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Nightmare_of_the_Night


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It was my next room neighbor, Josh, he was tall short brown hair with green eyes wearing a colts hoodie and blue jeans.

This should be two sentences and it needs one additional comma.

I started to work again before my stomach grumbled and I ignored my empty stomach and tried to focus on my work. 

Again with the run-on sentences.

After several more seconds there was a louder groan from my stomach and I sighed in defeat and saved my work and turned off my computer.

And a third.

I walked for a while heading for the closest place I could find to grab a bite to eat. Luckily the closest place to grab a bite to eat was Taco Bell. 

You use the phrase 'grab a bite to eat' in two consecutive sentences. Invite some variety into your sentence structure.

(For real. It’s to die for.)

THAT has no place in a story. I'm done. Downvoted.

Hay this got my vote I'm started to get bored to death of people turning into ponies.

Yay for eldritch horror beings made of nightmare fuel

this is amazing 100/10 :pinkiesmile:

6995017 Oh joy. HiE fic with sex and romance tags. How is this going to end up?

6993893 Thanks for the help, I'll make sure to have commas and better wording from now on.

6994692 Thanks and I usually never really get tired of those stories.

6994632 Heh, now I wouldn't want to make him overpowered now would we?

6995653 He seems quite distructive....

6995636 You realize stories like these are dime a dozen here, yes?

6996255 Okay your already anoyong. No offense.

6998738 Not as annoying as seeing the same story over and over, albeit with different names.

6999471 - Not as annoying as blabbering on about the same thing over and over.

7002982 Exactly! Human magically ending up in Equestria and fixing something the canon cast couldn't. Horse romance and screwing optional. Nickel everytime one of those gets uploaded.

7003009 - I meant to say that you were starting to get annoying.

7003018 Oh? Because I wasn't offering mindless praise to the author for writing something this site is plagued with?

7004497 when will more be released?

7016994 Not sure. It depends on when I am able to write more.

7016994 Not sure. It depends on when I am able to write more.

7017778 ok:pinkiesmile: take as much time as you need

7003009 If you don't like it go write your new 'decent story' and STFU ur annoying everyone and they dislike because the author doesn't have enough patience to deal with the likes of you.

6995635 Don't listen to those meanies and write your story - I'll read it till the end and will like it no matter what!

7039666 "Will like it no matter what"... so basically, you have no standards. At least you're being honest about it. I know other people that'll lie through their teeth to defend something awful, knowing full well they're full of sh1t.

7039760 I always enjoy reading no matter if the story is repeated nor if the author don't know how to write. I just like reading so yea pretty much no standards.

7041112 So Stephanie Meyer and Dan Brown should be right for you, if that's the case. Don't forget Sarah Palin's "autobiography".

Is the next chapter ready yet?

7041825 OKay do I need to get ZexFireWolf on you? Cause he hates people like you.

7045651 The name of this person does nothing but make me kek. Please do.

7047695 Yeah, nothing happening yet. Is he going to send me nasty vibes or cast a gypsy curse?

7051559 No but when he's pissed he gets kinda dicky. But he's usually harmless and cool.

quit a few spelling errors, but im liking it I just hope you finish it

More chapters please !!!

This seems quite interesting.

Disgusting. :twilightsmile:
I can't wait for no more :pinkiehappy:

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