A Day With Octavia

TA Day with Vinyl Scratch
MLP: FiM
Romance
Drama
Sad
One Heartbreak it all it took. Vinyl Scratch is now Finding a Answer that is Roaming inside her head will she find it or will she forever be in Pain and Sorrow?
Human
DJ P0N-3
OC
Raikiry · 3.9k words · 11 5 · 877 views

Logan Is a Average Musician like any other but what happens when one beautiful musician visit him and tell her problems and confess her feelings about him. Will accept her feelings or will he Decline it?

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RNBW

RNBW #1 · Jan 7th, 2016 · 1 · ·

First off, improve your grammar. There are some parts that needs the comma and the names always start with
capital letters: Vinyl, Octavia, etc.

Of course, that doesn't make you a bad writter. You just need to improve.

Trithtale

Trithtale #2 · Jan 7th, 2016 · · ·

6808576 Yeah that would be my fault, because it would seem that I missed a few spots when editing.

RNBW

RNBW #3 · Jan 7th, 2016 · · ·

6808684
Oh, this was a colab, isn't?

Trithtale

Trithtale #4 · Jan 7th, 2016 · · ·

6808735 Nope, I just did some editing for Niseoi.

RNBW

RNBW #5 · Jan 7th, 2016 · · ·

6808740
Oh, okay.

Beacon Student Ruby Rose

Beacon Student Ruby Rose #6 · Jan 9th, 2016 · · ·

Sorry but its too quick paced, I feel the conflicted was resolved way too fast and also we never learned more of the OC's background story to know why Octavia fell in love with him.

Trithtale

Trithtale #7 · Mar 11th, 2016 · · ·

6812661 I'm so sorry, that I missed so many things!

Trithtale

Trithtale #8 · Mar 12th, 2016 · · ·

7023642 Okay fine, I'll admit this was my worst editing job ever. Are you happy now?

Trithtale

Trithtale #9 · Mar 12th, 2016 · · ·

7023714 Oh I see. Yeah, I was not involved with the description mate.

Trithtale

Trithtale #10 · Mar 12th, 2016 · · ·

7024017 Oh. Okay then.

meadowlark

meadowlark #11 · Sep 6th, 2016 · · ·

Do you want me to do an edit? Won't affect the story just from a readability perspective. Are you writing in the past or present tense, as it switches back and forth.

Raikiry