over again...
That's all they were. Legends. But when it is discovered that there is a wolfpony living in Ponyville for some time now, everypony realises that maybe the legend aren't..legends.
Apple Bloom and Scootaloo are determined to find out who it is, after hearing the horrible legends about the vicious wolfponies. Sweetie Belle,on the other hoof, is determined to welcome the wolfpony with open arms. And why does Sweetie Belle disappear when the moon is coming up?
Yep,I am creating a new genre, wolfpony.
Chapters (2)
Capitalize sorry.
All in all, a decent enough start, though do keep an eye on those lists - lots of spaces missed between items. I'd certainly like more wolfpony stories, so do stick with it.
Edited to remove fixed errors.
The very least you could do is research that name and realise that the word 'wolf' does not factor into it at all, instead that pretty much translates to 'man-pony'.
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Thanks for all the corrections, I will need those!
My usual computer is getting fixed and it's annoying to write with this one.
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Re-read the first chapter now, and don't forget to look at the Authors Note at the end, it's important.
Given that you're paying attention to my edits, here's round two
This isn't actually an error necessarily, but what does the V in the acronym stand for? I'd think CAS would be the normal way to go, especially given it's being said by somepony whose name starts with a V.
Surrounded, perhaps?
And I'll admit, it probably is rather difficult to accidentally turn oneself invisible. One may wonder how she managed to return to visibility.
Short one 'o' there, ought to be a 'too'. You've also got an extra <return/enter> between But and Violet.
Gotta admit, I'm rather hoping the second wolfpony will turn out to be Octavia, because Violet's being too obvious. Probably going to be Violet though.
Pretend would be a better word in place of act.
You're.
There. These homophones seem to be tripping you up a bit. And of course, there's the issue of not adding spaces in lists, but here's the bulk of the issues.
This is really neat! The only other Wolf story on here is called Wolf Child. You would love that!
It's great to see someone to write a wolf-pony story.
You have a spacing problem. There are some paragraphs that have to much space, and some with the [ , ]
You probably have to read slowly and see what I mean. It's a bit of a mess but your story is really great!
I liked "WereFilly Begins" better. . .
Just sayin'
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Yeah,but that means human pony begins
6978362 So you are at least looking at this once in a while. My prior post included the edits for this chapter.
6978362 Ohhhhhhhhh. . . Okie Dokie Lokie!
Don't come any closer, Apple Bloom, Scootaloo, for it is I who am the werepony!
No, it can't be you, Sweetie Belle!!
Say it ain't so!!
Oh no, the transformation is taking hold! Don't look, girls!
*absolutely nothing happens*
Huh, that was a lot less impressive than I thought it would be.
Holy crap, Sweetie Belle turned into a pony!!
Tha legends are true! Gallop for the hills!