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Midnight Mist


I am Midnight

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When a unicorn gives you a gift what do you get her in return? And how far do you go to ensure she gets it?

Stuart faces all of these questions the day Dinky, a mare in his class who he barely knows, leaves a gift for him. And when he finally gets the answers he'll find out there's far more to this filly than he ever realised.

This is based on a dream I had not too long ago. It's based in a universe where humans and ponies have coexisted since time immemorial. The characters, including Dinky, are in their late teens to early twenties.

Sad tag because it's the closest we have to bittersweet.

***Caution: Comments may contain spoilers!***

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Comments ( 33 )
Comment posted by Kwality Stuff deleted Feb 9th, 2014

Wow, just wow. This is a great story, and it describes Dinky very well. Even with such a horrible condition, she manages to smile and see the best of life, just like her mom. I'll be honest, I was a bit hesitant to read this at first, but once I did, I slowly but surely got into it, and I began to shed a few tears of happiness at the end. So, from one writer to another, great job, and continue on with the work.

3917093 Thank you. This review made my day. I expected this story to be a bit hit and miss, since it combines a few things in combination that I know don't often seem to sit well with the usual flow of fandom.

But like I said, it came to me in a dream, and I found it quite touching. So I wanted to share it. I'm thrilled somebody else found meaning in it.

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No problem, I know what it's like to read that one comment that makes your day, and it is an amazing feeling. I'm glad that I could be that one coment that made your day, and like I said, just keep on writing :twilightsmile:

short but sweet

Comment posted by High_Wind deleted Feb 9th, 2014

You don't have to apologize

I. Am. Speechless. Sure, the beginning could use some revisions. Sure, the feelings might have been executed better. This was a fantastic story. I still can't believe how quickly you write this.

this this was quite an amazing yet simple story. loved it all really. as for criticism i cant think of anything. very well done definitely liked it :pinkiesmile:

3917333 Thank you most kindly. This is being received far more positively than I'd anticipated.

3917499 Like this comment. :rainbowlaugh: Thanks!

3917618 Thanks. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

3918121 Bittersweet, I hope? That's what I was aiming for.

3918338 I did have my concerns.

3918412 I'm my own worst critic, it seems. Always room for improvement, naturally. But I was expecting to get a few flames for this one just for what Dinky is put through.

Pretty much wrote this in one sitting. I had to. It grabbed my imagination and wouldn't let go. It still refuses to yield...

3919056 Thank you very much. It's turned out better than I could've hoped.

3920244 That's it. Joy is the journey. There are obstacles along the way, but ultimately it's what and who you choose to take with you that makes all the difference.

Dinky being Dinky is very much aware of that fact, and that's enough to keep her going.

Daaaaww, this fic was so sweet!

I demand more!

That was actually very cute and all written! We'll done sir!

There's only one thing about this story that I don't like. That's the fact that I find myself wanting more of it even though the odds are that isn't going to happen. Great story man!

This was good. The only thing it left me wanting, other than more:pinkiesmile:, was some idea of how ponies and humans are in the same universe.

5282990 I honestly couldn't tell you the how or even the why. This whole story was the result of a dream, and in that brief universe humans and ponies shared an existence.

Dawww, this was adorable!
horry cripe, I can't take it ;w;

Good work on this! //sobs manly tears

Late comment, but I think you should expand this. I'd love this to be more than a one shot. You already have set interactions of the species so well. I really like this.

6875419 Honestly, I wouldn't know where to begin. It was all based on a simple dream.

6878413 I understand. Could begin with a years later chapter or something. Honestly, it's probably best to leave this piece Gold alone.

Loved this story hun! XD Can't wait to read the rest and tell ya what I thought when you get back on :3

Alicorn is the name for the substance the horn’s made out of

This many years into the fandom, seeing "alicorn" used to mean such a different thing all this time...it's easy to forget the actual dictionary meaning of the word. This fic is from 2014, before all these years of fanon. Although I suppose even in 2014, it wasn't exactly a word in common enough use that the average person would have known this even then.

Rereading this again so many years later and it’s still just as brilliant and sweet as the first time. Thank you for sharing this.

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