The fight
It's been a year since Hoops and his friends have started college. All is well with the group of four, Winter and Lightning were still together as well as Hoops and Rainbow Dash. Everything was great, except for one thing. All four of them were stuck under the ground. The power was out, and they were in a storm shelter. It was a small one, old one, with one table, and 4 blankets. They jumped in when the storms started. The raging storms, supposed to go on for another week. The power had gone out long ago, and Hoops phone just died. There were no long stories to be told. No one had any stories left. No one could write due to the lack of paper and pencil. But, they still had themselves. They could talk about stuff, maybe make something up. But really, there was nothing, until Lightning decided to try to break the silence.
“So, how’s everybody?” Lightning asked, Hoops barely heard him. Due to his dry throat and the thunder, which Hoops was very much afraid of.
“I'm go-” Winter was cut off by the sound of thunder, and Hoops immediately screaming. Wrapping his hooves around Rainbow Dash.
“You will be ok, it’s just a noise” Rainbow commented in the most calming voice that Winter had ever heard.
“I-It’s so loud an-and-” Hoops was cut off by another thunder, but instead of screaming he just hugged Rainbow tighter.
“Hoops you're hurting me” Rainbow responded as Winter and Lightning just watched. Then winter started to chuckle, same as Lightning, thinking the others wouldn’t hear, but they did.
“What's so fun- EEP!” Hoops screamed, letting go of Rainbow and hiding under the table, making Lightning burst into laughter.
“What!?” Hoops questioned, getting a bit angry.
“Your fear… Is so stupid! Sound can’t hu-” Winter put her hoof in his mouth, but Hoops already heard enough.
“You think I am stupid?!” The stallion getting out from under the table and towering over Lightning, who was scooting backward before hitting the cold wall.
“I-I didn’t-” Lightning stammered, but Hoops didn’t let him finish.
“I don’t want to hear it! You said it! You laughed! I am ten seconds away from breaking your skull-” Right as he winded up his hoof to beat Lightning, Rainbow put her hoof on his back. Hoops turned around, his face full of anger, seeing Rainbow having the cutest face. She only did it when Hoops got a short temper. His face, like a wave, forgot the anger and he calmed down. He turned back around seeing Lightning breathing heavily, a tear streaming down his face. Hoops hoof was still winded up to beat Lightning, he slowly put it down, and turned away, not bothering to say sorry. Lightning deserved it. Winter Ice was just watching, frozen and in horror. By the time Hoops returned to his “Bed” Which was just a blanket on the bottom, and a blanket on the top, that Hoops and Rainbow shared, she was completely normal again. The rest of the night was pretty dull. The only occasional conversations were between Hoops and Rainbow when he heard thunder. Winter was a bit angry with Lightning, as to herself for laughing.
Sleep. Sleep is for the weak as some would say. Sleep is a wasteful and a most boring part of life. Hoops is one of those ponies…. Or was. See some symbolic dreams Luna, the princess of night and dreams, would enter some dreams. Telling something. Helping problems… And the most recent thing, telling future. Obviously, the most recent thing she did was new. So many ponies were yet to be experienced with it. One of the first and a test subject would happen to be one of our main characters, Hoops. The rain helped him collapse fast… Under a blanket. Once he is was asleep he couldn't be awakened. It was difficult. But he always awoke at 9:30. No matter what.
Dreams. All caused by Luna. Though in Hoops dream, he was falling. Falling through his memories. Which were not many. It was in a space like the atmosphere and every memory displaying like massive tv screens. Wings. Not working. Like the feathers were breaking the wind of something. They were not working. Hoops did not care much. He has had this dream before. But it did not end like usual.
Hard floor. He slammed into it fast. But it was… Nothing. Doors all around him. All with cutie marks on there. Dashes, his, Bon Bons, Winters… They were all there. Hoops noticed a dark silhouette in the distance. Walking to him. It was only a dream. He was not scared. Just a tad confused. A couple seconds passed. Even when the shadow was next to him he could see it. Until the shadow cast a spell. Luna.
“Greetings subject,” Luna spoke.
“Uhh… Hello.” Hoops sheepishly responded.
“You must be confused. Thi predicted that. Don't worry, you will see it all soon.” She turned to his door.
“See what?” Hoops asked confused.
“Your future,” Luna said, swinging Hoops door open. He got up and walked to it. A forest. House in the forest. Hoops, about the same. A bit more gray in the hair, but fine otherwise. “Your last adventure” she commented. Rainbow Dash in a picture next to his bed. Three children in front of them. Marriage. Pictures from a wedding. Him and… Dash.
“Da fuck?” Hoops was in awe. I mean, he liked Dash and all but never thought of marriage.
“Such profound language is not acceptable.” She slapped Hoops in the nose, though it was a dream it felt real. He put his hoof up to his nose quickly. “You watch your future and you accept it.”
“Fine. Don't hit me again.” He walked back in front the door. It was a bit strange watching himself sleep but… Well no. There are no buts it was weird.
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Hey, I like the idea and I was wondering if you needed an Editor? Grammar and spelling, along with Thine understanding of thee mastery of our Royal Tongue is well-meant, but could use a Once-over ^^ I'd be happy to help if you want ^^
8144526 Yeah. I wrote it a day before I was banned for a year and a half. I don't really care too much about it
8144770 I like it xD the grammar and wording is a little off, but with some time and focus it could be a awesome story ^^ if its not to much to ask, could you Pm me the storyline? I'd like to help at minimal if possible ^^
8144792 In a bit. I gotta make some food first. Can I ask, are you a man or woman
8144794 man xD I guess my wording was weird huh? But yeah, I'm a male in form and soul xD
8145003 Okay
Hay this is really good here,
I would really like to see how this goes for Hoops and Rainbow Dash. Love it. 
And good luck on the next one my friend. 
Hmm... this is an interesting idea and I haven’t seen this connection of Luna’s powers before
However, I think it’s a pity you are explaining that mostly in the description, repeating only small tidbits of it in the story. I think that this is the biggest problem of the story in overall, you swooshed through the beginning very fast, not leaving any space to build-up the atmosphere. For example, who are Winter and Lightning? They seem like a pretty interesting bunch of characters. I’d like to learn more about their looks, history or personality... Or how do Rainbow and Hoops treat each other—that could have been shown very nicely in the part where he can’t sleep. Of course, there were some recurring grammar issues with direct speech and posssessive pronouns, but these are very easy to deal with.
I’m sorry my comment couldn’t be more on the positive side, but I believe honesty is more helpful than plain sugarcoating. If anything was unclear or you want to ask for help, feel free to contact me. PMs and comments work the best, but I’m okay with postal pigeons as well
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I wrote this a long while ago,before I was banned. So it’s going to be bad.
8560344
Oh, I’m sorry to hear that. However, I believe this story is far from ‘bad’.
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I don't even like Hoops anymore, too.
8560358
I see, no problem. Thorax is better, I presume?
8560362
Yes indeed.
Intriguing. The haitus is most likely indefinite, but this story isn't that bad.
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Yeah. Most of my stories have been put on hiatus as I don’t really feel like writing much anymore.
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It's alright. You're a good writer, but the good ones always have highs and lows in their motivation. Maybe one day you'll find you want to again? Who knows?