This story is a sequel to Krampus comes to ponyville
Celestia has noticed the dark cloud that hangs over head on her kingdom and also on the faces of her subjects. It is up to her to come face to face with the monster that started it all last heartswarming day however instead of waiting for him to come again on this heartswarming eve she shall wait for him on Krampus night to finally settle the score.
Alright. So I see that you have more words, and less chapters. Let's see how this ride goes this time.
6817286 servay says crap, i've really put my all into this and i tried to be a bit more descriptive.
Editing is fun.
So, first words.
"Merry Hearts Warming" Okay, Marry =/= Merry. Be sure to keep this known.
"To all an dark night" Improper sentence is improper. I'm not even sure what you were going for this.
Since I'm not as evil as I seem. I'll rewrite this sentence for you.
I like how your grammar has improved, but you shouldn't use 'an'. It sounds improper when you read it out loud. "Celestia will soon deliver AN tribute." Doesn't sound right, neither does "or risk an riot".
Also, excepts =/= expects. Could be just a typo though ;)
I've gotta stop here, but I'm only scratching the surface. Be sure to proof read, my friend!
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As long as you continue to put your all into it, you can get better.
Survey*. And be sure to capitalize your i's